“What happened?” asked the Istar. Should be Istari. Other than that, absolutely love your story. Why exactly did you have to bring Guy in though? It was going just fine without him.
Oh, that came out wrong. Guy makes the story interesting.
Oh, silly me. forget the 'Istari' remark, I don't know what I'm talking about!!
Those are very good questions, I've asked myself a few of them before I ever read this. Yes, I agree. Some spelling errors, I'm sure someone's already said this, but it's spelled Arwen not Arwin, and it's Aragorn not Eragorn, and it was the Council of Elrond, not the meeting of elders.
Ok, I am really glad that you updated, I have been waiting for a long time. One thing. I am having trouble concentrating, and as easy as it is to write large block pages, could you please try writing smaller paragraphs? those really long ones make it slightly difficult (For me) to read, and LOTR and SW are my two favorite things. And technically I think every time there is dialog or dialog switches between two people, you should start a new paragraph.
Thank you for writing!!!
Author's Response: Please be patient with me, I seem to be having some formatting problems with my lastest update. I type everything up in MS word and then cut and paste. When I tried to make the corrections to help you, it ended up in a long column and looked almost like a section of Beowulf. Will look into it further to make adjustments.