Reviews by NessaMahtar
Nîn Óre (My Heart) by Mari Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 14]
Summary: Suki is an average high school student where half her teachers like her and half don't. But what happens when a dark blue eyed boy with odd ears appears with other odd people?
Categories: Crossovers Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Frodo, Gandalf / Olorin, Gimli, Legolas, Merry, Original Character, Pippin, Sam
Genres: Romance
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 9 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 15107 Read Count: 8033
Published: 02/10/09 Updated: 14/09/10 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9-Telling Legolas Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
Yay! Another chapter, and the tension has been resolved with a healthy dose of liplock.
Well done! I enjoy reading this story.

Author's Response: Thank you will have chapter 10 up soon hopefully. I already have the epilogue written out and have started on the sequel.
Date: 14/09/10
Sorrow Without Tears by Daewen Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 2]
Summary: I cry, but not the way everyone else does.
Categories: Book-verse, Movie-verse, Off Topic Characters: Original Character
Genres: Poetry, Tragedy
Warnings: Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 150 Read Count: 1128
Published: 03/10/09 Updated: 03/10/09 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Sorrow Without Tears Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
Very powerful. I have no other words to describe it.

Author's Response: Thank you. That one is one of my favorites.
Date: 10/07/10
Blood on Snow by Daewen Rated: G [Reviews - 4]
Summary: This season's weather, so unpredictable;
It looks so much like blood on snow.
Categories: Movie-verse, Book-verse Characters: Original Character
Genres: Poetry
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 129 Read Count: 1251
Published: 17/10/09 Updated: 17/10/09 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Blood on Snow Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
So powerful!
I really love your work, it makes you think and makes you wonder, and can even make you cry.
Very well done.

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I've never gotten this many reviews in so little time. They mean a lot to me.
Date: 10/08/10
Summary: Shortly before the War of the Ring, a fledgling ranger prepares to depart from his family in Lebennin. Excerpted from a A View of Anórien, a work in progress, in response to Wind Rider’s 100 Prompts challenge #86: My Weapon’s Name.
Categories: Book-verse, Movie-verse Characters: Original Character
Genres: Friendship
Warnings: None
Challenges: 100 Prompts
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 875 Read Count: 1407
Published: 04/12/09 Updated: 04/12/09 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: The Ranger Departs Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
Very well written. It shows the sadness of parting, and a family's love.

Author's Response: Thank you, Nessa. This is just an excerpt from a story in progress, somewhat surreal, incorporating events from my own life adapted for Middle Earth. Several of the characters are real family members and friends.
Date: 27/07/10
Tears of Eru by Lisse Rated: G [Reviews - 8]
Summary: Perhaps this is a poem, I'm not sure what to call it.

This was written as I began to contemplate the concept of Elven immortality. First or second born, none of Eru's children are truly immortal. I think the elves may have some of the same feelings as humans on this subject.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Eru / Iluvatar
Genres: Hurt/Comfort
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 163 Read Count: 1443
Published: 05/04/10 Updated: 05/04/10 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
"If we had ten thousand years in this realm would we not ask more on the last day?"
BEAUTIFUL.

Author's Response: Thank you for your kind review.
Date: 02/07/10
Summary: From time to time we feel the need to say what's on our mind. This is my bit of advice.
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Essay
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1075 Read Count: 1956
Published: 30/06/10 Updated: 30/06/10 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: A Bit Of Advice Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
Yes, I really appreciate when you review mine =) it makes me feel like you care, and it honestly makes my day. You are the only one who has ever reviewed my story =)

Author's Response: I'm glad you agree. Hang in there. More will respond. Your story is out there now for anyone to read. As long as you are happy with it, that's all that matters.
Date: 02/07/10
Summary: Faramir defends his brother's memory after realizing that many citizens of Gondor are thinking ill of Boromir. Basically what I myself say to people who don't like Boromir because he attacked Frodo.
Categories: Book-verse, Movie-verse Characters: Boromir, Faramir
Genres: Drama, Family
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 978 Read Count: 842
Published: 01/07/10 Updated: 01/07/10 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
I agree that Boromir was a true son of Gondor. It says that Faramir was more "kingly" (If I remember correctly...) but Boromir was more adept in skill and such. And it is very realistic that Faramir would write such a thing. Good ideas.

Author's Response: thanks so much! i'm glad you liked it!
Date: 02/07/10
Summary: A group of 9 girls gets sent to Middle-Earth. This is their story.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Elladan, Elrohir, Elrond, Eru / Iluvatar, Faramir, Galadriel, Gandalf / Olorin, Glorfindel, Haldir, Legolas, Original Character, The Fellowship
Genres: Friendship, Romance
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 634 Read Count: 1270
Published: 05/07/10 Updated: 05/07/10 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Prologue Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
This story has a lot of potential! I like the different characters, and how close they are, and how you seem to know each one.
The only issue that I can see possibly coming is that sice you know the characters so well, you just use them easily without proper introductions and such. The reader could easily get confused, since you just introduced them all at once. Could you maybe give a little background and give more depth about the characters for the reader to remember?
But I like it so far, and I will hopefully continue reading this! =)
Well done =)

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I will try to remember that.
Date: 05/07/10
Summary: When Arathorn returns to the North after having travelled abroad for many years, he doesn't know he is about to find the love of his life...
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Arathorn, Gilraen
Genres: Family, Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 6636 Read Count: 6173
Published: 08/07/10 Updated: 07/05/11 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Home again Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
Very unique! I have never read a FanFiction about Arathorn before! Original, and it moves along nicely. Looking forward to Chapter two! =)
Date: 08/07/10
Title: Chapter 2: A fateful visit Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
I like the Tolkien-style you write in. Very matter-of-factly.
Date: 10/07/10
Title: Chapter 3: At first sight Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
Very good. I look forward to more chapters in the future! =)
Date: 10/07/10
Title: Chapter 4: Father and son Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
Very intriguing! Everyone has their own secrets and don't know about the other person.
What a good father Arador is!
Date: 27/07/10
Title: Chapter 5: A first approach Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
Ahh!! So cute!!
One thing though with your dialogue, each time there is a new person speaking it should be "entered"
For example your ending dialogue:
"Will I see you tomorrow?" he asked carefully, gathering his courage.

Gilraen raised an eyebrow and looked at him amusedly. "Will you and your father not have to visit some relatives tomorrow.

"Tomorrow morning", he confirmed. "Why can we not meet tomorrow afternoon?"

"That will hardly be possible", she answered sadly. "The whole settlement will see us."


All that UNLESS you wanted the dialogue to be like this for the style of the story, which I am all for, just try and make it a little less confusing when there are the back-and-forth confrontations such as the last paragraph.


but other than that- capital work! Very unique and fresh. Well done!
Date: 27/07/10
Summary: This is a story I submitted for a contest on a Harry Potter website. It's supposed to be the punishment you give to the rules that wizards broke. It's written in a formal letter form.
Categories: Other Movies Characters: None
Genres: Humor
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1223 Read Count: 1376
Published: 09/07/10 Updated: 09/07/10 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Breaking the Rule Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
HP Fanfiction on a LotR site? My two favorite things in one place? I can live with this...
It was vey amusing to read.
Date: 14/02/11
Summary: This is a drabble. Perhaps this is a death, maybe a vision.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Original Character
Genres: Drama
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 100 Read Count: 1115
Published: 11/07/10 Updated: 11/07/10 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
Very poetic without being a poem. It was very beautiful-- especially to me since I have lost a friend to death, and I just watched Fellowship today and bawled like a 2-year-old when Boromir died. This was a very comforting poem, and I really enjoyed it =)

Author's Response: I truly believe you have a solid foundation for hope that you may see your friend again. It does not make sence to me that this world and our one life in it is all there is to the picture. We are born with so many God like qualities. Almost very human longs to create things of lasting beauty. We worship something greater than ourselves. We are concious that we have conciousness. We often love selflessly. These are some of the things that make us like our maker. What's more we have eternity in our hearts. It's like a homeing instinct. Some feel that a longing for eternity is just our way of coping with inevitable death. Maybe so, but I doubt it. I think we are reaching for what actually exists because it exists. I am sorry for your loss and hope that each passing day finds you stronger in the memory of the happy times with your loved one.
Date: 25/07/10
Summary: In this drabble, Glorfindel is newly returned to ME after his time in Mandos.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Glorfindel
Genres: Hurt/Comfort
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 100 Read Count: 1143
Published: 12/07/10 Updated: 12/07/10 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
I really love how he tried to be "cool" about it, (making sure no one was watching) like we all do, and then just letting himself loose. Very well done, as all of your writing is =)

Author's Response: I so love Glorfindel. You just want someone like him to have every joy life has to offer. I see Elves as a mixture of two extremes. Reserved and dignified to a fault yet with an unquenchable inner child that can never be fully repressed. You've just got to love creatures like that!
Date: 25/07/10
Untitled by Daisy Baggins Rated: PG [Reviews - 1]
Summary: Waht happens when there's a meeting of the LOTR Fan Club,and a 'Special Guest' shows up?Who is this special guest?What will happen when one girl finds friendship,and maybe,Romance?
Categories: Actor Fics Characters: Elijah Wood
Genres: Romance
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 298 Read Count: 1100
Published: 26/07/10 Updated: 26/07/10 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: In which the author can't think of a good chapter name,so just puts this. Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
Ah! I love Elijah Wood! Man, I wish this happened to me!!

Author's Response: :) So that means you going to read it??
Date: 26/07/10
Summary: To understand this, if you are not familiar with Fly Leaf and their Song "Cassie" it can be found on You Tube. I investigated out of curiosity and found Daewn's challenge could not be denied in light of that song.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: None
Genres: Tragedy
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 141 Read Count: 1154
Published: 28/07/10 Updated: 28/07/10 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
I know it wasn't the intention, but this reminds me of C.S. Lewis's The Silver Chair when they are all trying to prove that they are still Narnians and not under the Witch's spell.
"I'm going to live as a Narnian, even if there isn't any Narnia."

Very powerful. And of course, amazing, as always =)

Author's Response: C.S. Lewis has been a great influence in my life. His book Mere Christianity changed my life. But I have not read much of his fiction. There is so much to read and so little time. I want to thank you for your review and for chatting. I’ve been waiting for more writing from you please!
Date: 28/07/10
Why Review? by Lisse Rated: G [Reviews - 10]
Summary: take the time to comment. It means so much.
Categories: Off Topic Characters: None
Genres: Essay
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 333 Read Count: 1046
Published: 05/08/10 Updated: 05/08/10 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
I know you speak for so many of us when you write this! I have seen a person with over a dozen chapters written out, and not a single review! It is very depressing, and I try to read them just so I can say something! It really does make people's days when they are "reviewed". Thank you for writing this and sharing your thoughts because I know so many of us feel the same exact way. =)

Author's Response: You are most welcome. Like Spiced Wine said, "how can I not review." You young authors are the future of fan fiction and I want to do all I can to keep you encouraged. Again I have to go back to what spiced wine says, it's all about passion. For you younger authors great quality will come in time. But passion is why we do this and it shows all over your work and that is why I love you so much.
Date: 05/08/10
Summary: A response to the challenge, A drabble to the Mummers Dance by Lisse. Subject in question : Elrond/Celebrian
Categories: Off Topic Characters: Celebrían, Elrond
Genres: Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 100 Read Count: 1204
Published: 10/08/10 Updated: 10/08/10 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Impatient Dance Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed
Very well done first drabble. I would not be able to guess it was a first try. Good job!
Date: 14/02/11