Reviews by Narya
Let Us Be Friends by sylc Rated: G [Reviews - 6]
Summary: Lindir is the only elfling in Imladris and is lonely. However, when Glorfindel tries to befriend him, Lindir refuses on account of Glorfindel's great age.
Categories: Book-verse, Movie-verse Characters: Glorfindel, Lindir
Genres: General, Humor
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 788 Read Count: 1058
Published: Nov 01 2008 Updated: Nov 01 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Let Us Be Friends Reviewer: Narya Signed
Aww! I enjoyed this a lot, especially the way you've given each character a distinctive voice. Well done :)

Author's Response: Thanks Narya! I'm happy you enjoyed it.
Date: Nov 02 2008
Summary: An essay of how this site has affected my life. Response to challenge from Karlmir Stonewain
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Essay
Warnings: None
Challenges: My Portal to Middle Earth
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 427 Read Count: 1467
Published: Nov 17 2008 Updated: Nov 17 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: My Middle Earth Portal Reviewer: Narya Signed
I also found this site through google, I was totally bored one afternoon in Freshers' Week, and hey presto...a new obsession was born. I agree with your comments about how supportive other authors are too - they've really encouraged me.

One thing - I think you mean "spurred," not "spurned" - "spurned" means "rejected" as in "I spurned his love."

Take care! :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Oops hehe yeah thanks :D i'll change that.
Date: Nov 17 2008
Alter-Egos by owlett Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 17]
Summary: What if all the main characters were women? Response to callerofcrows challenge.
Categories: Movie-verse, Off Topic Characters: Aragorn, Boromir, Elrond, Frodo, Gimli, Glóin, Legolas, Merry, Other Canon Character, Pippin, Sam, Sauron, The Fellowship
Genres: Humor
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), Violence
Challenges: Alter-egos
Series: My Crossovers
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 1535 Read Count: 5291
Published: Nov 18 2008 Updated: Nov 23 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Froda and the Ring Reviewer: Narya Signed
Haha, some nice touches in here...I especially liked the Ladyship of the Ring, Lass's bow, and Saruwoman. Good work, Owlett; keep it up, this is fun!
Date: Nov 26 2008
Summary: Young Sam Gamgee is playing with the Cotton children. Set between 'The Hobbit' and 'The Lord of the RIngs'.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Sam
Genres: General
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 399 Read Count: 1212
Published: Nov 22 2008 Updated: Nov 22 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Narya Signed
Aw :) this put a smile on my face. I especially liked young Rosie, though Sam was cute too.
Date: Feb 14 2009
Summary: On a late summer night, young Estel offers words of comfort to a grieving Legolas. Non-slash oneshot/drabble.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Legolas
Genres: Angst
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 615 Read Count: 2244
Published: Nov 24 2008 Updated: Nov 24 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: A Child's Wisdom Reviewer: Narya Signed
Aww. That was lovely. You captured Estel's voice really well; I love reading fics with Legolas and young Estel, and this one was particularly cute.
Date: Nov 24 2008
Summary: Gilraen reflects on how Estel his like his father.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Aragorn, Gilraen
Genres: Other
Warnings: None
Series: Christmas Themes
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 410 Read Count: 1733
Published: Dec 02 2008 Updated: Dec 02 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Just Like You Reviewer: Narya Signed
Absolutely gorgeous. This is such a touching story; I love young Estel! Sweet without being mawkish or sentimental, and you've structured it very well. Thanks for this.

Author's Response: You're welcome. A lot of people don't show the way Gilraen would have felt. I will probably explore that a little more in the future.
Date: Jan 23 2009
Summary: Extremely dramatic and slight AU. Legolas, Gimli, Frodo and Sam are now in the Undying Lands and they are each dealing with their own problems. This story also gives Merry's and Pippin's views from back in the Shire as they learn to deal with new difficulties and their feelings. As Sam learns to grieve, Frodo copes with his illness, Legolas has bad dreams and Gimli is asked for advice, they are all put through trauma in an unexpected conclusion.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Frodo, Gandalf / Olorin, Gimli, Legolas, Merry, Pippin, Sam
Genres: Angst, Mystery
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), Violence
Series: Cute Merry-Pippin stories!
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 17260 Read Count: 11072
Published: Dec 20 2008 Updated: Feb 09 2009 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Arrival Reviewer: Narya Signed
I'm really enjoying this so far - I really like your writing style and I think you capture your characters perfectly. The only thing I would criticise is your summary; I think you're seriously underselling a well-written story by putting that it's "not as dramatic as it sounds"!!

Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Ok then, thanks for the critisism! Looking back, it is really dramatic! I'm glad you've reviewed and that you think it's well-written! The new chapter is up as soon as I've applied the finishing touches! Thanks again, meerkatalex
Date: Jan 14 2009
Kissing Rain by Anwyn Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 8]
Summary: If you truly love something, you must also be prepared to let it go.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Elphir
Genres: Angst, Romance
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2815 Read Count: 1544
Published: Dec 30 2008 Updated: Dec 30 2008 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Narya Signed
I read this without having read "Child of Storms," but even so I still loved it! It was structured perfectly, and your descriptions are absolutely gorgeous. The subject matter is something we can all identify with, too - those moments that we forever look back on and think "what if...?"

I guess in your AU these two end up together? Actually, no, don't tell me. I'll read it and find out :)

Take care,
Narya

Author's Response: First I must applogize for not responding to this sooner, usually I am quicker as I feel if someone is kind enough to leave a review for something I have written a response is the very least I can do! I don't get an e-mail or anything telling me when I have a new review so I didn't even realize before now, so I applogize. Thank you so much, It pleases me to no end to know that you enjoyed this and it was strongly inspired by the song that it is named after which I think it so vivid in it lyrics that it drew such a strong 'What if?" situation in my mind that I could not help but read it. It also seemed to suit the characters in my mind. Oh yes I have had countless moments that I have looked back upon and wondered "What if?" What if I had acted differently, what if I had gone instead of staying and vice versa and that is what part of this story is. I do love drappling in the "What if?" aspect of my stories at times becuase one event can potentially have so many intresting outcomes. It is also funny, writing an AU of an AU! Alright, I shall not ruin the story for then and you can find out what happens for yourself! Thank you so much for your lovely review, It means alot! All the best, Anwyn.

Author's Response: First I must applogize for not responding to this sooner, usually I am quicker as I feel if someone is kind enough to leave a review for something I have written a response is the very least I can do! I don't get an e-mail or anything telling me when I have a new review so I didn't even realize before now, so I applogize. Thank you so much, It pleases me to no end to know that you enjoyed this and it was strongly inspired by the song that it is named after which I think it so vivid in it lyrics that it drew such a strong 'What if?" situation in my mind that I could not help but read it. It also seemed to suit the characters in my mind. Oh yes I have had countless moments that I have looked back upon and wondered "What if?" What if I had acted differently, what if I had gone instead of staying and vice versa and that is what part of this story is. I do love drappling in the "What if?" aspect of my stories at times becuase one event can potentially have so many intresting outcomes. It is also funny, writing an AU of an AU! Alright, I shall not ruin the story for then and you can find out what happens for yourself! Thank you so much for your lovely review, It means alot! All the best, Anwyn.
Date: Feb 21 2009
Summary: I think the title explains it all.
Categories: Off Topic Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Asfaloth, Bilbo, Boromir, Celeborn, Celebrķan, Eldarion, Elladan, Elrohir, Elrond, Galadriel, Haldir, Merry, Nazgūl, Other Canon Character, Sam, Saruman, Sauron, The Fellowship, Witch King
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Fantasy, General, Humor, Mystery, Other, Parody, Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 34 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 13470 Read Count: 40243
Published: Jan 09 2009 Updated: Jun 21 2010 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Entry 1 (Ada says to put the date but I don't feel like it now.) Reviewer: Narya Signed
Oh, that was so funny! :D nice to see an update to this - I'll send you a more detailed message later on, but for now suffice to say that this entry put a huge grin on my face!

Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: Mar 22 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Entry 1 (Ada says to put the date but I don't feel like it now.) Reviewer: Narya Signed
Totally agree with ladygreensleeves about Johnny Cash ^-^ ahem, this is another lovely chapter...I have an idea what's coming up next, but I won't spoil it for everyone else! I'm just fiddling with the next chapter of Trapped (planning to post that later this evening) and once that's done and up I'll send you an email and we can have a proper discussion!

Very romantic wedding scene, though. Nice job :-)

Author's Response:

Yes, Johnny Cash played a little bit of a role in helping me find the title of WTL, haha :). Thanks for th praise. I'm pretty sure you do know what's going to happen next, but if you're thinking what I'm thinking, then there are a few events between that and the current entry that need to happen first. Looking forward to your email!

Date: Apr 21 2009
Title: Chapter 33: July 2508 Reviewer: Narya Signed
Aw, cute update! The peeping tom...I wonder who he could be...?

One small thing - "undoubtably " should be undoubtedly :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review and correction! Honestly, I don't know what I'd do without your help!
Date: Jun 23 2010
Title: Chapter 34: July 2508 Reviewer: Narya Signed
AWWWW! Even cuter :) yay for baby Elves!

Author's Response: Yay baby Elves! :D
Date: Jun 23 2010
Summary: Eleven Walkers/ Alex and James, are both soldiers of the Union army during the Civil War, they had never had a chance to show their courage on the field of battle, have been sent to Middle Earth after a cannon ball took their lives.
This is their second chance, with the help of some new friends, they will be sent on an adventure in a world they had never heard of
Categories: Book-verse, Movie-verse Characters: The Fellowship
Genres: Action/Adventure
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 18 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 31515 Read Count: 15355
Published: Jan 12 2009 Updated: Jan 27 2009 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: The Soldier Reviewer: Narya Signed
Well, first off I'm bound to like any story about someone called Alex...:p no, seriously, this is good, it's interesting to have OC's from a different period of history than modern day. Also, you can really see your technique as a writer improving as the story goes on. Keep it up!

PS I have a couple of thoughts on what I might do for your challenge, though they're a bit random...

Author's Response: Hey I don't mind randomness at all! I mean look at Kitt's story for my challenge, its a humorous story about her turning into an otter. So again I don't mind! Dune
Date: Feb 05 2009
Summary: Poem about animal cruelty.
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Poetry, Tragedy
Warnings: Character Death
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 162 Read Count: 1140
Published: Jan 18 2009 Updated: Jan 18 2009 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Narya Signed
Ohhh I have a lump in my throat!! Beautiful and moving; I like your pararhymes and abstract structure, a lot of WW1 poets like Owen and Sassoon used similar techniques to help convey the complexity of what they were writing about. Just a minor typo in the fourth verse (sorry, I know I'm being picky) - in the line "Everything i've known," you need to capitalize your i. That's a small thing though; this is a really lovely piece of work.

If you haven't already read it, might I suggest you Google the essay/short story "How Could You?" by Jim Willis. I have never known anyone to read it and remain dry-eyed, and it deals with similar issues to your poem.

Hope to see more from you soon.

Author's Response: Thank you and it's no problem I do have a bit of a problem with grammer so any tips are helpful. I've never read that poem before i'll go check ti out thanks for the recomendation.
Date: Jan 18 2009
Summary:

2009 MEFA Third Place Winner in the Adventure Category. 

Brandon wakes up in the middle of a forest in another world. Is it a dream? Or is he stuck in an unfamiliar place where his life might no longer matter? Please read and review!


Categories: Book-verse Characters: Arwen, Balrog, Bill the Pony, Celeborn, Galadriel, Orcs/Uruk-Hai, Original Character, Sauron, The Fellowship
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, General, Humor
Warnings: Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 50612 Read Count: 35161
Published: Jan 24 2009 Updated: Jul 08 2009 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 31: Goodbye, Brother Reviewer: Narya Signed
Oh...what a way to end!

This is perfectly paced, the emotions are utterly convincing and your descriptions just keep on getting better - I loved "the blood red sun grinning at him over the rocky shores", fabulous stuff! And yes, you made me cry. Boromir's goodbye plea to Brandon was really touching, and I was in agony right along with Brandon when he wanted to tell Boromir about his fate. The line that made me really choke up, though, was "His brother was dead." It's so simple and bleak and final - an A-grade heartbreaker indeed.

I can't wait for the gapfiller, and I look forwards to reading the beginning of book two when I get home :-)

Will email shortly and say more - for now, though, well done. You should be extremely proud.

Author's Response:

Thank you! You know, this story wouldn't be half of what it is without your help. If WTL was a published work, the entire series would be dedicated to you as well as my family. I am proud of completeing the first book...this is the first time I've completed something that wasn't a short story. Thank you so so so so much for helping me along the way.

The gapfiller will be out possibly after next week, book two will be longer in the making!

Date: Jul 08 2009
Title: Chapter 27: Brother to Brother Reviewer: Narya Signed
Cannot. Stop. Crying.

No criticism, no nitpicks - just bloody fantastic writing. Congratulations. Utterly wonderful.

Author's Response: *absolutely beaming* You have no idea how happy this review made me!!! As soon as I read this I got a huge smile on my face an did a gigantic happy dance. Sorry that the chapter made you so weepy, even though that was the intent! Thanks for the review!
Date: Jun 06 2009
Title: Chapter 26: Heavy Thoughts Reviewer: Narya Signed
"My kingdom for a horse. My brother for a secret. Is this what Judas felt like?"

*Goosebumps run up arm*

This is brilliant! What a chapter :-D and gosh, when he finds out about Boromir...your description of his reaction is vivid and moving, and I have to admit I had a lump in my throat. These next few chapters are going to be major tear-jerkers, aren't they?

Well done!

Author's Response:

Not major tear-jerkers...maybe a little saddening, but nothing huge. Not yet, anyways. There's still quite a few chapters between now and the breaking of the Fellowship.

Thank you so much for the review! I'm happy that it came out well! Writing is like baking...too much or too little of something makes the finished product nasty. I thought I had overdone it!

Thanks for the review and talk to you soon!

Date: May 28 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Not in Kansas Anymore... Reviewer: Narya Signed
Loving this, callerofcrows - hilarious and touching, and Brandon's really easy to identify with. Poor guy, I feel so sorry for him!

I've sent you an email with more detailed thoughts on the story, but I thought I'd leave you a review too, since I know how nice it is to get them :) keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm actually checking my email right now...and making the corrections! Thanks so much for being a wonderful Beta reader.
Date: Feb 12 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Not in Kansas Anymore... Reviewer: Narya Signed
Hey again...sorry, I only just picked up on this, but I noticed this story is rated G. With the language Brandon's coming out with, I think it needs to be upped to either PG13 or R...I think I'd go with R, just to be on the safe side. I think Adora's general advice on this issue is to rate your story higher than it needs to be, rather than risk offending anyone.

This isn't to say I'm against strong language or anything - well, you're read my fics, you know I'm not! In fact, I think the story would be worse without it; it's in context and appropriate. You just need to warn people, that's all.

Take care,
Narya

Author's Response: Thanks Narya! I forgot about the rating...thank you thank you thank you.
Date: Feb 13 2009
Title: Chapter 6: Leaving Imladris Reviewer: Narya Signed
Haha yeah I caught the reference...nice little in-joke :) speak soon.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you picked up on it. I felt silly putting that in there, but I figured it couldn't hurt. Thanks for the review!
Date: Feb 18 2009
Title: Chapter 22: The Voice Reviewer: Narya Signed
Ohh, so Brandon's beginning to feel the pull of the Ring...a lovely bit of writing there :-)

It was with a smile on his lips and a full stomach that Brandon fell asleep, leaning against the mighty trunk of a tree he'd never seen. His dreams that night were ones of magic and bliss, of golden stars in the pale clouds, of flying, and singing himself into the Nimrodel and down to the sea.

He could not have known that the darkness was stirring as he slept.


I love the contrast between those two paragraphs! Well done.

I'll send you an email about this and Moria soon.

Author's Response: Thank you! I like this chapter best out of the ones I've written so far! I can't wait for your email!
Date: May 12 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Not in Kansas Anymore... Reviewer: Narya Signed
Best chapter yet, I think; my heart's still pounding! Detailed feedback coming up very soon via email.

Author's Response: Okay, thanks!
Date: Apr 14 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Not in Kansas Anymore... Reviewer: Narya Signed
Another lovely chapter - like Dune, I was really moved by the descriptions of the Fellowship'd grief, and I think you ended on the perfect note, hopeful but not too chirpy. This is turning into a truly engrossing story; keep it up!

PS Sorry I haven't emailed about this one yet; I'll send you longer message in a day or so, but at the moment I'm in the middle of writing a history essay - oh, joy... :p take care and speak soon.

Author's Response:

Thanks! This chapter was so tough to write. I was so concentrated on Moria that I didn't really plan what I was going to do next! I was worried about sounding chirpy, your review has brought me a lot of relief.

Good luck with your history essay, I'm sure you'll do well!

I'll have some new chapters up soon. The swine flu has hit my town, and school has been cancelled until next week. 

Date: Apr 30 2009
Title: Chapter 23: Into the Eaves of Gold Reviewer: Narya Signed
Excellent again! For a second I thought you were going to deviate from the books and have the Orcs find them when Brandon kicked that twig - my heart was in my mouth :-) keep going!

Author's Response:

I did almost deviate from the books by having Brandon fall into the Celebrant. However, Moriah listened to my plot ideas and told me to give poor Brandon a break. So I did. I had it all written out but my internet crashed, and Moriah dissuaded me from re-writing it. I'm glad this version was good though! Thanks for the review!

*Mini Plot Spoiler* I may deviate from the books a litte further into the story

 

Date: May 14 2009
Title: Chapter 30: To the Other Shore Reviewer: Narya Signed
Oh, gosh...the tension builds like a thunderstorm in this chapter!! The next one's going to be an A-grade heartbreaker, isn't it? Poor Brandon :-( the internal monologue you give him is really moving and extremely realistic.

Something that jumped out at me was Brandon noticing that the stars and moon are the same as back home. I thought this was a lovely touch - an example of the details you weave into this story that set it so far above the majority of Tenth Walkers.

Author's Response:

I posted Ch. thirty-one not too long ago...it just might be an A-grade heartbreaker, I think whether it is or not will ulitimately be up to you :-). I'm glad you liked the monologue, I was afraid it was too over-the-top!

Ah, so you liked that little detail! Yay! Thanks for the review!

Date: Jul 07 2009