bloody hell. that is good
I like the way you described the way Legolas was upset at Kimberly's *dad*. And I did not find anything offensive, it made me think of my friend, and how she needed a mom like Kimberly's.
brilliant, it made me cry, as if I was there with her
you should have the spell back fire on her, that way, she'd be sent away from Middle Earth, ridding the lovers of her idiocy.
what does arwenamin mean? it sounds like he's saying "my Arwen"
lol. not my gumdrop buttons
Not to be too critical, but I suggest using more detail in describing the scene, like explaining what Legolas' new room looks like. And there are many holes in this story, like how Thranduil went from cold and abusive to loving, and putting Legolas up to adoption. This is a good plot, and I like the premises, you just need to connect the lines with setting, description, and use of emotions.
Try to make the characters' emotions reach out to the readers. make them feel the emotions as if it were from their own heart.
I hope i'm making sense to you.
oh by god, that's funny. From a child's point of view, its so confusion when questions pop up, and no one is there to answer them. thank the Valor for Eowyn.
Also, what is with the ... instead of an E in Eowyn. I don't get it, and I have seen in in a lot of other stories, like ...lrond, and ...restor, It doesn't make any sence to me. please clarify
Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, we all of us owe Eowyn so much... As for the "..." showing up in names, that tends to happen when the site changes formatting. Because Éowyn should have an accent over the first letter of her name (I put one in now; let's see if it shows up when I post this), sometimes certain formatting won't support that, so instead a "..." will show up its place, because either the website itself or your current browser won't support the funky letter. It's very annoying as a writer, I'll tell you that; when I first posted this the É showed up fine. Now I suppose I'll have to go through and edit things to try and bring it back...sigh!
I can't stop crying. this chapter, makes my stomach clench and my heart ache for Zinnia. I know that child abuse is a very hard thing to write about, and I have to congratulate you on being able to make such a horrid subject bring tenderness to my heart. you are a great, and wonderful writer
what did Arwen mean when she said "Practice"?
These are BRILLIANT! I told my 16 year old cousin to read it, and he didn't get number 37, and 54(He finds Hilary Duff very attractive)
the next time you visit that boy, tell him life is never over, and that no matter what other people say, he can reach the skies. i once new someone that had cancer, and she did not let anything stand in her way, she died doing what she loved best, art, so i would let the boy do what he loves, and let his spirit shine free.
Okay, I would like to say that this is a good story, but I just want to ask what is wrong with the spacing between the paragraphs in the third and fourth chapter thing. Also, I would like to comment that in the second chapter, a part of the third was in the second, and the fount is all weird in some parts of the story. I just wanted to make sure you knew what was up. But this is a good story plot, and The summary sent chills up my spine. I wish I was that good. Happy writing
i like the cross over, good idea for the book, I really like the plot line
what does Tor’g-la’ther mean? o.0
Author's Response: Oh, wow, I’m nearly ashamed of this story now. So, uh, it means something along the lines of troll piss... yeah, sorry 'bout that. :P Any case, thank ya for reading! :)
i like the idea of the story, you should write about Legolas growing up, that would bring in the readers, and if you write other chapters as well as this, you'll be golden
love it, please update soon.
Author's Response: thank you, I'm glad you liked it!
Continue! Please! This is bloody good and I want to know what happens next
Author's Response: Aww, thank yu :)
please please please please continue. This story is brilliant! I love it the plot
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
OH MY GOD! She's being kidnapped my the Uruk-hi! Not Good. Not good at ALL.