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Mysterious Fate by Cormak Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 70]
Summary: Winner of the Flame of Anor Award: Best Movie Verse Story. A stranger from another realm joins the fellowship, unaware of what danger, love and heartbreak lies ahead. Legolas/OC
Categories: Movie-verse
Characters: Aragorn, Legolas, Gimli, Frodo, Sam, Merry, Pippin, Gandalf / Olorin, Boromir, Original Character
Genres: Romance, Action/Adventure
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 36 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 178591 Read Count: 81502
[Report This] Published: 05/07/04 Updated: 14/02/05
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Date: 31/08/13 Title: Chapter 26: Promises to Thyself

Ahhh they left her, but it's probably for the best, she wouldn't end up to well I don't think. Hopefully she can make herself feel useful, she must feel so in the way at times.

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Date: 29/08/13 Title: Chapter 16: I veleg lend ned i neled noss

We just had to have a cliff hanger didn't we?! right when hse was about to tell him! guess I'll have to read on to see what happened and see if my thoughts are correct.

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Date: 29/08/13 Title: Chapter 13: Hope would not be lost

Hmmm so we've got a little more, albeit small, but of her past. Obviously the injury causes her much pain, maybe it leads to her fear of daggers/knives? Hmmm much to wonder about. Ohh and the next battle is coming, what on earth will she do?

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Date: 29/08/13 Title: Chapter 15: Forsaken

Im am glad that you did not make her a wonderful fighter in this battle like I have seen so many do. It is one thing growing up to learn it, but not in a months time. Her wekness was shown and thats a good thing to me. I cannot wait to keep reading.

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Date: 28/08/13 Title: Chapter 3: The Slaying in the Tomb of Balin

I must say I an intrigued by the story, it's one of the few girl falls into middle earth I've read but I'm wanting to I've it a shot and so far I like and I like your writing style! Can't wait to read more

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Date: 29/08/13 Title: Chapter 10: Troubled Souls

So I am interested in why it is she is so afraid of knives, and you mentioned past memories when boromir struck her. Makes me think something happened to her or she saw something in her own world to cause it, guess I have to wait and read more to find out!

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Date: 01/09/13 Title: Chapter 34: Melethril

Finally!!!! Now kaitlyn just doesn't need to over think it and take Gandalfs advice! I wish your story was not so entrapping as I really need to be studying XD

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Date: 01/09/13 Title: Chapter 29: An Unlikely Warrior

Oh no!!! She can't die, but seeing how there are more chapters following my fingers are crossed she lives! It's good to see that change in her character. And the man of Rohan is redeeming himself helping her to the caves. Can't wait to finish!

Summary: Alexandra Ward's life had been going down hill. she lost her job, her apartment building had been broken into, and on top of that, her magical powers seemed to be betraying her. When reciting a spell to help her life turn for the better, she gets transported to Middle Earth, in the middle of the greatest war imagineable. The war for the One Ring.
Categories: Movie-verse
Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Balrog, Boromir, Elrond, Eomer, Eowyn, Frodo, Galadriel, Gandalf / Olorin, Gimli, Haldir, Legolas, Mouth of Sauron, Nazgűl, Original Character, Sam, Saruman, Sauron, The Fellowship
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Fantasy, Romance
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 27 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 57625 Read Count: 48081
[Report This] Published: 12/04/08 Updated: 21/04/09
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Date: 04/09/13 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3: The Mine of Moria

I felt this may have been a little rushed, I don't feel I'm really getting to connect with her. Also she seemed very self assured and confident upon their first meeting, however this could just be her personality. Otherwise though I still like the idea of this story and hope to continue reading

Aralinn

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Date: 02/09/13 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Spell gone Wrong

Interesting start, I'll be interested in seeing where this goes. I would suggest though, putting spaces in between paragraphs and when a new character starts speaking, it helps readers follow along.other than that, great start!

Aralinn

Summary:

A ring can represent practically anything. Undying love, a silent promise, real friendship, commitment, but also nobility, worship or faith. There are rings that symbolize dependence, enslavement, eternity, and apparently there is one that stands for all that’s evil in this world. But let’s not forget a ring is nothing more than a piece of metal that fits nicely around a finger. It doesn’t even have to be pretty.

So don’t ask me why I ended up risking my life, going on this quest to destroy one. I mean, you can’t really blame me for getting caught up in things I don’t even believe in, right?

Be warned: this is a tenth walker fic and English is my second language. It’s possible you’ll hate this story, but don’t forget you’re not legally obliged to do so. And seriously, I really like readers and absolutely love reviewers.


Categories: Movie-verse
Characters: Aragorn, Boromir, Frodo, Gandalf / Olorin, Gimli, Legolas, Merry, Original Character, Pippin, Sam
Genres: Action/Adventure, General, Romance
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), First Draft
Series: None
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 60000 Read Count: 49013
[Report This] Published: 04/03/09 Updated: 27/03/14
Reviewer: Aralinn Signed
Date: 29/08/13 Title: *The Regrets of the Valar*

Well I finished it finally, and I'm very sad because I did not want this story to end! I fell in love with the characters and am sad I am having to part with them! For English not to be your primary language I again applaud you for how well it was written, and I hope that you'll have more stories I can read!

Author's Response: Thank you for all your review, Aralinn!I'm glad you didn't like that it was over: that's such a huge compliment :-)! I'm afraid I don't have other stories on offer, other than the rewrite you already know about.

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Date: 27/08/13 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 18

Thanks for your replies to my reviews first off! Hopefully I will get to your new story soon, I have actually gotten very drawn into this story. In this chapter I would watch your terms, iris may use the phrase 'hitting on' but I doubt that anyone from middle earth would. Just a thought. I'm wondering now if Legolas will tell her or not?? And what will she do whe they ride to the black gates?

Author's Response: Thank you for another review! There is absolutely no need to thank me for replying; getting reviews is the absolute best part of writing fanfiction. :) Thanks also for pointing out the somewhat overly modern use of language in this chapter. It's certainly not very Tolkienish. At the same time I can'tfor the life of me see the two men being formal with each other after everything they've been through, and no one sounds old-fashioned when speaking the language of their own time. First I thought about correcting it, but I'm going to go with the easy way out and call it 'lost in translation'. I hope the ending will not be a dissapointment!

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Date: 27/08/13 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12

I must say I like the change in that she doesn't participate in te battles, it's a fresh new take for me, good job!

Author's Response: Hi Aralinn! Thank you very much for all of your reviews! I'm glad your liking it so far and I think it's great that you kept leaving reviews even when I hadn't responded to earlier ones. I intended to improve the story by rewriting it, but ended up just writing a practically new story based on the same person and ideas. I'm sure the newer version therefore again contains many grammer/spelling mistakes, but I have given a little bit more thought to Iris' line of thought etc. Maybe you would feel a tiny bit more satisfied with how far I go into her feelings there, but I sure wouldn't dare promise anything.

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Date: 25/08/13 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 3

I like that she dropped into ME without just randomly knowing the language. All too often they get dropped in and automatically know common tongue or even elvish!

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Date: 26/08/13 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8

Well I must say other than a few grammatical errors, there arent any negative things I would point out. I do know you are rewriting this in a different site (I'll read it after XD) but I would like to see more insight into Iris' feelings, I feel we've only touched the surface of them and I really want to feel what she does. And also more in her relations with the fellowship members and her thoughts about where there relationships stand and such, anyways can't wait to keep reading!

Aralinn

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Date: 25/08/13 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1

Well I haven't been to keen on girl falls into middle story, however I found that I like your writing style and how you portrayed her thoughts and feelings. Even though you did not go into grey depths, it is only the start of the story anyway,I still felt I could really feel her thoughts/feelings and such. And so forth, I think I will give this story a try!

Summary: A woman from a long forgotten realm joins the fellowship. Not only to destroy The One Ring, but the kill another enemy of her own. Will she succeed or will she fail? (I suck at summaries. Rated M just in case.)
Categories: Book Verse Slash, Movie-verse
Characters: Legolas
Genres: Romance
Warnings: Violence
Series: None
Chapters: 17 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 40896 Read Count: 3586
[Report This] Published: 22/03/13 Updated: 01/02/14
Reviewer: Aralinn Signed
Date: 25/08/13 Title: Chapter 0: Who are you?

It's already been pointed out about the grammar, so I won't get Into that other than praising you for doing as well as you did writing in a non-native tongue! I would suggest putting in paragraph. Each time a new person talks or the idea changes a new paragraph should be started. It makes it look better, flow better, and easier to read. I think so far though you have a good base for this story and I'd be interested in seeing where it goes!
Aralinn