Penname: KarasAunty [Contact] Real name:
Member Since: 08/08/10
Membership status: Member
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Have deleted all my stories from lotrfanfiction.com because, unless one writes spewy Mary-Sues, there's little to no feedback to be had from readers here. What's the point in posting if no one can be bothered to let you know what they think of your work; point out what's great and what needs  improvement? I don't know how many times I've left author's notes at the bottom of my chapters, asking people to review - it really is the only reward an author gets - but clearly nobody gives a toss. It's like working for nothing, and I'm not prepared to do that any more. To those few who ever have taken the time to not only read, but review any fic of mine here onsite, I am truly grateful to you. I thank you most sincerely. Au revoir and good luck.


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Summary: During the decade following the War of the Ring, King Elessar and Queen Undómiel work tirelessly to reunify the kingdom and institute governmental reforms. Most of the war-weary population embraces the King’s peacetime policies and building projects as prosperity and opportunity slowly return to Gondor and beyond. Old enemies resurface, however, as four villains emerge to cast covetous eyes upon the southern provinces and form an evil alliance which will threaten the stability of the empire and even the safety of the royal family.

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Categories: Book-verse, Movie-verse
Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Beregond, Celeborn, Celebrían, Elfwine, Elrond, Eomer, Eowyn, Erkenbrand, Faramir, Gandalf / Olorin, Gimli, Gwaihir, Landroval, Legolas, Lothiriel, Meneldor the Swift, Orcs/Uruk-Hai, Original Character, Sam
Genres: Action/Adventure, Angst, Erotica, Romance
Warnings: Character Death, Graphic Sex, Slash (same sex pairing), Torture, Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 42 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 305693 Read Count: 53200
[Report This] Published: 10/09/07 Updated: 05/02/12
Reviewer: KarasAunty Signed
Date: 20/07/12 Title: Chapter 1: Treasures from the Earth

I've only read part-way through the 1st chapter, but had to stop to tell you that you're doing great so far. Wormwood is a total cad, but very interesting with it. A fascinating opening scene with him duping the farmer and his lad (and how dishonourable of him to induce them to steal from the dead). And the backstory with Saruman and Merryweather gives him so much depth. Am very impressed thus far.

Reviewer: KarasAunty Signed
Date: 20/07/12 Title: Chapter 1: Treasures from the Earth

Hello,

the descriptive prose thus far is excellent, and your depictions of medieval burial methods (following large-scale battle), the environment, and the social/judicial restructuring following the West's victory over Sauron give the first half of thei chapter depth and authenticity. Love it.

Unfortunately, I have to admit that I'm not a fan of Arwen, m'dear, regardless of who writes her. She's just not my cup of teas (too perfect/boring/annoying). And though I love the characterisation of Wormwood, not even your excellent writing skills have the power to sway my opinion on that point, or read her tale further. So sorry!

Might I iffer a tip for the future, though, as one author to another? Elvish vernacular! Awen and Luthilla's dialogue in this chapter struck me as more contemporary American than Middle-earth Westron. And I don't truly believe that Elrond would dissaprove of his beloved daughter's friend simply because she wasn't royal; he's just not elitist/sbobby enough for that.

You don't have a story featuring Wormwood, though, do you? Because - honestly - he is one of the most intriguing OCs I've ever read. You portray his character so vividly that I, as a reader, can't help being drawn to him. Funny how all the cads have 'worm' in their names, isn't it? Wormtongue, Wormtail, Wormwood ...

All the best,

Kara's Aunty ;)



Author's Response: Thanks for your review and constructive comments, Kara. I agree about the style of dialogue between Arwen and Luthillia, but I tend to write as my muse moves me. You also have to keep in mind that I am American.

Unfortunately, I don't have any other stories about or including Linner Wormwood. "Arwen's Journey" was my first attempt at writing LotR fan fiction and Wormwood was intended as a chief character in this story only. I actually hate the guy. He gets increasingly evil (if that's possible) as the story progresses.

I enjoy exchanging Emails with other members and would greatly appreciate your correspondence. Please feel free to look at my bio page.

Summary: Amroth reaches the shore, and cannot find his love. He ponders their love and wonders what is life anymore, without her?
Categories: Book-verse
Characters: Amroth, Nimrodel
Genres: Drama, Poetry, Romance
Warnings: Character Death
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 342 Read Count: 980
[Report This] Published: 03/08/10 Updated: 03/08/10
Reviewer: KarasAunty Signed
Date: 08/08/10 Title: Chapter 1: If I Can't Love Her

Hello NessaMahtar,

you captured Amroth's despair nicely here. Poor bloke! I was genuinely moved as he described the vibrancy of the living forest while his own life ebbed away.

*sniffle*

Lovely piece,

Kara's Aunty :)

Author's Response: Thank you for enjoying, reading, and of course, reviewing! =) I am glad you enjoyed it. It was a somewhat hard piece for me to write, trying to slip into the mind of one who just lost his love, glad you liked it =)

Reflections by luthien85 Rated: G [Reviews - 6]
Summary: A response to the challenge, An honest moment with your character by Lisse. Character in question : Haldir/Calavene
Categories: Movie-verse, Off Topic
Characters: Haldir
Genres: Hurt/Comfort
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 267 Read Count: 859
[Report This] Published: 10/08/10 Updated: 10/08/10
Reviewer: KarasAunty Signed
Date: 10/08/10 Title: Chapter 1: Reflections

Hello luthien85,

I do like Haldir. He always appealed to me more than Legolas - there's just something about him ... So I enjoyed this wee mixture of prose and poetry from his pov. Very touching to see an emotive chink in his armour. Poor elf! Kara's Aunty ;)

Author's Response: In my story the Heart of Stone, there were certain events that caused the chink. So honestly i think if it were to happen in reality to his, the marchwarden and haldir would be two different person trapped in one sexy body :)

Summary: Sometime in the Third Age, Sauron finds himself in Melkor's old cell, waiting to be put into the Void.
Categories: Book-verse
Characters: Aule, Eonwe, Sauron
Genres: Angst, Hurt/Comfort
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 6 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 6058 Read Count: 3764
[Report This] Published: 05/08/11 Updated: 05/09/11
Reviewer: KarasAunty Signed
Date: 05/09/11 Title: Chapter 6: The Void

Hello Uvatha the Horseman,

 an intriguing story. I'm not sure that Sauron would feel as much repentance as he does here, but who knows? Either way, I felt genuinely sorry for him as he struggeled between panic at and acceptance of his doom. And the last two words of the final chapter - simple though they were - chilled my blood. I can't believe I felt sorry for a Dark Lord (and particularly this Dark Lord), but I did, and that's says a lot about your skill with words.

Well done.

Kara's Aunty ;) 

Summary: Frodo is enjoying a not so pleasent afternoon when he is informed of terrible, devastating news. He has to deal with loss, devastation, and getting back on the road to recovery with a little help from his friends.
Categories: Book-verse, Off Topic
Characters: Frodo
Genres: Tragedy
Warnings: Character Death
Series: Frodo's Journey
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3292 Read Count: 3705
[Report This] Published: 23/08/11 Updated: 10/11/11
Reviewer: KarasAunty Signed
Date: 05/09/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One: I Hate Boats

Hello FrodoLuver1,

gosh, it's daunting writing that first story, isn't it? You're not sure how to tackle it, or if it will make sense, or if people will read and enjoy it. And, having posted it, you find yourself sitting on the edge of your seat waiting for that first review (and hoping it's not a bad one). 

So well done to you for writing and posting this in the first place! 

As for the fic itself: you tackled a difficult subject for your first fic, and I admire your courage for it! Poor Frodo, having lost his parents so tragically and at such a young age. And being with that very unpleasant Miss Honeysuckle when he heard the news, too. I felt very sorry for him.

You might want to think about developing the scene a little more, though, because (in this fic) Frodo was barely informed of his parents' deaths (by some random stranger) when he was packed off to Brandy Hall. It would have been better for Frodo to have a relative from Brandy Hall tell him what happened, and to be with him when he grieved. Hobbit families are generally close-knit, so this would be more in keeping with their ways.

You do need to work on grammar and spelling, m'dear. and there were some contemporary words in the fic that I don't believe hobbits would have used (hon, sweetie, vitamins).

Don't worry about the criticisms too much just now - plot and character development, grammar, etc are all things that will improve as your writing develops. Believe me, I know what I'm talking about - my first story wasn't structured nearly as well as yours ... 

Best of luck with your writing, and I'm glad to welcome another writer of hobbit fics to the world of lote fandom.

Kara's Aunty ;)



Author's Response: Hey thanks now that I think about tit hose things are true :)) ooopsies! haha thanks for reivewing tho!

Summary: Tauriel was special. Everyone knew it. She was adaptable. She had lost everything and had made so much for herself. In Lorien Tauriel was soon to regain she ever wanted-a life, love and soon a family again. Until a betrayal that makes her life begin to fall apart...
Categories: Movie-verse, Book-verse
Characters: Legolas
Genres: Tragedy
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 4446 Read Count: 1900
[Report This] Published: 07/06/12 Updated: 02/09/12
Reviewer: KarasAunty Signed
Date: 23/09/12 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

I didn't realise at first she was elvish (or half-elvish). Lucky she's so handy in battle. Not so lucky for her foes, though ...

The elves language is very contemporary here, and they swear a lot, both of which are a little distracting. I suppose battle can harden one that way. Still, perhaps if their language was tempered a little so it was more appropriate to their kind?

Keep on writing! And thanks for the tip on the new 'Hobbit' trailer! I've been watching it on a loop for two days. Am now a pervy Dwarf-fancier ...

M ;)



Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing AGAIN!!!! I appreciate it (as you know) very much! I suppose she is very bad mouthed, but don't worry, her character changes drastically from now on. I will keep your advice close at hand and ensure she doesn't change so much as to ruin a.portyal of the elves. I love the Hobbit trailer and I have also been watching on loop since it came out!!! I personally am perving on Kili. I mean.... wow. Dwarves aren't meant to be that hot. I had to watch Legolas in fellowship to remind myself where my true loyalties lie..... HAPPY HOBBIT DAY FOR YESTERDAY!! I had no Internet so I couldn't respond earlier! Again thank you for the advice and the review and just keep reading and giving advice please!!

Reviewer: KarasAunty Signed
Date: 23/09/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Wow. Florien's an arse isn't he? She's well shot of him, IMO.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing!!! I agree he is an arse and he deserved every slap!!

Summary: Lord Celeborn reflects privately upon his wife.
Categories: Book-verse
Characters: Celeborn, Galadriel
Genres: Drama, General
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 190 Read Count: 407
[Report This] Published: 15/07/12 Updated: 15/07/12
Reviewer: KarasAunty Signed
Date: 15/07/12 Title: Chapter 1: Lady of Light

A beautiful , elegantly-written piece, rich with character and full of depth, despite its length. Very well done, EldarinPrincess!

Author's Response: Thank you, Kara. I wanted to capture the loneliness Lady Galadriel feels, along with the power she embodies as contrasts to one another. I also wanted to convey the distance her husband feels, the disconnect he has with her.