Penname: Narya [Contact] Real name: Alex
Member Since: 25/10/08
Membership status: Member
Bio:
I am female, 20 years old, currently living in Scotland and studying for a degree in English; I'm an avid reader and I've loved LOTR ever since my Uncle introduced me to the Bakshi cartoon as a toddler. Apparently, I was a somehwat sadistic child - according to my Uncle, I always wanted to fast-forward to the bit where Frodo got stabbed...make of that what you will.

I developed my fanfiction habit by accident - unpacking my bags when I first arrived at university, I discoverd (gasp!) that I'd left my copies of The Hobbit, LOTR and The Silmarillion at home. Whilst googling to see if there was anywhere I could read them online, I stumbled across this site...and that was it. I was addicted.

I write and read whatever takes my fancy, both in fanfic and original work. Other favourite books include the Harry Potter series, William Golding's Lord of the Flies, Richard Adams' Watership Down, Susan Hill's Strange Meeting, Toni Morrison's Beloved, Sebastian Faulks' Birdsong, Charles Terrot's An Alligator Named Daisy, Chris Woodings's Poison, Winifred Watson's Miss Pettigrew Lives for a Day, Hester Burton's In Spite of All Terror, Louis de Bernières's Captain Corelli's Mandolin and the fairy tales of the Brothers Grimm, as well as anything by any of the following writers:

Chaucer
Shakespeare
Dickens
Austen
The Brontës
TS Eliot
PG Wodehouse
Thomas Hardy
Elizabeth Gaskell
DH Lawrence
William Faulkner
Rupert Brooke
Evelyn Waugh
Oscar Wilde
Gabriel Garcia Marquez
Ian McEwan
Ted Hughes
Haruki Murakami
Kazuo Ishiguro

I can't recommend any of the above works or authors highly enough.


What originally started me writing? Simple - envy. I was a tiny kid just out of nursery. It was the end of the day, and I was sitting on the rug with the rest of my class for show-and-tell, listening to one of the boys talk about the "book" his Mum had helped him make. It was only a few sheets of paper stapled together, with a Power Ranger on the cover and nothing on the inside, but my teacher was thrilled with it - she cooed over it, gave the boy a gold star and put the "book" in pride of place, smack in the middle of the display shelf.

Like a lot of kids, I was an attention seeker. I wasn't happy that the "book" had received so much praise (not to mention a much-coveted gold star) and my "artwork" merely a smile and a well done. I decided to make a book too - except mine would be better. Mine was going to be a proper big girl's book with words inside.

That night, I sat down with my Grandad and dictated a story about a little girl going on an outing to the fair. He found me a sheaf of plain A4 paper and helped me copy my story out, one sentence to a page, left me to illustrate it and then stapled it all together when I was done. Me and Grandad making "books" together became a bit of a weekly tradition. As I got further into school I found I didn't need to dictate the stories to him any more - I could write them myself - but I always gave them to him for approval before I showed anybody else. I've never looked back; I've been writing constantly since then. As I grew up I became more secretive about my work, hiding it from all but my siblings and a few close friends, to whom I often granted cameos - and then my Grandad died. He never got to see the best of my stuff; possibly he was unaware that I still wrote at all.

This coincided with me finding this site. I "lurked" for a while, then eventually decided it was time to start sharing again. I began to post Tolkien-related stories here, followed by original work on TMoA...and that brings me more or less up to date.

I'd like to say some thankyou's before I shut up - firstly, to my readers, for taking the time to check out my work. Secondly, to everyone who's reviewed my stories, for all your help and encouragement - it's greatly appreciated, believe me. Thirdly, to the other authors on this site whose works have given me so much pleasure, especially those who are on my Favourites list. Read their stories; they're all wonderful.

And last but not least, to Grandad, of course. God bless.

Disclaimer:

I own none of JRR Tolkien's characters or any other product of his extraordinary imagination; all stories are written purely for my own enjoyment (and hopefully the enjoyment of the readers!) and I make no money whatsoever from them.


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SOME NOTES ON MY STORIES

04/02/2010 - some of you might be wondering where and why Trapped and Under The Greenwood Trees have gone. I'm afraid the answer is purely selfish - I couldn't face all those WIPs staring at me every time I logged on to my account. They have not been abandoned for good - Trapped is about to undergo a re-write to incorporate it into my Second Chance storyverse, after which I will start re-posting. Under The Greenwood Trees has been placed on hiatus thanks to my decision to expand Second Chance into a series; since there were only 1000 words or so of it posted, I didn't think it would be any great loss to anyone. Between my new series, Three, the Trapped re-write, my Harry Potter WIP and my o-fic, I think I've got enough to be going on with - plus I don't think it's fair on the readers to be hanging on for updates that aren't going to come.

So there you go. Anything I've left up that is incomplete is almost certain to be updated in the near future and to keep getting updated. Thank you very much to all the lovely people who reviewed and favourited the stories I've taken down; just because I removed my work doesn't mean that I don't appreciate your support and encouragement hugely.

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Second Chance by Narya Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 135]
Summary: When fifteen-year-old Anna loses her sister in a freak horseriding accident, she has no way of knowing that Izzy has been given another chance to live and love. However, the afterlife works in mysterious ways; soon Anna is plagued by dreams that link her to a young woman from an age long, long forgotten, and to a blue-eyed foal that she has a nagging feeling she should recognise...

A response to Dunedain Ranger of the North's "Animal Transformations" challenge. Rated PG-13 for character death, emotional content and some mild language.
Categories: Book-verse, Movie-verse, Crossovers
Characters: Original Character
Genres: Angst, Drama, Family, Friendship, Hurt/Comfort, Other
Warnings: Character Death
Challenges: Animal Transformations
Series: Second Chance
Chapters: 31 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 64189 Read Count: 28011
[Report This] Published: 12/02/09 Updated: 16/04/10
Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 29/06/09 Title: Chapter 8: Dinner and a Discovery

Oooops - typo in my response to Spiced Wine's review. "Unwillingly" was supposed to read "willingly." Temporary brain meltdown :p anyway this was the only way to correct it without deleting the review - and I don't want to do that :-)

Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 01/02/10 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

Oh, typo in my response to Tinara's review - should read "made me realise." Sorry! :)

Summary: Orlando Bloom is going away to New Zealand to act as Legolas Greenleaf. There Legolas in the movie has a girlfriend and her name is Hannah Walker.
Categories: Actor Fics
Characters: Original Character, Orlando Bloom
Genres: Angst, General, Humor, Other, Romance, Tragedy
Warnings: Character Death
Series: None
Chapters: 15 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 15016 Read Count: 8928
[Report This] Published: 19/02/09 Updated: 04/03/09
Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 21/02/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

OK, I've noticed you've been posting this story for a while and haven't received any reviews, so I thought I'd leave you some feedback. Your OC, Hannah, is nicely written - she comes across as fun and likeable yet naïve, and you've captured her bond with Billy well (I'd like to see a bit of backstory with these two, some sort of explanation as to how they know each other so well). However, in giving her purple eyes and a tragic past, you're walking a very fine tightrope in terms of Mary-Suedom (if you're not familiar with what this means, follow this link: Some of it won't apply to your character, since you're writing an actor fic, but it should give you a fair idea of what a Mary-Sue is). Also, your grammar needs some work; you keep switching between tenses, and occasionally you use words that don't make sense in context, e.g. I think when you're describing how Orlando "symphonised" with Hannah, you really mean "sympathised." I'd advise you to look for a beta reader; there's a thread on the home page of this site you can check, and also it might be worth searching for one at fanfiction.net as that site has a wider reader base and therefore more registered betas.

I'm not being deliberately harsh; I think you've got potential, but there are issues you need to work on. I'd be interested to see how you develop as a writer.

Take care,
Narya

Author's Response: I have no intended of copyrighting any ter people work. Like Hannah with purple eyes and a tragic past. i have has this ida for a long time. i am writing it jst for fun and something to do. and i just felt like writing.

Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 21/02/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Sorry, the link I posted in my last review didn't work. Try copy pasting this into your browser: http://alswaiter.codedaemon.com/LOTR/lotrlt.htm

Author's Response: i am sorry this may seem very mary sue.. i like to write more or less all the detail and not just going to the main parts. really just want to write a classic scenario. i thank you dearlyfor your advice and i will tak it in. but i believe if people don't really wan to read just clik away. i am notbeing harash to your advice. i like it. and i appreciate it. if you could, any more hints appreciated.

Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 23/02/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I agree with xFanarix's comments below; nobody has flamed you, it just doesn't happen on this site. Don't, however, give up - though by all means take chapters down for re-editing, this is excellent practice. The more you write, the more you will improve. Good luck.

Author's Response: thank you for the advice. I willbe re editing and so forth. And I am going to let everyone know that my first language is english. I can't look at the computer screen and type at the same time.

Summary:

A ring can represent practically anything. Undying love, a silent promise, real friendship, commitment, but also nobility, worship or faith. There are rings that symbolize dependence, enslavement, eternity, and apparently there is one that stands for all that’s evil in this world. But let’s not forget a ring is nothing more than a piece of metal that fits nicely around a finger. It doesn’t even have to be pretty.

So don’t ask me why I ended up risking my life, going on this quest to destroy one. I mean, you can’t really blame me for getting caught up in things I don’t even believe in, right?

Be warned: this is a tenth walker fic and English is my second language. It’s possible you’ll hate this story, but don’t forget you’re not legally obliged to do so. And seriously, I really like readers and absolutely love reviewers.


Categories: Movie-verse
Characters: Aragorn, Boromir, Frodo, Gandalf / Olorin, Gimli, Legolas, Merry, Original Character, Pippin, Sam
Genres: Action/Adventure, General, Romance
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), First Draft
Series: None
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 60000 Read Count: 49838
[Report This] Published: 04/03/09 Updated: 27/03/14
Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 26/05/09 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1

Hi Ndil!

Firstly, if you hadn't said anything, I wouldn't have realised that English isn't your second language :-)
so congratulations.

Secondly, I agree with xFanarix - I don't feel like this is "just another Tenth Walker". It's funny, for a start; far too many GIMEs just leap straight into the angst and romance. I have to say, falling into ME whilst dressed in ski attire isn't something I've come across before! ;-)

Well done. I'll keep reading.

Author's Response: Hi Narya, thanks for reading and reviewing. I hope you'll keep enjoying it. I guess the good thing about writing in a foreign language versus speaking that language is that at least no one notices the accent. So I just have to try to keep my grammar clean, and only microsoft knows how often I use my spelling checker :P. Don't ever hesitate to tell me if I messed up somewhere. Thanks!

Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 01/07/09 Title: Chapter 16: Chapter 15

“ Do Elves ever have a midlife-crisis?”

LOL!

Sorry for the lack of reviews, Ndil; I haven't abandoned the story, I'm still following. I've just had a busy period.

This is still a fresh and fun take on the standard girl-from-our-time-goes-to-ME plot; your OFC is likeable and interesting, and her relationships with the Fellowship are touching and realistic. I also like how you have her making comparisons to modern objects and technology, e.g. the palantir to Skype. An all-around good job.

Author's Response: Thank you again! I'm glad you found this bit funny, it was supposed to be :P. I'm also glad your still following! And the plot of this story is a 100% standard girl from our time goed to ME plot. I just try to use Iris to make up for that. Thanx!

Summary: Maedhros is my favorite character. *sighs* I love him, so I wrote this little drabble as if I was in his world. I think I was talking to my Maedhros muse when I wrote it. It's not really much of anything, but I thought I would share it anyway.

I call Maedhros by his mother-name Maitimo, just in case it confuses someone.
Categories: Off Topic
Characters: Maedhros
Genres: Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 320 Read Count: 1484
[Report This] Published: 08/03/09 Updated: 08/03/09
Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 23/03/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

This is so unbelievably beautiful, Los Gloriol; I don't think there's a woman alive who couldn't identify with the sentiments you've captured so perfectly. Utterly poetic. Gorgeous. Brought a lump to my throat. Instant favourite.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! :D Your words touched me because that was exactly the feelings I was trying to convey. I am so flattered by your review. This, of all my writing means the most and to have people love it just so wonderful. Thank you again! By the way, I really enjoyed your essay. It brought up so many great points. We ned more people like you out there challenging preconceived ideas. Great stuff!

Summary: The lost first draft of The Hobbit. We can see, now, why Tolkien rid himself of it as it is really very repetitive and annoying to read.
Categories: Book-verse
Characters: None
Genres: Humor
Warnings: None
Challenges: Bad Beginnings
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 280 Read Count: 1475
[Report This] Published: 22/03/09 Updated: 22/03/09
Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 22/03/09 Title: Chapter 1: A Party Not Expected

Teehee!! I'm glad the professor did a bit of editing here! Very funny; nice work :-)

Author's Response: Thank you! :) I'm glad the "Professor" decided it a bit excessive myself. lol

Summary: The greatest harm can come from the best intentions. A young woman is thrown into Middle-earth, will she be able to hold her own among the nine companions? Will her desire to help cause more harm than good?
Categories: Movie-verse
Characters: Legolas, Original Character
Genres: Action/Adventure, Humor, Romance
Warnings: Graphic Sex
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 49536 Read Count: 9204
[Report This] Published: 22/04/09 Updated: 10/09/09
Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 22/04/09 Title: Chapter 1: The Elephant Hawk Moth

Hey! I saw you were new to the site and thought I'd stop to say hi and leave you some feedback.

Yes, you're right, this has been done before...but that doesn't mean it can't be done well. There are some fantastic Tenth Walker stories on this site (I strongly recommend you take a look at Pink Siamese's "Hobbitland") along with the...ah...not so good :p in my experience, writing a decent Tenth Walker is a question of writing well, avoiding OOC behaviour in canon characters and making sure your modern-day character has enough depth to avoid the dreaded label of Mary Sue.

You're already one step ahead of the vast majority of Tenth Walker writers in that your writing style is fluid and concise, though I'd like to see a little more in the way of description. I think you've made some interesting choices with this piece, such as having a fae/fairy/supernatural creature lead her into Middle Earth, which suggests some greater reason for her being there. If handled right, this could bring a lot of depth to the story that many tenth walker fics lack - too often it's just a case of a girl falling through a random portal! I also liked that she found it difficult to accept she's there; another thing that tends to annoy me about this kind of story is that the girl tends not to be bothered about having suddenly fallen into another dimension and possibly not being able to go back. I really like your decision to make Legolas dark-haired, too; that makes an intriguing change!

Nitpick: "elf" should be capitalized.

I'll keep my eye on this; I'm curious about where you'll take it. Is it a WIP or have you finished it already?

Take care,
Narya

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review, I hope that I can stray from the cliché and overused. ^_^ Sorry, I didn't even realize I hadn't capitalized 'elf' I'll go through and fix that. It's still WIP, I'm not even close to finished. Hehe, I'm not even through the first book yet...I intend to take this to the very end.

Summary: King Aragorn has an intresting dream.
Categories: Book-verse
Characters: Aragorn
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Challenges: Animal Transformations
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 341 Read Count: 1470
[Report This] Published: 04/05/09 Updated: 04/05/09
Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 09/05/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Nice work; I enjoyed this. Short, sweet and smart.

The descriptions of the cheese made me feel hungry!

Author's Response: Me too. I love cheese, so I pay attention to it. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Summary:

Moriah is your standard college girl. Nothing out of the ordinary. So why are there nine confused travellers at her dorm? I promise this is not a Sue-fic.


Categories: Crossovers, Off Topic
Characters: Original Character, The Fellowship
Genres: Fantasy, General, Humor
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 3948 Read Count: 6353
[Report This] Published: 04/05/09 Updated: 02/08/09
Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 12/05/09 Title: Chapter 1: I swear to God, I'm not tripping.

Teeheehee, this just gets better and better! I loved the title for this chapter, and I think Pippin's reaction to the car alarm is spot on; he probably would find it absolutely terrifying. Keep going, please!

Author's Response: More is on the way! I'm so glad you liked the title, I'm having fun making them up.

Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 09/05/09 Title: Chapter 1: I swear to God, I'm not tripping.

Oh, this is so funny!! Great job! :-D I loved Pippin setting off the car alarm - so typical! And...Gandalf swears!? I'm scandalized! (Not really - it works well. I didn't stop laughing the whole way through).

Author's Response: I'm sure Gandalf does swear, just not when everyone else can hear him. Although this situation probably warrants a few curse-words. Thanks for the review, I'm glad the story is humorous!

Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 04/05/09 Title: Chapter 1: I swear to God, I'm not tripping.

LOL! Very funny, caller, and a nice reversal of the usual GIME situation - I love reading about LOTR characters in our time :-)

Author's Response: In a way GIME is so much easier to write because the characters have to do the explaining, not the girl! There's so much more to embellish on in Tolkien's world because it's something that's easy to change. It's hard to alter events in history that you lived through to fit your story. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 17/05/09 Title: Chapter 5: F.U.B.A.R: Story of my Life

Yay, Brandon McEwan! :-D

I love this story, it makes me laugh so much.

"I'd be pissed off too if I had to go out into a snowstorm to turn off my car alarm and then found eight freaks with swords.

Oh wait. That already happened to me. Minus the car and all."

Brilliant! More, please!

Author's Response: More is on the way, and I'm so glad the story makes you laugh! Thanks for the review!

Summary: An essay describing how I came to Tolkien and the role it played in my childhood. Round Robin - please do add your own thoughts and experiences!
Categories: Off Topic
Characters: None
Genres: Essay
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 11572 Read Count: 7245
[Report This] Published: 12/05/09 Updated: 02/06/09
Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 12/05/09 Title: Chapter 2: An Unexpected Journey

Aww wow that's awesome! Some lovely memories there :-)

I love Queen too - and I also imagined the Ents to look like those apple trees from the Wizard of Oz!

That was so much fun to read. Thank you for sharing - both of you.

Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 13/05/09 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 ~ And the doors in my mind swung open...

Oh, thank you so much for adding to this! I can just picture you lying in the hammock and being engrossed in The Hobbit...and I also type out massive long quotes and pin them to my noticeboard at uni!

Tolkien is timeless for many reasons, but his use of folklore speaks to something deep within our race memory, Elves, sorcery, artifacts of Power, the death of hero's and tragic last stands (which is very Anglo-Saxon, and if any-one has a chance to read Esteliel's superb essays, please do.) hence that feeling of familiarity, or that is what I believe.

I think that's absolutely spot on; it speaks to us on a very primal, basic level. And I will have to look at Esteliel's essays!

By the way, since your essays were pretty much all Tolkien-related, I think you'd be safe to put them back up - I loved them, so please think about it!!

Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 31/05/09 Title: Chapter 4: Thank you, by Ndil

This was a lovely essay, Ndil - I totally agree that Tolkien reads like history! And I also agree that it's very unfair that nobody translated the appendices.

Did you ever re-read The Hobbit?

Thanks for adding to this! :-)

Summary: A new dark is born out of Legolas's folly.
Categories: Lord of the Rings Slash
Characters: Aragorn
Genres: Drama
Warnings: First Draft
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 727 Read Count: 795
[Report This] Published: 15/05/09 Updated: 15/05/09
Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 15/05/09 Title: Chapter 1: The end of middle earth

Hi Poetofmiddleearth, welcome to the site!

You've definitely got potential, and there is a wise moral to this story - or at least this chapter, with Legolas' comment on the ants. However, there are a couple of grammar issues, mainly with your writing of dialogue. A beta reader would be able to help you with this; there's a thread on the home page of this site which you might want to look at, where several betas have posted to offer their services. Something else that you could do to improve your story is to include a bit more description - for example:

"But suddenly the boss orc came out of nowhere and attacked them fiercely. The attack was so violent that they were both nearly killed. But somehow they killed the boss orc"

This is very clinical and matter-of-fact, and because it is so brief the reader does not feel involved in the battle; there is very little excitement. If, on the other hand, you included more details about the fight and how Legolas was feeling at the time, it would pull the reader into your tale and make them keen to read more. It would also make the action easier to visualise.

Finally, you shouldn't use words like "okay" in serious fanfic. You can get away with it in humour fics, but in any other kind of story modern slang feels out of place.

Keep going with this, and best of luck with the writing :-)

Take care,
Narya

PS - because this involves battle scenes, blood and death, you need to rate it higher than G. I'd put it at PG-13. Also, you need to add an AU warning to the summary ;-)

Instinct by Anwyn Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 9]
Summary: Victoria Wright is a sucessful Animal Rights Lawyer with a reputation of incarcerating those guilty of Animal Abuse.

In one fateful moment Victoria's career would take a most unforseen turn.
Categories: Off Topic
Characters: Original Character
Genres: Action/Adventure, Fantasy, Other
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), Violence
Challenges: Animal Transformations
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 5604 Read Count: 3471
[Report This] Published: 17/05/09 Updated: 27/07/09
Reviewer: Narya Signed
Date: 28/05/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Viscious

Oh, so she's a lioness! Wow! And by the sounds of it she's somewhere in the south; this is all most intriguing...

Great work - I love your descriptions, everything's so vivid, I feel like I could be there :-)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the kind review, Narya. I wanted to take on this challenge but also find an animal that had not yet appeared in this challenge and since I know that there would have not naturally be any Lions in the North I did decide to put the story in the South as it is a place that has always fascinated me. I am so pleased to hear my descriptions were so vivid that you could place yourself there but unfortunately it is not such a nice place to put yourself, not for the moment at least. Thanks again! :)