Hi, i rarely read croosover stuff but this chapter I liked. Nice writing, very well done, will look forward to more.
This is a lovely story so far White Wolf I will be continuing to read. I really want to know what has happened and what the outcome will be and I love the friendship between Aragorn and Legolas and the twins are my favourite Elves after Legolas. Well written stories like this are always a pleasure to read.
Author's Response: Please forgive the horribly long delay in responding to your wonderful review. I am so glad you are liking the story. I hope by now you have finished it and liked the way it turned out. One of my favorite subjects is the friendship between Legolas and Aragorn. So many of us have that as the center of our fanfic stories, even thought Tolkien never touched on it pre-FOTR. I love the twins, too.
OMG! off to read chapter 5 immediately!
So Intriguing. Youa re really drawing me in here with a great desire to find out what has happened and how it will be resolved. Also I love your characterisations of the elves and Aragorn. Really wonderful! Excellent stuff.
Hurry up and update cant wait to see what legolas and Rumil have in mind for the relaxation!
Really nice. Full of friendship and love.
I am really liking this so far. Nicely written. I like Legolas/Arwen/Aragorn fics.
I loved it. It was beautiful from start to finish. Your langauge was perfect for the hobbits.
"She was his wholly and cpmpletely, bound, claimed planted and harvested." Lovely sentence. I appreciated her body scarred by motherhood and they both seemed so earthy and real. Their lovemaking was physical amd magical at the same time. A wonderful story.
Author's Response: *grin* Thank you, most profusely! It\'s one of my favorite stories too and my answer to all those that had the poor fellow discarding Rosie or pining for Frodo all his life. I simply couldn\'t see the character Tolkien created living the life he was given like that. I am glad you appreciated my take.
Yes I did like it very much. Especially Lothiriel's feelings.
very interesting. I liked these.
Author's Response: Thanks!
I can hardly believe this story is your first. It is so good. Will write you a long review. The fellowships time in Lothlorien is beautifully portrayed and with your story you have included its with magic. All your characters are perfectly 'in character.' I particularly liked Celeborn's voice, well realised. Aragorn feeling the weight of his destiny and responsibilty which brings him to breaking point was also wonderful. I liked Legolas's reaction to the Mellyrn. he would do that, touch the bark and leaves, feel them grow and I am sure they would talk to him too as he listens. The relationship between Aragorn and Legolas was beautifully drawn. My heart was in mouth as Aragorn woke up. I really thought it was going to happen, so well done for the brief suspense and for quickly allaying my fears. I also liked the flash of humour with Hobbits regarding mushrooms. It lightened the tale and also by contrast threw into relief the seriousness of the quest. Aragorn sitting between the immortals and the mortals was a nice touch which highlighted who he was and his ancestry and heritage. You managed to include everyone in the fellowship in some way, not just the main character. Having Frodo and Merry interested in elven history in Imladris brought them in and reminded us of their personalities and the voices of Gimli and Boromir were spot on too in their dialogue, as was Sam when he said, 'sounds a lot like Strider.' I liked Celeborn's reference to his Granddaughter. I loved your Galdriel's speech when she gave Legolas his gift. One of my favourite moments in book/film. The significance of the story of Turin and Beleg was excellent. I think you have crafted a very rich and meaningful story in a short space. You have included so much from the scope of Tolkien's whole vision and blended issues such as mortality, the Valar, history and prophecy for the future, with the current events and the characters feelings and emotions and given it all great significance. Just fantastic. (Think this the longest review I have ever written.) Hope you will write some more. Rozzan.
Lovely start, mischevious. I laughed out loud at the line. "I am fading, Ada" I enjoy young Legolas stories, peeking into how others imagine his childhood.
Author's Response: Oh I'm so glad you liked that line, I love to know the bits people enjoyed! thanks for reviewing!
ah terryfing! Poor child, but he shouldn't have been so bad.
Author's Response: Well I think he learned his lesson!
I liked in the last chapter the perfume of the forest absorbing into his skin. In this one the multiple spider eyes was a scary image. I like the way Thranduil rescued him mi himself and not the guards and I like the way you show the love he has for his son and the final line, nice emotion.
Author's Response: oo I love when you talk about the parts you liked. I'm so glad you enjoyed this part of the story!
I loved your first sentence, exactly as Elrond would think and a great dramatic opener. You have a keen eye for personalities and show it in gestures and dialogue, good characterisations. Elrond's conflict as a father to foster son Aragorn and to daughter Arwen is well drawn. I can feel his emotion. Nice advice from Gandalf full of perception and wisdom. Good inclusion of the histroy behind this moment in Elrond's thoughts. Beautiful image of the reforged sword and the scene at the memorial is wonderful. It would have been lovely to see some of Aragorn's emotion and feeling too here toward Elrond and his destiny. This was a really well done challenge.
A lovely beginning with the descriptionof the hatrbour. I could smell the sea air and wanted to be there sitting on that quay. Nice references to history, which i am coming to expect from your tales and also links with Arda, mentions of ancient elves like Olwe and also of the valar gives a sense of long ages and of place. I like your original names very much, Legolas' mothers and Elrond's house, well thought out. Beautiful image of Celebrian in the garden and then sharing there disappointment and sorrow, the simile of "tears streaming down like quicksilver through glass" so gorgeous and emotive. I also appreciate Celebrian's strength at the end, a nice peep into her character and their relationship.
I like your explanation of Galdriel/Atariel's personality change and later of her time in gardens of Lorien and the visions. I love your characterisation of celeborn, you write him very well. The description of the city and its surroundings is beautiful. At their renuion i enjoyed the echo of the first chapter with the words. "This is not true." and their implied intimacy was well done with dialogue and your explanation, a nice choice of words. I liked your depiction of Earwen and as ever your attention to names is excellent and the concise but detailed inclusion of much history and of elven races is evident. A lovely chapter that leaves me wanting to know and read more.
Oh how poignant this is. A nice renuion but tinged with such nostalgia and such heartbreak too. The portraits were a beautiful idea to introduce us to the family tree and all those marvellous descendants, some of whose stories I suspect we will hear. Lovely. Nice insights into the household at Imlothien and the characters again. I felt so sad for Elrond having the hurt of losing Arwen opened up again and now his sons, and when he replies to his wife's happiness and wonder at all the great grandchildren .. that they will never see them though... I almost cried. This mortality/immortality stuff is indeed a bitter thing. Really nice chapter.
Ch 4.MMM. very nice. I love the voice you give to Elladan. nicely done. I also like your Gilwen, that she is a scholar. The device of seeing their story through letters and her journal is interesting and works extremely well. I appreciated very much the descriptions of Elladan through Gilwen's eyes! That she remembers him so well and can tell him apart from his twin after 2 years gap, shows how much of impression he made upon her, even if she does not fully realise it herself just yet. This is a lovely start to the relationship.
5. Another good chapter. I appreciated your description of Frodo and Sam's death, it was quiet and still and peaceful and inevitable, and also the twinge of pain it causes Elrond as he thinks of children. Good to switch to the journal again and tales of life and a relationship beginning and hope after the war. I am really looking forward to knowing more of this story. keep it coming, I am hooked.