Yay! Another chapter, and the tension has been resolved with a healthy dose of liplock.
Well done! I enjoy reading this story.
Author's Response: Thank you will have chapter 10 up soon hopefully. I already have the epilogue written out and have started on the sequel.
Very powerful. I have no other words to describe it.
Author's Response: Thank you. That one is one of my favorites.
I really love your work, it makes you think and makes you wonder, and can even make you cry.
Very well done.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I've never gotten this many reviews in so little time. They mean a lot to me.
Very well written. It shows the sadness of parting, and a family's love.
Author's Response: Thank you, Nessa. This is just an excerpt from a story in progress, somewhat surreal, incorporating events from my own life adapted for Middle Earth. Several of the characters are real family members and friends.
"If we had ten thousand years in this realm would we not ask more on the last day?"
Author's Response: Thank you for your kind review.
Yes, I really appreciate when you review mine =) it makes me feel like you care, and it honestly makes my day. You are the only one who has ever reviewed my story =)
Author's Response: I'm glad you agree. Hang in there. More will respond. Your story is out there now for anyone to read. As long as you are happy with it, that's all that matters.
I agree that Boromir was a true son of Gondor. It says that Faramir was more "kingly" (If I remember correctly...) but Boromir was more adept in skill and such. And it is very realistic that Faramir would write such a thing. Good ideas.
Author's Response: thanks so much! i'm glad you liked it!
This story has a lot of potential! I like the different characters, and how close they are, and how you seem to know each one.
The only issue that I can see possibly coming is that sice you know the characters so well, you just use them easily without proper introductions and such. The reader could easily get confused, since you just introduced them all at once. Could you maybe give a little background and give more depth about the characters for the reader to remember?
But I like it so far, and I will hopefully continue reading this! =)
Well done =)
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I will try to remember that.
Very unique! I have never read a FanFiction about Arathorn before! Original, and it moves along nicely. Looking forward to Chapter two! =)
I like the Tolkien-style you write in. Very matter-of-factly.
Very good. I look forward to more chapters in the future! =)
Very intriguing! Everyone has their own secrets and don't know about the other person.
What a good father Arador is!
Ahh!! So cute!!
One thing though with your dialogue, each time there is a new person speaking it should be "entered"
For example your ending dialogue:
"Will I see you tomorrow?" he asked carefully, gathering his courage.
Gilraen raised an eyebrow and looked at him amusedly. "Will you and your father not have to visit some relatives tomorrow.
"Tomorrow morning", he confirmed. "Why can we not meet tomorrow afternoon?"
"That will hardly be possible", she answered sadly. "The whole settlement will see us."
All that UNLESS you wanted the dialogue to be like this for the style of the story, which I am all for, just try and make it a little less confusing when there are the back-and-forth confrontations such as the last paragraph.
but other than that- capital work! Very unique and fresh. Well done!
HP Fanfiction on a LotR site? My two favorite things in one place? I can live with this...
It was vey amusing to read.
Very poetic without being a poem. It was very beautiful-- especially to me since I have lost a friend to death, and I just watched Fellowship today and bawled like a 2-year-old when Boromir died. This was a very comforting poem, and I really enjoyed it =)
Author's Response: I truly believe you have a solid foundation for hope that you may see your friend again. It does not make sence to me that this world and our one life in it is all there is to the picture. We are born with so many God like qualities. Almost very human longs to create things of lasting beauty. We worship something greater than ourselves. We are concious that we have conciousness. We often love selflessly. These are some of the things that make us like our maker. What's more we have eternity in our hearts. It's like a homeing instinct. Some feel that a longing for eternity is just our way of coping with inevitable death. Maybe so, but I doubt it. I think we are reaching for what actually exists because it exists. I am sorry for your loss and hope that each passing day finds you stronger in the memory of the happy times with your loved one.
I really love how he tried to be "cool" about it, (making sure no one was watching) like we all do, and then just letting himself loose. Very well done, as all of your writing is =)
Author's Response: I so love Glorfindel. You just want someone like him to have every joy life has to offer. I see Elves as a mixture of two extremes. Reserved and dignified to a fault yet with an unquenchable inner child that can never be fully repressed. You've just got to love creatures like that!
Ah! I love Elijah Wood! Man, I wish this happened to me!!
Author's Response: :) So that means you going to read it??
I know it wasn't the intention, but this reminds me of C.S. Lewis's The Silver Chair when they are all trying to prove that they are still Narnians and not under the Witch's spell.
"I'm going to live as a Narnian, even if there isn't any Narnia."
Very powerful. And of course, amazing, as always =)
Author's Response: C.S. Lewis has been a great influence in my life. His book Mere Christianity changed my life. But I have not read much of his fiction. There is so much to read and so little time. I want to thank you for your review and for chatting. I’ve been waiting for more writing from you please!
I know you speak for so many of us when you write this! I have seen a person with over a dozen chapters written out, and not a single review! It is very depressing, and I try to read them just so I can say something! It really does make people's days when they are "reviewed". Thank you for writing this and sharing your thoughts because I know so many of us feel the same exact way. =)
Author's Response: You are most welcome. Like Spiced Wine said, "how can I not review." You young authors are the future of fan fiction and I want to do all I can to keep you encouraged. Again I have to go back to what spiced wine says, it's all about passion. For you younger authors great quality will come in time. But passion is why we do this and it shows all over your work and that is why I love you so much.
Very well done first drabble. I would not be able to guess it was a first try. Good job!