This is worthy of publication. The metaphor is perfect.
"But these are just wishes,
Bright wildflowers blown away
By a frozen unfeeling wind
The flowers dancing upon the air,
Mocking my loneliness.
Mocking my unrequited love."
A cold wind in August, must be very cold indeed. If only the object of unrequited love knew the depth and artistry of soul of the author. Knew that he had been graced by this lovely verse, he should be overwhelmed by the thought. How many people have lived a life time and never been given such a gift. This reminds me of Karlmire Stonewien’s poem, “A Solstice for Andrea”.
If only these two had a Frodo in their lives to push the reluctant bard into action.
A wondrous poem. It is all I have come to expect from Nessa.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! This poem is all my feelings over the past few days poured into verse. It was frustrating, yet calming to write. I am very proud of it, and I am glad you think it is well-written. I have read Karlmir Stonewain's "A Solstice for Andrea" I thought it was beautiful and if I received that poem, he would receive my heart =). I am very glad that you have enjoyed this poem from my heart! Hugs
A most wonderful drabble. Please continue. I see Queen Nessa very clearly twirling about the meadow with the deer. She would be a favorite of the wood Elves. You've inspired me. By all means, put up what ever you like. I love your Nim, your poetry, and your drabbles!
Author's Response: Aww, thank you! I am glad that I inspired you! You are too kind to me. I did enjoy writing the drabble however, but we shall see what comes out of me next! I can never tell...
What an unexpected interaction. The mighty Tulkas makes himself so vulnerable and is refused?
" her never-ending dance. Her single dance. Without me."
The last two words are really impressive. Even a Valar cannot bend the will of his spouse.
Lovely as always.
Author's Response: Thank you! I see the Valar all being all-powerful, even the women who are supposed to bend to the will of their husbands. I perceive Nessa as free, with her dancing and ability to outrun deer, she sounds like someone who could almost fly. Would she wish to teach someone else her secrets, and in doing so be tied down for longer than necessary? No! But how can she refuse her husband? I will probably continue this... so many potential ways to go...
Being a lover of drabbles I am so very pleased to see you post this. It is a very excellent use of 100 words. Happy Birthday Eowin!
Author's Response: Thanks so much Lisse! It was a first attempt on my part and I am so pleased to hear that you enjoyed it. I have always seen Eowyn as being an Autumn baby ;D
Ziggy, I enjoyed this chapter as much as every one before. Pip writing a mental letter to Merry is brilliant on your part and exactly what I would expect from Pippin.
Oh and Legolas looking at the twins like Sam looks at Rosie, it made me chuckle, and the fact pip thinks everyone is blind but him.
Very much enjoyed the last few lines.
Elrohir's hand rested on the hilt of his dark bladed sword. His black hair was pulled back from the strong and stern face, but his grey eyes were intent and he went and stood near Legolas, so close that they almost, but did not quite, touch. Together they stood, here on the edge of Mordor, before the final battle. They did not speak but Legolas leaned towards him slightly and in the cold air, his low, wordless song misted and mingled with Elrohir's breath.
This might be the last loving moment they share. The self imposed ban (from Elrohir) allows only their songs to swirl about each other. What you have done is beautiful and mystic. I love it and thank you for all the effort you put into your writing. I know words of gold like yours do not just effortlessly jump onto a page.
With Love, Candy
Author's Response: Pippin is wonderful- easy to write and just great fun. I like writing him. You are right- it's hard work but such a joy to get comments back- the best thing in the world is to see that someone actually reads and enjoys what I've written. It makes it worth all the work. Hope you liked your little extra candy! xx
Once again I have read this chapter almost daily since you posted it. I am thrilled that the twins have broken the silence. One of the most touching things I have read is Elladan healing Elrohir. So true, their father is the greatest healer imaginable and did not recognize his own son’s emotional trauma. What a great job you did with this.
I loved Legolas telling Arogorn exactly what he would be doing and where for the rest of the night. It made me laugh out loud. Now it was a surprise when Elrohir came to him and was the voice of reason. But Legolas does not want reason, he wants comfort. I feel his disappointment and very endearingly his youth also. As you say he is considered young among his folk.
I take such a long time to review because I really think about what to say. You are a marvel Ziggy and I think every single word is perfect. You really have the gift to take your readers to another place and make them feel like it is real. I love and care about your characters. As always, a great big thank you for writing for us. I brag about you to everyone who will give me even half an ear. You truly are better than Tolkien, but I am glad to have him because with out him you would not be writing this for all of us.
Author's Response: I am so glad Elladan is generous an dso very very kind. As L8 says, he does need some sort of recompense and that is mulling around in my head - I'm not sure when I iwll have any time to write though so it will be a little whle before another update I'm afraid. Yes, Aragorn isn't a fool even though he has quite underestimated Gimli - I have a little scene in my head for later. And I was as surprised as anyone that Elrohir is so reasonable, but htink he has calmed because Elladan has begun healing him and so he is albe to see through his rage. He has hidden it for so long that it is his reaction to Legolas that unlocks his desire and passion so perhaps it is hardly surprsing that he has been able to hide. I like to get reviews any time- so late ones are just as welcome as early ones.Never worry about that as long as you send me a comment. I get very demorialsied when there are few comments. I am flattered by what you say and it is Tolkien's world we are in and to be so convinced it is 'real' is his great and epic imagination. But I love that you think that - soooo good for my ego!!xx
Zig, I can definitely see how confident Elrohir is in Legolas’ love. And it is a welcome and most beautiful change from the usual self loathing and self doubt Elro usually suffers from. One of the main points of the story is Elrohir’s healing and it is so good to see.
Author's Response: Yes you are right of course and we'll have to see how he copes now as he confronts the Mouth...and as you know, things don't always go smoothly and we've still got seven Nazgul left to deal with!!
Again a very beautiful moving chapter. The fact that the horses were all overjoyed to when Legolas came into the stable was as charming as could be. I can just see Legolas walking briskly into the stable and whistling tunelessly as you say.
Legolas is so brave. I love what he said about impossible odds and great danger, that’s what wood elves are good at.
I was absolutely delighted when he smiled at the herald and made the poor lad forget his own name.
Oh and Zig, don’t tell me you were not trying to break my heart when Eomer told Legolas he would love him again if only the elf would let him. My goodness! Poor dear smitten Eomer. He seems so infatuated. I know what must happen. I also know Legolas lovers Elro, but Eomer love Legolas just the same. He is so tender and caring and I love that he tosses his pride away to sink to his knees and help Legolas with the army he commands streaming around them. Eomer is a beautiful soul, strong, strong enough to be gentle.
Many thanks for this!! I am endlessly glad you are still posting here for us. What a great loss to the site it would be if you were not here.
Author's Response: I am still posting here for the time being, Lisse, but I am also posting on ESteliel's new site- which is full of wonderful writers I have not read before and an easy site to use. I will give Keith a chance but to be honest, I like waht he has been saying on his blog less and less. I don't liek the veiled threats that say things like - nothing will change yet - and suggestions tha tthese things can be looked at again later. But give the guy a chance too. My suspicion is he has seen a chance with the new Hobbit film and expects a massive upturn- which will happen. And then seek to seel the site or sell advertising. Anyway- I could go on. Ah, Eomer. He just won't lie down, will he. And he is lovely in htis. And Legolas has to be very very gentle, doesnt he. And if Elrohir does reject Legolas, the last thing the lef should do is go and revive what eh had with Eomer on the rebound...isnt it? Well... you know...Legolas is unpredictable. So he could go one way or the other. LOve Zig
So sorry it has taken me so long to review, but I will review you a dozen times to keep you writing, and no matter the place you post I will read and review you. I just needed to say this and will read again and say more.
Legolas stronger than Elrohir? Of course! And oh what an image of your beautiful Legolas submitting yet remaining in control as he kneels for Elrohir. I can just see all that long blond hair spilling over his shoulders, fluttering in the breeze! And I love Legolas come back when Ro says he will destroy him… “You flatter yourself Noldor.” We know what Elrohir means of course.
If Elrohir was not possessed by the Nazgul he would not have treated Legolas so harshly. He will hate himself all the more now for his abuse of his beloved, and for failing to protect Legolas.
Thank you for another incomparable chapter or two. Love you Ziggy. So looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Hello my dear Candy! Thank you for the lovely support you always give-it's worht writing just for you! And there's a new chapter waiting for you when you look next. Love Ziggy
It seems L8 has spoken for me in her review! I mean we talk about every chapter and are in agreement about your work. I do have to add that the Nazgul as living gargoyles is so imaginative and spooky. I read this oh so perfect chapter on Halloween for the first time and it was so appropriate to the evening.
I hope you do not mind my saying, I found a bit of humor in the fact that Eomer and Elrohir nearly fell into hand to hand combat over Legolas under the threat of death in an impending battle with Darkness. It just goes to show what males think with. Hehehe!
The humor aside, my heart still breaks for Eomer.
I am so pleased about your hints and flirtations between Elladan and Imrahil. Imrahil seems so gallant and courageous. I love the fact he thought so quickly to offer every hope of success to the soldiers by keeping their provisions. This is exactly the kind of love interest Elladan deserves, one with a good heart and piercing elvish eyes. Squeals of delight from slash fangurl!
This was a perfect chapter. But perfection is what your writing is!
Thank you beautiful Zig! Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thank you my dear Candy!! Love the fact that you seem so pleased by Imrahil's developing crush and Elladan's blissful ignorance! That is for you and L8. And I am delighted you thought it so humourous that Eomer and Elrohir almost come to blows- it IS very adolescent and I hope too that Elrohir comes acorss as very confident in Legolas' feelings for him. I have two chapters pretty much finished but lovely Anar is snowed under so it will be a little time before she gets to it. Much love
This review is being done on my I pod so it will be brief with another to follow. First, please prolong the sweet agony. Write as much as you want because I do not think it you could possibly write until I have had my fill of reading. Second, this is saying a lot but this is your best chapter. I was almost too much for my heart to take. There are only a few authors who can break open my chest, extract a beating heart, break it, return it, and expect me to go on with my day. You are one. Your writing leaves me changed.
Once again, love and graditude
Author's Response: You are an angst queen, Lisse! I'll see how it goes although I am not sure if they can hang on any longer! Poor Legolas- would you have him endure poison AND heartbreak? Hm- yes, I htought you would! xx
“Elrohir felt suddenly envious that Mirkwood's children were so free, so unashamed, unlike the Noldor for whom sex was about wedlock and binding and for whom desire was supposed to fade. It had never been so for him and he wondered if he might have been happier had he been born in Mirkwood.”
L8bleumer (Melissa)and I were just talking about this quote from your chapter 14.
There are a few things I forgot to mention. First, as others have mentioned, I appreciate the insight into Gandalf and enjoyed reading it.
Second, I noticed your mention of our dear Melusine. She is working on her lovely het right now. Those that love slash are in for a real treat in reading her. It was Melusine’s exquisite slash that prompted a change of heart for me. Now I LOVE it.
Author's Response: I love that you and L8 were talking about this- how intensely flattering. Yes- thank you for finding it - it takes me ages to remember where things are. AH- interesting that Melusine inspired your het fics. When I was writing the prequel to Sons, I started off wanting Legolas ot be with Eowyn- but Eomer was very insistent and even though I really wanted Eowyn most readers wanted slash- isnt it funny. I think slash is ..I was just going to say uncomplicated and then I remebered what I was writing! And what Spiced is writing and thought what nonsense!
Most of us would prefer that sex be about love, but that is not always the case. At times it is about dominance or instinct, or something we cannot understand. It is about raw emotions we are not in touch with. It is about survival, just like eating or breathing. There are people who are going to gasp and say I am horrible for saying this, but Elrohir did not commit the terrible crime he has been carrying the guilt of. He almost raped his mother. But he did not. He watched. He was aroused. It was a visceral, gut level reaction, coming from a place too deep and primal for his cultures mores to reach, yet he himself pulled himself back from the edge of the unforgivable. This took self control, for which he should be commended. Elladan is guilty of breaking his traditional morals as well, if in their culture sex is about bonding and wedlock, for he wants Legolas. (Who wouldn’t want Legolas?) I feel sorry for both of the brothers, they both need comforting. But my heart goes out to Elrohir because he is only guilty of a thought, a touch, not rape. He has been flogged with a rod of morality for an evil he did not commit. And unless every other intelligent being has complete thought and impulse control at all times they are in no position to judge him.
Written to twist our hearts out of our chest, this chapter is perfect in its anguish!
With all my ardent devotion, yours, Candy.
Author's Response: Well wonderful Candy- you expressed that perfectly. It is what I have been trying to express and grapple with myself actually- I have taken out that particualr line on ffnet because it is les mature and open minded, but here I can explore htat more fully. I hate that Elrohir did waht he did, and it cannot be excused BUT. as you say, he did not do anything and I hope at some time, someone wil lsay that tohim. But he did stand by and do nothing when the outlaws he rode with 'punished the vanquished' as they would see it and I did not want to shy away from that- the truth about war. I am sure that men are not all honourable as the Dunedain or elves, and that event he elves knew rape (Maglor for example) so I wanted to acknolwedge that hidden side of Tolkien's elves... but as you say, Elrohir did nothing.And you have to wonder if Elladan would be as horrified if it had been some orc-female.The truth is Elrohir likes domination and is probably repressed because hte Noldor were repesssive about sex. He wonders at some earleir point if he would have been happier had he been born in Mirkwood and the truth is, he proably would be! Thank you for understadning that. Love Ziggy
Ziggy, It is 7:20 a.m. in Gahanna, Ohio and when I saw that you had posted this I actually cheered.Now I get to spend my morning in my favorite way, reading the most excellent of fan fic and drinking tea. ALONE!
Author's Response: sounds lovely - my favourite thing too.
After reading this chapter at least a dozen times, I am still not ready to review, but I have to. It would be a crime if I did not tell you how perfect it is. Your description of the Nazgul attack from Elrohir’s pov is the best “battle” scene ever. It is just like we are there.
Then Elladan’s introspection, guided by the evil mind twisting of the Nazgul, very good. I cannot help but feel immense sympathy for him, “generous soul that he is”. Again, L8bleumer and I were talking and as she says in her review, can’t we have a little love for Elladan? He is so beautiful.
Oh and I noticed the contrast between the brother’s implements of war. Elrohir has a fiery sword that Legolas and many fear. Elladan has a pure white sword. I find both appealing. Legolas, however, needs someone as strong and passionate as himself. Elrohir is his challenge answered. Elladan would have made a sweet love, but would have had his heart broken like Eomer. I see Legolas likes a strong lover, and hope Elro gives him all he deserves, ;).
While he is gentler than his brother, Elladan is no wimp. I love the image of him charging up the stairs 4 at a time. How very strong. I Love that he takes control and commands the archers!
In the end, It seems Legolas is finally healed and faces his fear. Oh he is so brave! No one but Thranduilion could have stood the gruesome attack.
Ziggy, surely it will take more than a few chapters to wrap this up. We have the battle and the aftermath.
Thank you for this and I look forward to reading your spicier version on the other site!
Author's Response: Ah Candy - you and Mo!! OK- Elladan can have something but probably after this is finished- I cant cope with more right now... and it might not be in the AU but another one so it may be he ends up with Legolas and Elrohir can stil be all hatey and fiery about Mirkwood...oh I dont know. Or maybe Imrahil... I did sow a little seed back at Pelennor for that so perhaps I'll pick it up... or maybe write an AU of my wn AU with Elladan to be a follow on for Below Decks. Anyway, you two are great for my ego so I will keep writing even if I only post it to you two until it gets so rubbish even you dont want ot read it anyway:) XX
Ziggy, I've been reading from the start and had to stop by and tell you. You are absolutely awesome. Cannot wait for more.
Author's Response: Thank you Lisse! Working on it as we speak- as I said toyour other nice review- good to have you back dear!
Oh Ziggy! This is one of the most beautiful moving things I have ever read, especially at the end of the chapter when Elrohir gives so tenderly. Of course I love Pip and Gimli too.
Your story of how Legolas and Aragorn met…wonderful and exactly the sort of thing I would expect from your dear Legolas.
Legolas must be very very brave to survive to this point with a strong will!
Zig, there are times when a piece of writing just overwhelms me and this is one of them. How I wish I could give you a gift equal to the one you give to all of us with your exceptional work. If I were to come close I would have to empty my bank account and put a jewel on the hand that wrote this. I would also back a florist’s truck up to your door to try to fill your world with as much joy and color as you give your readers!
Since I can’t d o that, I will do what I can and simply say thank you and I wish a world of happiness and love for you in equal measure to the delight your work has brought me in these moments.
Hearts, your devoted fan, Candy
Author's Response: Hey Candy! Glad that sotry went down well, I was not sure when I wrote it but I felt we really needed reminding of what we were in danger of losing. Oh my. Jooolllss! Sparkly! Sweetie! You are so nice. xx
There is so much to love in every chapter, and this is no exception. Of course I knew it would be a treat and I jumped a little when I saw your post in the left column.
I love poor, blundering, well meaning pip, And Legolas’ thoughts as he is talking. It is endearing that Legolas as an adult thinks his father knows everything. I also love the parental glance that makes Thranduil’s adult sons look at the ground and shuffle their feet.
Aragorn says he has done enough. You bet he has and without so much as a thank you, at least as far as I can recall.
I know you are getting to it, but I wanted Elrohir to kiss Legolas too. That Gimli! If it were not for his stubbornness…
Zig, we will wait for you as long as it takes. Quality like this cannot be rushed. Now of course you could rewrite the trilogy and I would be delighted to read every page. You deserve every possible success and recognition, and that is what I wish for you, along with all of us who love you.
Thank you for this and for all that you write.
Your ardent fan, Candy
Author's Response: Hey Candy - thank you dear. You are such a treat yourself. Glad Pippin worked for you- I always find it easy to write Pippin- his voice is very strong and I can hear him speaking when I write but I htink that is part the genius of PJ's casting to be honest. And I likeot keep remniding us about Thradnuil-he is stil lLegoals' signicant other for the moment and Gimli also fufills that role to some extent in Thraduil's absence. Oh- that kiss... yes. I think, for you, there should be one quite soon...I have started writing it already as soon as I read your review- it feels right... but I am not going to tell you what happens during/ after the kiss! Love Zig
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Ziggy, thank you for this lovely chapter. It is nice to see the three of them reunited even though there was some tension. Legolas is so stubborn, and so unpredictable. I loved the line “then I will not kill you.” I had to think of Legolas leaning against Aragorn in the bath house (different story), and with Eomer, and wonder how he could be so offended by a touch. But that is your wild Legolas and I love both him and you dearly. You are brilliant! I know you are busy, but I wont let you forget about that kiss I mentioned last chapter.
Author's Response: Oh my dear Lisse! If only you knew how hard I tried to get that kiss in to this chapter! I think I have written every permutation of this bit of the story possible but it just isn't the right time- be patient. I will write you something of your own perhaps, just to keep you interested! All I can say is I think neither Legolas nor Elrohir are in a fit state to do anything right now and you would only call me a tease!! Anar had to put me back on track as usual. I love that scene in the bath house - I think you mean Rohan's Gold? I need ot write something like that again- but a bit more ...steamy. xx