oooo very very very nice. Lot's of tension with Eomer and Elrohir. Gandalph is a tad grumpy with Legolas, surprising after everything that has happened. The fact that Legolas is still sufferiing from his injury makes his record recovery much easier to assimilate. I loved this chapter, and as usual, will be impatient for more, soon.
Author's Response: I know- Gandalf is just grumpy when he is not being wose and serious, dont you think? I knew it was going to be a tough one to get credibity for Legolas going to Mordor but really, we couldn't leve him behind, could we. I hope I've done enough to make that beleivable with the bloodlessness of the wound, and it being more of a spiritual wound than physical. Let me know if it doesn't work though, won't you. Thank you, Alpha.
This is a particularly well-written chapter, in my humble opinion. I particularly like your descriptions of the ruined stonework - very effective. I also think this 'recovery' chapter is so very central to I assume lies ahead, and that will allow Legolas (I hope), to hava a hand in it.
This new twist, where Legolas believes his estrangement with Elrohir is his fault, promises much drama and angst.
I eagerly await the explicit sex, it is about time these two get their act together.
Author's Response: Thank you, Alpha. That is always particualry nice to hear from a fellow writer. Yes- you can see now, having read the next chapter, how improtnat it was to have this slower pace adn gradual recovery.
I know what you mean, my beta is on holiday and I am just about holding back publishing my next story. However, I must say that I think the chapter is very challenging from a punctuation point of view, yet it would make all the difference - brilliant though it still is.
I am in Spain, it is 1 o'clock in the morning, and it is still 24ºC - however, the thermic sensation has risen to at least 40º, if I am not mistaken.
I would say so much about this chapter, 99.9 % of it good - wonderful.
I found the first half of the story did not flow so well, partly due, I believe to a few punctuation issues. But your descriptive narrative, the gradual build up of suspense as Elrohir climbs the stairs, as he succumbs to the black voices, only to realize - too late, that it was not him - but his hunters. Your imagery is wonderful, evokes the scenes you describe almost visually - Another fantastic, enthralling and truly skillful piece of writing.
Author's Response: Ah- I need ot go back againt then- it was, like you, very late and I changed things after Anarithiline had beta'd. I spent sol ong reading and proof reading over and over I htink sometimes you lose sight of it. No time now- I'll do it when I come back. Thank you.
OK, after having been on the move for quite some time, I have finally arriving on windy Anglesey - twelve hours travelling on planes and trains, taxis and busses, braving near hurricanes and horizontal rain, ignoring a few twats along the way, and the odd stray sheep - am I unhapy? frustrated? did I get bored?
The answer of course, is no, for I had the good fortune of being able to read this chapter through it all, and at the end of the day, now in festive pyjamas with a glass of strange, welsh read wine - may I say what a lovely journey it has been.
Author's Response: Sounds like a jourapy through hell so I am very very glad you enjoyed reading that chpater on the way. A real compliment. Next chapter is already finished and just needs some tweaks. I'm getting through it more quickly now I hope and updates should be more frequent as I actually know where I'm going with it now- first time in ages!! Love ziggy
I could not agree more. The chapter is almost perfect (sorry!) from my humble point of view. The reason has to do with Legolas recovering so quickly after his near-death, agony and then memory loss. The previous chapter was so superb in its description of his suffering and it completely drew me in. So perhaps I would have liked to see maybe another day or two before Legolas can, realistically, ride to battle. So congratulations on a near perfect chapter, and please don't keep us waiting so long for the next installment!
Author's Response: I know what you mean about needing more time to recover- Aragorn actually should have left yesterday- I have stolen a day to give Legolas a little more time but it isnt enough really. Of course it all has to fit with Frodo's story too. That's why I made Legolas a bit wobbly and confused rather than bouncing aorund fully fit. He will not really be ready to do anything like normal and I think he is experienced enough to not take risks so he may well surprise them all and travel in a wagon! I felt he was mentally anguished and the morgul blade is less a phyisical wound than spiritual.
Um, that makes the next chapter even more intriguing... and I can't wait, although I know you will make me!
Author's Response: Promise I iwll try not to - but I am glad you said it needed more as it has confirmed something that I was wondering about for the next chapter. Makes it easier to write it now so thanks. Ziggy
Fabulous! And I love this part, such a wonderful thing for one of our heros to imagine...
‘We will make a stand today that will make our people proud of us,’ he said and his voice was defiant, resonant.
It seemed to Gimli that in the mist that lay about the departing camp, ghosts of Men and Elves stood, like the Army of the Dead had done at Pelargir, and he thought he saw a glint of steel in the mists, and far away there was the sound of horns and the distant echo of a battle cry. It was here, after all, that Gil-Galad and Elendil had stood. He shivered slightly and turned to look up where Legolas stood tall against the grey sky, with the wind lifting his hair and a gleam in his strange green eyes as if he too, saw the ghosts of long dead warriors, Elves and Men.
I very much look forward to the last chapter of this wonderful story.
Author's Response: That is so good to see these bits noticed, Alpha- than you for commenting. It is always good when another writer comments because I know you know the hard work that goes into this. Still a couple more chapters to go because I didnt know that something ni the next chapter was going to happen - you know how it is!! xx
Well, well - and here I was thinking this would be the last chapter!! There are always more than you think there are going to be!!
Great writiing, as usual - I really look forward to seeing how you are going to end this, the task seems almost - impossible!
Author's Response: Funnily enough so did I.. for ages, but I felt it needed to be given time to play out - so I am currently working on the battle scene and then, well, if I am really honest, I am not exactly sure how it plays out yet... it can go one of two ways...and hten hopefully I have time to catch up on reading YOUR story as I have fallen so behind.
Oh goodness, how intense this was. I must admit if I were Gimly, I would have some harsh words for the ones that left the poisoned elf alone, in a tent with a young boy who knows nothing of healing, or indeed elves. Grrrr... good job the boy found Elrohir otherwise the others would be on a serious guilt trip.
It was interesting to see Elrohir's non-sadistic side in that last scene and I wonder if he is going to be able to keep that up.
Now, love him he does, because to take that black, spindly, spidery thing himself is a great sacrifice - yet one that perhaps one such as he would be better able to endure - or not? Can't wait for the next chapter, which I hope is not the last!!
Author's Response: Thank you Alpha Ori - I love it that you are so cross about Legolas being left alone with only Beren to look after him! And Elrohir is seriously redeeming himself right now. He is sacrificing himself for Legolas and that shows his abolute unselfish love, as you say. And you are right that he is the one who would endure if anyone could. Two more chapters probalbty and then finally I can get back to reading fics for my own pleasure!
Well, now, I thought you were going to kill them, and I would never have forgiven you for that.
I think I may have blinked while reading this chapter, but I cannot be sure. This chapter was simply - intense, absolutely spellbinding, magical, and utterly - beautiful.
I started out angry at Galdalf and Aragorn, even at Elladan, before I realized his motivations for leaving the tent, and then I wondered if they would die. Then, I knew they would die, and just when I had lost hope... this is what art is about, I believe, provoking such an array of feelngs and emotions, and you, my friend, are an artist.
Author's Response: I'm blushing and pleased - all the better when it's from another writer I enjoy reading. Thank you. As I said to Sian, you have Anar to thank for my not killing Elrohir- I kept finding myself drifting that way and she kept telling me I would be cyber-murdered! But I just needed to find out what happened, and Gandalf happily supplied it.
Well, that just about wraps it up, except for the uncertainty of what Elrohir's reaction to everything will be, and of his intentions of sailing or otherwise. I also wonder if you will clear up the fate of the Greenwood and her king, because the last I heard of that, Thranduil was spitted upon a pike. Was that simply Saruman's venomous hatred or was it real - I imagine it was, as an orc also pointed out the devastation of Mirkwood.
I hope work doesn't put you back too much and we can look forward to the epilogue soonest.
Great writing, insightful descriptions of feelings and attitudes, and a lovely scene between Legolas and Frodo, where our prince works a little woodland magic upon a poor, ailing hobbit.
Author's Response: Yes- I Have got a snippet in the next chapter about Thranduil ,but I have plans for that if I ever get round to it so hold fire on that bit. I am glad you liked the Frodo/Legolas bit - it just seemed very natural that they would all want to help. Thank you dear. See you over on Faerie.
I enjoyed this first chapter, and hopefully will find the time to read the next one a little later on. I have not read the previous stories, and am wondering if this one stands well alone... by the way, I have just realized there is another story with the same title by Gwaelin - I actually thought you were one and the same person until I read the summaries and realized they are two separated stories / authors.
Author's Response: I am glad you enjoyed reading! Most of my stories are standalone within my Greenleaf Chronicles universe (which isn't actually anything different or anything :D) but this story is actually a sequel to From Twilight to Dawn. Thank you for the review!
I am not sure how this fits in with lotr fanfiction, but some of your claims are imprecise from an astronomical point of view.
Author's Response: Hmm. How imprecise? What claims? From what astronomical point of view? I am an astronomy student; if I'm way off somewhere I wish to know! As for fanfiction: My purpose it to show astronomy and Middle-earth collide in the real world - with examples from LotR and Silm for the fanfic author who may want to splash astronomy into her writings as Tolkien so liberally did. Thanks for the critique!
Hello again. I am sure you know that being an astronomy student does not make your claims any more precise, I myself could use the authority argument as I am no longer a student, but that would not make me right, either. I will give you two points from your story that you may wish to look at. To detect a mag 12 star, you don't need an 8 inch telescope, you'd be fine with something much smaller, around 4.5 to 5 . Re asteroids, or minor planets, not all asteroids orbit the Sun. Please take my comments positively, as that was the purpose of them.
Author's Response: I based mag limits on my own experiences; with an 8-inch I don't have much luck with mags above 13. Iapetus has been the highlight of my scope's career. :P (Granted my skies are not Arizona pristine!) But thank you - it is fixed now! I did not include asteroids that orbit planets in my definition for simplicity's sake and because they do not make up the bulk of the minor planet population. But you are right, it is unfair to them! I will ammend that too. Thank you for the comments! It caused me to take a critical reread! :D If I sounded short it was because I hoped for clarifications. Thank you for taking the time to provide them! :)
That was lovely. Thank you for sharing it.
Author's Response: Thanks Alpha, not as lovely as your stories though :) I haven't forgotten the new update, it's just been busy for me lately. Hopefully later tonight I will read it :)
That was gorgeous. You have provided me with my dose of fluffiness for quite a while! Well done. Did you find yourself a beta?
Author's Response: Thanks! This is my first attempt at semi-fluff, so glad it delighted you. :) As for the beta, not really, but I will survive. Thanks for asking. :)