Penname: Elanor Fay [Contact] Real name: Fay
Member Since: 24/04/09
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Summary: A hobbit in dire need of health insurance, a bumbling gardener, a senile wizard, a klutzy ranger, a prissy elf and a horny elf maiden with a speech impediment… it can only be a shameless parody of Peter Jackson’s movie trilogy!
Categories: Movie-verse
Characters: Arwen, Eomer, Eowyn, The Fellowship, Théoden
Genres: Parody
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 5274 Read Count: 1892
[Report This] Published: 24/08/09 Updated: 31/08/09
Reviewer: Elanor Fay Signed
Date: 24/08/09 Title: Chapter 1: Plausibility, Schmausibility

That was hilarious! You should write more of this, it's very entertaining.

It would then be picked up by the creature Gollum, who would take it deep into the Misty Mountains, and become quite scarily obsessed with it. Not to the degree that some fangirls obsess, but, y’know, somewhere just below that.

I died laughing at that part. Gollum hasn't got anything over me, I'm PRO at hobbit fangirl obsessing!

Loved it!

-Fay

SWAT Team by Ria Rated: PG [Reviews - 3]
Summary: Step away from the computer and come out with your hands up! You have the right to a spell-checker, and if you refuse this right, every misspelling will be held against you. You have the right to a Beta Reader, and if you do not know one, a court-appointed Beta Reader will be offered to you.
Categories: Crossovers
Characters: None
Genres: Horror, Humor
Warnings: First Draft, Violence
Series: Sillier Stories
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 340 Read Count: 840
[Report This] Published: 30/08/09 Updated: 30/08/09
Reviewer: Elanor Fay Signed
Date: 30/08/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ah! you've caught me at last! *sheepish grin* LOL! I have misused commas beyond count and I hardly edit my work as far as punctuation goes. So was this inspired by my horrible grammar track record? (because really, I know how bad it is sometimes.) ;P
Great work! Keep it up!

-Fay

Author's Response: Well, everyone makes mistakes (and perhaps the electronic form encourages us to publish before we polish -- I like what your story has to say about the lure of reviews), but my story was not aimed at you. Instead, I was reading your story rather late at night and began to think about what other sorts of punishments that bad authors might earn.

Summary: An angsty, dramatic poem narrated by - guess who!
Categories: Movie-verse, Book-verse
Characters: Merry, Pippin
Genres: Angst, Drama, Friendship, Poetry
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 381 Read Count: 812
[Report This] Published: 09/09/09 Updated: 09/09/09
Reviewer: Elanor Fay Signed
Date: 14/09/09 Title: Chapter 1: I Was Peregrin

Gotta love advanced English classes eh? I always think it terms of fanfiction with my assignments too.

This was a very beautiful poem. It did have a kind of structure, but as it went on, it felt very free. I liked at the end the images you weave into the text, they seemed (as far I felt) vivid.

On the whole this poem reminded me of that scene in ROTK with Pippin and Merry, which is one of my all time favorites. Well done.

-Fay

Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it! This was one of those poems that just flowed from my heart without requiring any thought- my favorite kind to write! I especially enjoyed writing the imagery- I was careful to incorporate the five senses into the second-to-last stanza because I thought it would be pretty. This poem is actually a little bit of a gapfiller, as it describes a scene not in the movie, when Pippin is made a knight of the king (now that they have a king). If you're referring to the scene on the battefield, that IS my all time favorite scene! Thanks again for reading and reviewing! Oh, I see you have a new story up- I'll have to go read that. Hobbits forever! :) -Traveller

Summary: What would happen if Smeagol was killed at the Forbidden Pool? Perhaps we should find out...
Categories: Book-verse
Characters: Denethor, Faramir, Frodo, Gandalf / Olorin, Pippin, Sam
Genres: Action/Adventure
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2816 Read Count: 2137
[Report This] Published: 04/10/09 Updated: 06/10/09
Reviewer: Elanor Fay Signed
Date: 05/10/09 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I was surprised this story hadn't gotten a review yet. I'm guessing this is your first story, and it's pretty good.

I noticed you put this under 'book-verse' which is alright but the Faramir you portray here is more like the version from the movie. Faramir the way Tolkien wrote him, wouldn't act as selfish as he's portrayed in the movie. In this story he acts like the movie Faramir and it shows you are new to writing Tolkien, but that is completely fine. You are good at giving very beautiful descriptions, but as some constructive criticism I would suggest not adding so many descriptions as they can sometimes get in the way of the actions and events in the story.

You do have great potential and I can picture you going a long way. Keep writing and see where it takes you!

Good luck,

-Fay

Thankful by Traveller Rated: G [Reviews - 2]
Summary: A set of four drabbles, one each dealing with Frodo, Sam, Merry, or Pippin being thankful for one of their friends. Written in celebration of Thanksgiving and my one-year anniversary as an LotR fanfiction writer!
Categories: Book-verse, Movie-verse
Characters: Frodo, Merry, Pippin, Sam
Genres: Friendship, General
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 415 Read Count: 779
[Report This] Published: 28/11/09 Updated: 28/11/09
Reviewer: Elanor Fay Signed
Date: 28/11/09 Title: Chapter 1: Thankful

Very cute! :) And so appropriate around Thanksgiving.

Author's Response: Thanks, glad you liked it! -Traveller

Summary: When a doctor wakes up in ME, she struggles to search for a way home whilst finding herself caught up in the problems of the new land. Tenth walker, hopefully not Mary-sue
Categories: Book-verse
Characters: None
Genres: Action/Adventure, Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2028 Read Count: 1159
[Report This] Published: 03/12/10 Updated: 03/12/10
Reviewer: Elanor Fay Signed
Date: 04/12/10 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2, The Beginning

I gotta say, you have some unique ideas and a good sense of style. The main character seems developed and the concept of a Doctor in Middle-Earth is really pretty interesting.
A couple things I'd suggest is to slow the pace a bit and put some more realism into it. Events seem a little rushed, and Ellie's reaction to being kidnapped is a little mild considering the situation.
Oh, I forgot to mention, you also made me laugh quite a bit in the first chapter, when Ellie is describing her appearence. Nice job.
Anyway, keep writing. I want to see more of this. :)

-Fay