This is pretty good. Can't wait till more! :D
Oh this is sooo good, really! I can't wait for more! :)
Thanks for the info. I had read some where that Legolas did live somewhere else, but I wasn't for sure. And I'll watch those grammer problems too.
this is getting good. hope the rocks don't crush them!
Update soon please. :)
Author's Response: I do have it finished and I will be uploading the next chapters as soon as they are proofed! Thank you for your patience and for letting me know you enjoyed the story.
This is good! Keep writing! :D
This is getting very interesting. Keep writing! :D
it sounds interesting to me. Please do begin writing soon!
Thats pretty good! Dont listen to negative comments. I think its really good. :D
This is good! A Death Dealer?:/ Sure does sound like a vampire. What about the Ring?! update soon!
This is good. Please continue. :D
Author's Response: Thank you very much, Dark Elf. I know for many that it may seem very...boring at first, in some ways, but eventually I'll get to the romance part of the story. I cannot wait to post the next chapter!
Not bad, not bad at all. Just a note though, you do know that Merry and Pippin don't live in Hobbiton, right? Merry is from Buckland and Pippin is from Tookland, I think. I'm really sure what its called where he's from, but, any who, really cool beginning. I want to know who the two eyes belong too. Please update soon!
Author's Response: Well, yeah, I did look it up in the books and saw that they lived in Buckland and Tookland. Maybe they're visiting someone, I'll include that later in the story. Thanks for your comments, I'm a fairly new writer!
Another good addition, and you were right about the Palantir;there are Seven seeing stones.
Who's this shadowed person? He sounds as if he doesn't want to do whatever he has to do. Update soon! :D
PS- for a new writer, your not bad. You should see my stories, their horrible,lol.
Author's Response: Not all who appear shadowed are dark in their hearts... You'll just have to read too find out! (Hint: I think its going to be an original character. Im not so sure yet.)
Oh, wow. That is so sad yet so beautiful at the same time. Wonderful, sad, story.
Very interesting. Really, I'm interested in this. But, just a question: what is the Aratar? Did you mean the Valar?
Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to review. Now to answer your question! Your half right there on the Aratar being Valar... they are but they are the 8 greatest of the Manwe, etc... a really good reference for this is the website called the Encyclopedia of Arda... here's the link... http://www.glyphweb.com/arda/default.asp
Well, it's good, but could you put some spaces every now and then, and seperate them into paragraphs? I mean, don't get me wrong, it's pretty good, but it's a bit complicated to read.
Wow...amazing. Truely beautiful and--there are no words to describe this. Beautiful, is all I can say.
Author's Response: thanks!
Wow...you have a talent for writing poems, no doubt 'bout it. Love it! :)
Author's Response: Thanks Dark Elf! It's great to be appreciated!
Cool! Although, I'd like to point out just a couple of things. The first is the ages of the hobbits. According to this story, Frodo is thirteen, yet he is actually 22 years old than Pippin, 14 years old than Merry and 12 years older than Sam. In other words, the only person who would considered alive at the time is Sam and he'd only be a year old. Ages are really hard and I'll pass just a wee bit of advice I recieved from a friend: if you can, try to avoid ages. It is alright if you do, don't get me wrong, but it's also good to avoid too.
The second thing is probably not as important, but I'd just like to mention it. Sam does not really like water. I forget the exact page I read it on, but I don't think you'll catch Samwise Gamgee getting in ANY boat. Of course, after this incident, I could see why.
Other than that, I loved it! :D I really really really did. Especially the last remark:
'Frodo grinned. "Well, we still have our picnic."'
Hee, sounds something a typical hobbit would say.
Good work! :)
Author's Response: Thanks! Yes... *nods in agreement* The only ages I\'m really familiar with are with the Men (Aragorn, Boromir, Faramir, etc.) and definitely NOT with the hobbits. :) I\'ll probably erase the ages sometime later. I did mention that Sam did not like water, but from the story it doesn\'t seem like he really is scared of it. I was thinking that maybe the incident and other few crashes, almost-drowns, and etc., etc. would lead to Sam\'s fear of the water and boats that are described in Lord of the Rings. Yeah, I love the last remark too. I thought about Pippin saying it, but it seems that Frodo should end the story. Thanks!