Wow. Your descriptions are so moving. I noticed several themes/ ideas here that were in Tolkien's letters; it's great to see them used in such a touching story. It's sad to think that Frodo saw Sam as an innocent, but not himself, although I agree he probably thought that, given his words in the Scouring of the Shire.
Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, I think the poor fellow started seeing himself as tainted when he woke up in Rivendell and finally convinced himself that he was at Amon Hen. It simply made me want to protect and comfort him even more. Thank you for reading!
How sweet! Wonderful depiction of Bilbo, though if he was this taken with Frodowhy wouldn't Bilbo have adopted him directly after his parents' deaths? The description of little Frodo drinking the cider made me laugh.
Author's Response: LOL! I have kids, can you tell? That\'s a good question and I have seen it answered many different ways. I always assumed that since Frodo was such a well adjusted adult, he must have had some excellent and supportive foster parents, either Rory and Menegilda or even Esmeralda and Saradoc - and that they were loath to give him up. Since he went to live with Bilbo at 20/21, an age I always associated with 14 - 15 in human years, perhaps it had more to do with \'the worst rascal of Buckland\' needing more space/discipline/attention than he would have found in Buckland? I guess we will never know but it does make for some very fun fanfic possibilities.
I like your young Estel here - the first chapter especially made me smile - and I do get a real sense of the family, especially between the brothers. I'll be interested to see how Arwen gets back at them...
Author's Response: Thanks, I love writing about little Estel and his family. More to be updated!
I like the idea of this; it's different. I'm sure I haven't seen many fics from the Haradrim's POV. Neat title, too. **Please** keep Akshamala real, and don't turn her into a Mary-Sue or superhero or anything. From that scarring ritual, I really get the sense that this is a warlike culture. I love the last paragraph, and assume the next part will explain why she's lost her freedom?
About the language issue: it works when it's in the narrative, but the direct translation is a bit bothersome to me (like in the prayer or when her mother is speaking). If I overheard someone praying in English, I would understand what they were saying. And mentioning the pelda u'eteumwa-le and biritaki in the narrative already give a sense of the foreignness of the Haradrim. A phrase worked in about what the biritaki is used for might be helpful, though.
Will there be a scene about the baby mumaks? Don't elephants need to be near water? It'll be interesting to see what you do with this.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review! :) And, about the language issue: From what I have written, 95% of what they speak is in English, but is assumed to be Haradic. There are some things, however, that I have written directly in Haradic. As the story line progresses, you may understand why. And Akshamala isn\'t a super-hero. I hope. *wink* Thank you!
Well, I'm hooked so far. I like how you keep reminding the reader that Charles Gregory is well-bred - it really adds to the creepiness. 'Desperately dead' really struck me as a great choice of words. Reading on...
Author's Response: *dance of thanks* :)
Still liking this! Nice descriptions. I could wish the chapters were a little longer, but maybe that's just me. Now I just have to wait for your next update, because I'm wondering what river they ended up in.
Author's Response: You\'ll probably find out (or figure it out) in this chapter or the next. These chapters are very expository, and as we get deeper into the story the chapters will become more lengthy. Thanks!