Reviews by Elbragol
Summary: We all know what happens to Gandalf during the books, but what were his secret thoughts? Read Gandalf's secret diary during his last 20 years in Middle Earth.
Categories: Book-verse, Movie-verse Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Bilbo, Frodo, Galadriel, Gandalf / Olorin, Gimli, Gollum, Legolas, Manwe, Merry, Pippin, Sam, Sméagol, The Fellowship, Théoden
Genres: Action/Adventure, Fantasy, Humor
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 6 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 6491 Read Count: 8631
Published: Jul 06 2008 Updated: May 22 2015 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Laughter Floating Over My Shoulder Reviewer: Elbragol Signed
I'm guessing this is a movie-verse version. If so, good in a way, particularly as you show knowledge of the book-verse in the names of the Valar and various elf-friends. I would like to know how Gandalf got to Minas Tirith and back in a couple of days? Look at the map: it is a long way, practically the same distance as it is to Mordor. And no, he would not use teleportation magic; if he could do that he could not have been imprisoned on top of Orthanc. And he would not have needed Shadowfax.

It was always my biggest bugbear with the film that they gave no impression of the passage of years involved between the Party and Frodo leaving the Shire (it was seventeen years).

There is a full timeline of The Third Age, with a detailed account of everyone's movements in the back of RotK (book). You will also learn that the War of the Ring was 3018-19 of the TA, not 3000. The Party was in 3001.

See for the timeline if you don't have access to the book.

I know the movie-verse is allowed some deviation from the book, but loving the books, I just had to put the record straight.

P.S. I remember reading a very good "Secret Diary of Curumo" way, way back, probably 1996, when the internet was all new and shiny (to me, at any rate). It was probably the first piece of fan fiction I had ever read. Very good it was too; a little bit tongue-in-cheek but sticking faithfully to the book. Curumo was Saruman's name in Valinor. OMG it is still there:

Author's Response: It is sorta movie-verse, sorta book-verse, sorta messing with the timeline. A lot of the first chapters I had written just based on my memory at the time so it was a weird mixture between the two. As the story progresses I have been writing it with the timeline next to me. That being said, I did mess with some dates and as you have noticed, some of them don't make too much sense. Bear with them for now as they get more accurate later. Unless I am misunderstanding what you are saying, I think you just missed where I changed years. I generally put only the month and the day except for the first entry of a new year. The years do change so that the War of the Ring is in 3018-3019. I'll have to check out that fanfiction. Thanks for the link!
Date: Jun 15 2013
Life Unknown by smende83 Rated: NC-17 [Reviews - 13]
Summary: Ithilwen is lost, orphaned, and alone. After being chased by Orcs and found by a small group of elves, this woman of Gondor must learn her true identify and past to be able to figure out her future. Her journey will take her with the fellowship as they fight to destroy the One Ring and also into the arms of an elf. Tenth Member Story. Rated NC-17 for future chapters.
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Boromir, Celeborn, Denethor, Elrond, Eomer, Eowyn, Faramir, Frodo, Galadriel, Gandalf / Olorin, Gimli, Haldir, Legolas, Merry, Orcs/Uruk-Hai, Original Character, Pippin, Sam, Saruman, Sauron, The Fellowship, Théoden
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Family, Friendship, General, Hurt/Comfort, Romance, Suspense
Warnings: Graphic Sex, Violence
Series: Life Series
Chapters: 17 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 55303 Read Count: 13228
Published: Dec 14 2012 Updated: Jun 23 2013 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2 Reviewer: Elbragol Signed
List of known half-elves:
Dior: son of Beren (man) & Luthien Tinuviel(half elf, half Maia). Married an elf; child together Elwing.
Earendil: son of Tuor (man) and Idril Celebrindal (elf). Married Elwing (half elf; see above). Their children: Elrond and Elros.
At first all half elves had by default the life of the Eldar. When Earendil reached Aman, there was a debate among the Valar as to what their fate should be. It was revealed that any half elf could choose the Gift of Illuvatar, to be accounted among Men and die after a (very) long life. Earendil would have chosen to be a man, but out of love for Elwing, who wished to be numbered among the Eldar, he accepted the burden of immortality.
Their children, Elrond and Elros, were also given the choice. Elrond chose to be of the Eldar, Elros chose to be a man. He was the first King of Numenor. Thereafter the choice was not available to his heirs. Elrond married Celebrian, the daughter of Celeborn and Galadriel (elf) and they had three children; Elladan, Elrohir and Arwen Undomiel. Each of these children of a Half Elf who had chosen immortality was also allowed the choice; it would seem that even though they had a pure blood elf mother and a half elf father who had chosen the life of the Eldar, the choice was still available to them. Arwen certainly chose mortality in order to marry Aragorn. It would appear that even so she did not age as a mortal woman and that even then she could perhaps have chosen immortality, but instead she went to Lothlorien and lay down to sleep, surrendering her spirit.

The child of Aragorn and Arwen; Elfstan, although technically a half elf, was a mortal man without a choice because his elvish parent had renounced immortality.

Other half elves are hinted at, especially with regard to the princes of Dol Amroth, whose ancestors must have intermarried on at least one occasion with an elf of the people of Nimrodel.

None of these had a special power. Elrond's mastery over water comes from Vilya, the Ring of Water. Arwen did not have this power, although she does in the film. It was Elrond who raised the river against the Nazgul.

Author's Response: Thank you for all of the information. I do greatly appreciate it. I will keep this in mind. I just took an idea I had and went with it. This is just a work of fiction and it its one that I am truly enjoying writing. I hope you're enjoying the story. Thank you for the review!
Date: May 26 2013
Summary: Ecthelion thinks he's been snubbed. Glorfindel surprises him.
Categories: Book-verse, Book Verse Slash Characters: Ecthelion, Glorfindel
Genres: General, Romance
Warnings: Slash (same sex pairing)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 884 Read Count: 1004
Published: May 11 2013 Updated: May 11 2013 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Elbragol Signed
A nice light tale of the peaceful days of Gondolin.

I am a little uncertain what you mean by "Begatting Day" as it is problematic on several levels.

Firstly the tense is wrong. Begat only belongs as a past tense, as in the biblical "Abraham begat Isaac" sense. Begetting would be more correct.

Secondly is the meaning. As a verb "to beget" is best translated as "to conceive" A Begetting Day would thus be a celebration of the conception of the person involved. I know that elves are different, but not that different.

Finally, and this is a bit picky, but how often would the Eldar consider it worth having an anniversary? Every coronar? It would be a bit repetitive for them, don't you think? The anniversary worth celebrating would only occur every yen (144 coronar). And probably their birth day or naming day, rather than the date of their conception. ;-)
Date: May 26 2013
Summary: A collection of songs I wrote for a fanfic hopefully to be posted before the end of the year.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Aule
Genres: Poetry
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), Character Death
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 973 Read Count: 1834
Published: May 11 2013 Updated: Apr 09 2014 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Brand's Monody Reviewer: Elbragol Signed
Thank you for your poem, Azyung, I feel that poems of the North are few and far between.

However, you neglect the few details that are known of the fall of Brand. In Appendix A of the LOTR, ("Durin's Folk") we learn of a conversation with Gandalf and Gimli in Minas Tirith after the War of the Ring.

"... now we hear that Dain has fallen, fighting in Dale again, even while we fought here. I should call that a heavy loss, if it was not a wonder rather that in his great age he could still wield his axe as mightily as they say he did, standing over the body of King Brand before the Gate of Erebor until the darkness fell."

We know from elsewhere that both Thorin Stonehelm and Bard II sent emissaries to the coronation of King Elessar, so these two would both have brought accurate news of what happened. These leaders broke the siege by issuing forth from the Mountain.

All of this suggests that Brand fell at the Gate of Erebor. I love your detail of a Fount of Heroes in Dale, but it does not match the record of LOTR. Perhaps it would be possible to rewrite it so that the place of his fall is the steps leading up to Erebor, and that fitting mention is also made of the fall of his friend and ally, Dain Ironfoot.

Author's Response: Dear Elbragol, Thank you for your review! The writings that we have done are based upon the World of Tolkien, but not the specific events. We actually attempted to take many of the countries and characters and develop our own stories based on the assumption that the basic story is the same. Thanks again, Azyung.
Date: May 26 2013
Evermind by ToriLee Rated: NC-17 [Reviews - 6]
Summary: Nearly 116 years after the death of Elessar, Middle Earth continues to flourish. Looking into the lives of the King of Rohan and his family, and the struggle they go through to save their country from deception.
Categories: Book-verse, Off Topic Characters: Eomer, Original Character, Théoden, Théodred
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Fantasy, Hurt/Comfort
Warnings: Character Death, Graphic Sex, Rape, Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 14 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 26231 Read Count: 8703
Published: May 26 2013 Updated: Nov 02 2015 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Elbragol Signed
I like this very much, it feels like Rohan and the characters are interesting.

I think that you could rethink the dates at the beginning. Elessar died in 120FA, so 116 years later would be 236FA, which sounds like a good setting for this story, whereas the dates past 1000FA do not feel right.

Tolkein made it clear that Elessar had taken war to the Haradrim and the Easterlings. To my mind that would require the taking of Umbar, as the coastal city would make an excellent base of operations in Harad. It might have rebelled, of course, or been retaken after his death.

But, hey, it's your story. Looking forward to the next installment

Author's Response: Thank you very much for reviewing. I read in my book that Elessar dies 1541 S.R. It could've been my thinking way too much about it. But I'll definitely take a closer look at it. And it was my intention to have the Haradrim and Corsairs start to appear again. But I'll look at that too. But that you again for reviewing.
Date: May 26 2013
Summary: Bilbo's diary in the year leading up to his departure. Detailing festivals to friends, romances to relatives, Bilbo documents his last year in the Shire.
Categories: Book-verse, Movie-verse Characters: Bilbo
Genres: Family
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 10 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 21777 Read Count: 3166
Published: Jun 04 2013 Updated: Jun 16 2013 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Halimath Reviewer: Elbragol Signed
An excellent start! I love your use of the Hobbit calendar, and of course you don't have to worry about working out what the day of the week is, because every year is the same in the Shire Reckoning.

I loved the touch about tenants. Tolkein is very quiet about the real source of Baggins wealth, but his father was already comfortably well off before any dragon or troll gold came along, and he certainly didn't work by the sweat of his brow, so land holdings would be a very obvious source of revenue.

I was a little confused when I started writing, because I assumed that "his last year" meant before he went to the Grey Havens. To be honest, this probably makes for a better "last year" than the one I imagined.

I'm hooked; I'll be back for more!
Date: Jun 12 2013
Title: Chapter 3: Blotmath Reviewer: Elbragol Signed
Still enjoying this; but is this Frodo and Sam or Ralph and Ted? If you don't know what that is, see

Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Hello and thank you for your reviews! I just followed the link and I can definitely see the resemblance! I hope it's not a bad thing?! Because in the books the fact Sam is Frodo's servant plays a much more important role than in the film, so I wanted to get that across. And I'd never thought about the title being interpreted like that. I'm glad you think this is better! :) I'm so happy you're liking it so far and I really hope you continue to enjoy the rest of the chapters! :D Taurauthiel Eruwaedhiel
Date: Jun 12 2013
Title: Chapter 9: Thrimidge Reviewer: Elbragol Signed
Bravo, bravissimo!

It has been a pleasure to read a story by someone who knows and loves Tolkein's books and the world of hobbits that he created.

I look forward to the rest of the year!

Please read my story about Gimli in Valinor (its actually a dream, but one sent by Irmo). You will find there a cosy little scene that fits in quite well with your story.


Author's Response: Aw I am so so happy you like it :D your reviews are very much appreciated! I will definitely be sure to check out your story! No better way to thank you for your wonderful support. :) I hope you will enjoy the rest of the story, once I update! T.E.
Date: Jun 12 2013
Summary: Awkward moments featuring many of our other favourite characters! Ents, Rohirrim, as well as members of our beloved Fellowship will all star in this collection of embarrassing situations.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Aragorn
Genres: Humor
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2299 Read Count: 1134
Published: Jun 19 2013 Updated: Jun 20 2013 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 2: Horses Reviewer: Elbragol Signed
Good stuff - but why ...omer? Are you waiting to insert the accented E? If so, help yourself to this little gift: …


Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! The ... is because the formatting doesn't seem to recognise it, because I definitely put an E with the accent when I wrote it on Word! But oh well. I hope its not too distracting! :/ Thank you for your review! I shall update soon, so I hope you will like the rest of the story!! :)
Date: Jun 26 2013