That was hilarious! You should write more of this, it's very entertaining.
It would then be picked up by the creature Gollum, who would take it deep into the Misty Mountains, and become quite scarily obsessed with it. Not to the degree that some fangirls obsess, but, y’know, somewhere just below that.
I died laughing at that part. Gollum hasn't got anything over me, I'm PRO at hobbit fangirl obsessing!
Ah! you've caught me at last! *sheepish grin* LOL! I have misused commas beyond count and I hardly edit my work as far as punctuation goes. So was this inspired by my horrible grammar track record? (because really, I know how bad it is sometimes.) ;P
Great work! Keep it up!
Author's Response: Well, everyone makes mistakes (and perhaps the electronic form encourages us to publish before we polish -- I like what your story has to say about the lure of reviews), but my story was not aimed at you. Instead, I was reading your story rather late at night and began to think about what other sorts of punishments that bad authors might earn.
Gotta love advanced English classes eh? I always think it terms of fanfiction with my assignments too.
This was a very beautiful poem. It did have a kind of structure, but as it went on, it felt very free. I liked at the end the images you weave into the text, they seemed (as far I felt) vivid.
On the whole this poem reminded me of that scene in ROTK with Pippin and Merry, which is one of my all time favorites. Well done.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it! This was one of those poems that just flowed from my heart without requiring any thought- my favorite kind to write! I especially enjoyed writing the imagery- I was careful to incorporate the five senses into the second-to-last stanza because I thought it would be pretty. This poem is actually a little bit of a gapfiller, as it describes a scene not in the movie, when Pippin is made a knight of the king (now that they have a king). If you're referring to the scene on the battefield, that IS my all time favorite scene! Thanks again for reading and reviewing! Oh, I see you have a new story up- I'll have to go read that. Hobbits forever! :) -Traveller
I was surprised this story hadn't gotten a review yet. I'm guessing this is your first story, and it's pretty good.
I noticed you put this under 'book-verse' which is alright but the Faramir you portray here is more like the version from the movie. Faramir the way Tolkien wrote him, wouldn't act as selfish as he's portrayed in the movie. In this story he acts like the movie Faramir and it shows you are new to writing Tolkien, but that is completely fine. You are good at giving very beautiful descriptions, but as some constructive criticism I would suggest not adding so many descriptions as they can sometimes get in the way of the actions and events in the story.
You do have great potential and I can picture you going a long way. Keep writing and see where it takes you!
Very cute! :) And so appropriate around Thanksgiving.
Author's Response: Thanks, glad you liked it! -Traveller
I gotta say, you have some unique ideas and a good sense of style. The main character seems developed and the concept of a Doctor in Middle-Earth is really pretty interesting.
A couple things I'd suggest is to slow the pace a bit and put some more realism into it. Events seem a little rushed, and Ellie's reaction to being kidnapped is a little mild considering the situation.
Oh, I forgot to mention, you also made me laugh quite a bit in the first chapter, when Ellie is describing her appearence. Nice job.
Anyway, keep writing. I want to see more of this. :)