Reviews by Anais
Summary: When Mary Sues invade and the characters stay in character.
Categories: Other Movies Characters: Will Turner, Captain Jack Sparrow
Genres: Humor, Parody
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2891 Read Count: 4868
Published: 12/07/04 Updated: 11/29/05 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 2: When Sues Attack Reviewer: Anais Signed
I wish all Sues would disappear as easily as they do in your story. Very cute. Now what's this about daddy?
Date: 12/11/04
by Rated: [Reviews - ]
Summary:
Categories: Orphan Characters: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 0 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 0 Read Count: 0
Published: 12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69 [Report This]
Title: None Reviewer: Anais Signed
You know, love, if all Sues were as well thought out as yours here, there'd be far fewer calls from me to you at 2 AM, howling about whom I'll mutilate.

Thank you for dedicating it to me, darling. I am actually a little speechless and am feeling remarkably loved. And it's a Mary Sue parody...My God, you really do know me very well!

You're absolutely lovely and the story is hysterical. More, more, more :)
Date: 12/15/04
Into M.E. by Varia Lectio Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 5]
Summary: A fairly dim-witted, Legolas-lusting girl falls into Middle-earth for no particularly good reason. What will she when she lands in a rather hostile, very ugly, and most importantly, *Legolas-free* area of her favorite fantasy world? Mary Sue parody!
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Original Character, Other
Genres: Humor, Parody
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2152 Read Count: 1418
Published: 12/14/04 Updated: 12/14/04 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Into M.E. Reviewer: Anais Signed
Bébé, let me tell you something quite honestly. Ready?

YOU ROCK!
Date: 12/15/04
Summary: Sequel to "Into M.E."! Taraieiel meets her destiny-- and the object of her fondest dreams-- but is he everything that she'd hoped for?
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Legolas, Original Character, Other
Genres: Humor, Parody
Warnings: Character Death, AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3522 Read Count: 1235
Published: 12/14/04 Updated: 12/14/04 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: It's Leggy To The Rescue! Reviewer: Anais Signed
"Oh, baby, baby, how was I supposed to know? That something wasn't riiight!"

More, more and more. These stories give me my sanity back...
Date: 12/15/04
Dark Horse by Varia Lectio Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 5]
Summary: "Some years ago the Lord of the Black Land wished to purchase horses of us at great price, but we refused him, for he puts beasts to evil use. Then he sent plundering Orcs, and they carry off what they can, choosing always the black horses..." ~Eomer of Rohan. A story about the steed of the Witch-King, and how he came to be free.  
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Witch King, Frodo
Genres: Drama, Horror, Angst, Tragedy
Warnings: Character Death, Torture
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1560 Read Count: 5202
Published: 12/14/04 Updated: 12/14/04 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Dark Horse Reviewer: Anais Signed
I am becoming one of your fangirls, aren't I? Mon Dieu, how embarassing.

Start nominating your stories for awards. They are worth it...
Date: 12/15/04
Summary: A look into her fabled mirror shows Galadriel the horrific possible fates that await both the Fellowship of the Ring and herself.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Sauron, Boromir, Frodo, Galadriel
Genres: Drama, Horror
Warnings: Character Death, AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 795 Read Count: 1493
Published: 12/14/04 Updated: 12/14/04 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: The Mirror of Galadriel Reviewer: Anais Signed
Very powerful. I like the idea and sadly, while there aren't enough Galadriel stories, yours is definitely one of the good ones.
Date: 12/15/04
My Immortal by Artino2 Rated: R [Reviews - 6]
Summary: Elrohir meets the beautiful Eowyn at his sister's wedding. Will she be the deciding factor in whether or not he leaves with his father to Valinor or will he love her enough to die for her?
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Elrohir
Genres: Romance, Drama, Angst
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 8581 Read Count: 4814
Published: 12/15/04 Updated: 06/21/05 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2 Reviewer: Anais Signed
It's an interesting idea to pair off Eowyn with one of the Elves but timing-wise it's not very accurate. At that point she would have already met Faramir and fallen in love with him. You make no mention of him.
There are a lot of rhetorical questions out there. Watch out for those. Also, don't repeat yourself quite as much. You stated already that Elladan relied heavily on his twin brother (incidentally, "twin" is always spelled with a lower case "t"). There's really no need to repeat yourself.
Date: 08/04/05
Summary: Gandalf helps the Old Took celebrate a holiday.
Categories: Book Verse Slash Characters: Gandalf / Olorin, Other
Genres: Romance
Warnings: Slash (same sex pairing), Graphic Sex
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 5974 Read Count: 1348
Published: 12/17/04 Updated: 12/17/04 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Midsummer's Eve in Tookborough Reviewer: Anais Signed
I came over from the Forums to read your story. Curious...definitely, definitely curious. When you said you had odd pairings, you weren't kidding, were you?

This is very descriptive and pretty well written. I couldn't find much wrong with it other than it was in the wrong category and did not have an AU warning.

Tolkien Book Verse is for canon-friendly stories only and LotR section is more lenient. I also made this story AU because Old Took's sexuality was determined and thus, if he's gay, it's going to be AU. I hope that makes sense.

I moved the stories for you. I hope you will not mind. If the rules are confusing you, there's going to be an update soon :)
Date: 12/17/04
Summary: Originally called Elrond's Orange Robes, Arwen has some fun with family and friends. Don't get any weird ideas, sickos of the world!
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Legolas, Gandalf / Olorin, Elrond, Elrohir, Celeborn, Galadriel, Thranduil, Elladan, Glorfindel, Haldir, Erestor, Figwit
Genres: Action/Adventure, Humor, Parody, General, Mystery, Fantasy
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 13 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 6157 Read Count: 16839
Published: 12/17/04 Updated: 01/31/06 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 2: Elrond Reviewer: Anais Signed
Arwen playing pranks...Very intriguing.

What I find very distracting about your story is you constantly changing tenses.
"The man puts a sleeping spell on the three boys" is in present tense but then the rest of the story continues in past tense.
It's not necessary to switch around so much or at all for that matter. Keep it all in one tense.

All of the chapters have the same title. Was that intentional? I must say it's original but ...You can see the titles in the actual text but you might want to put that title in the control panel instead of leaving it all "Elrond".

There are a few mistakes so please pay careful attention to your spell check or get a beta reader. We have betas at the Forums so you don't have to go very far to look.

Author's Response: Yeah, I'm sorry about the past present mistake, I tried to fix that over and over, but when I uploaded it kept reverting back. I really thought I had it this time. The Elrond chapter title thing was a mistake too, I will try to fix these things as soon as possible.
Date: 12/17/04
Mind Games by Liregon Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 3]
Summary: Arwen's fate is tied to that of the ring, and thus captures the attention of Sauron, who wishes to destroy her no matter what. Sort of extension to Aragorn's dream about Arwen at Dunharrow. Oneshot.
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Arwen, Sauron
Genres: Drama, Angst
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1634 Read Count: 1303
Published: 12/20/04 Updated: 12/20/04 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter1 Reviewer: Anais Signed
Powerfully written. I enjoyed reading this. You might want to take out the hyperlinks in the story though. They are pretty distracting. Pace yourself a bit more. While the feeling of suffocation present here is appropriate, you might want to "breathe" a little bit :)
Date: 12/22/04
Summary: What if Arwen had decided to leave Middle-Earth ? An adaptation of "Arwen's song".
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Aragorn, Arwen
Genres: Drama
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 426 Read Count: 1471
Published: 12/23/04 Updated: 12/23/04 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: The Bitter Taste of Immortality Reviewer: Anais Signed
Very poignant. I suppose that is exactly how Arwen would have felt had she decided to sail to Valinor with the rest of her people.
Date: 12/24/04
Family Bonds by Nethien Rated: G [Reviews - 6]
Summary: Estel (young Aragorn) learns the true meaning of family. Family Fluff. AU
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Aragorn, Elrond, Elrohir, Elladan, Glorfindel, Original Character
Genres: General
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2169 Read Count: 2021
Published: 12/31/04 Updated: 12/31/04 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: family bonds Reviewer: Anais Signed
Interesting subject matter. I liked this but since you have quite a few spelling and grammatical errors, I strongly suggest that you get a beta reader.

I am not sure if Aragorn would ever call Elrond "ada". Yes, Elrond did bring him up but Aragorn always knew that Arathorn was his father because Gilraen (his mother) always made a point of him knowing that, his heritage, etc.

I enjoy reading your stories but you might want to pay attention to these little things. They will make your stories a lot better!
Date: 01/11/05
by Rated: [Reviews - ]
Summary:
Categories: Orphan Characters: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 0 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 0 Read Count: 0
Published: 12/31/69 Updated: 12/31/69 [Report This]
Title: None Reviewer: Anais Signed
Very sweet. I really enjoyed it. It has a few modernisms though:
"that says something right there", "Prince Charming", "Knight in Shining Armour", etc. Since Éowyn is writing this quite some time before these phrases were invented, you might want to substitute them with something else.

There are some grammatical mistakes and some sentences seem a bit awkward because they stop almost mid-breath (hope that makes sense). It matches the mood, Éowyn trying to explain everything, etc. but try to make them flow a bit more.

Overall, I really enjoyed reading this. You captured her feelings very well.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I appreciate your honesty. I will look through the piece and make the necessary adjustments.
Date: 01/11/05
Summary: What does happen when you go to school with the fellowship of the ring? Four friends will find out! Join Keri, Grace, Audie, and Taylor as they journey through Middle Earth. What they don't know, is that one of their lives is in grave danger! Will they be able to destroy the armies of Isengard in time?
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Legolas, Gimli, Frodo, Sam, Merry, Pippin, Gandalf / Olorin, Elrond, Rosie, Boromir, Faramir, Thranduil, Original Character
Genres: Romance, Action/Adventure, Drama, Fantasy
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 27852 Read Count: 22865
Published: 01/08/05 Updated: 05/07/05 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Four Friends and the Beginnings of an Adventure Reviewer: Anais Signed
I am somewhat confused right now. Why is the entire cast of the Lord of the Rings in the 21st century? There isn't much of an introduction and it seems a bit disjointed.

Keri doesn't like Gimli or Arwen? Why? There isn't an explanation. While you may bring up all of that in latter chapters, it's usually best to explain some of the obvious things in the first chapter.

There are orthographic errors like Camilla pointed out. Perhaps it might be best if you got yourself a beta reader. Also you might find this site (http://realelvish.tripod.com/sindarin_phrase_book) very useful. Actually, concerning Elvish, Tolkien himself said that it is not possible to be fluent in that tongue. You may know some phrases, etc. but Elvish is not something one in 21st century U.S. would be fluent in...ever!

Good luck with this.

Author's Response: Ok, they aren't in the twenty first century. And it does go on to explain that. They are in Middle Earth. I'm sorry that i failed to explain why Keri doesn't like Arwen and Gimli. I can tell you right now that she doesn't like Arwen because she doesn't think that she did much of anything for the Fellowship. Her reason for not liking Gimli is that she was picked on by other kids at school when they were saying that she loved Gimli. Again, they are not in the twenty first century they are in Middle Earth, so it would be possible for a girl who's best friend is an elf to be good at speaking elvish. Thank you for sending me a review, though. And thank you for asking questions. It not only helps me to repair my work, but it shows that you are a good reader. Thanks for the support. Lindariel Rimdur

Author's Response: Me again. I just have a question. Other than not really understanding a few things, did you like my story and understand most of it? Thanks. God Bless, Lindariel Rimdur
Date: 01/10/05
Summary: During a night in Ithilien, Éowyn awakes from a nightmare and remembers. With light musings on life, death, healing, memories - and love.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Faramir
Genres: Romance, Angst
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1122 Read Count: 2105
Published: 01/18/05 Updated: 01/18/05 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Morning Dew Reviewer: Anais Signed
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Date: 01/21/05
Title: Chapter 1: Morning Dew Reviewer: Anais Signed
You're no longer allowed to write if with every story I am looking around for tissues. Painting with words, indeed!
Date: 01/21/05
Toy Soldiers by wench squad Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 11]
Summary: What will someone do for their sons? Estel and Legolas are about to find out.
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Aragorn, Legolas, Gandalf / Olorin, Elrond, Elrohir, Thranduil, Elladan, Glorfindel
Genres: Drama, Angst
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 17 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 22421 Read Count: 15039
Published: 04/27/05 Updated: 06/23/05 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: chapter 1 Reviewer: Anais Signed
I giggled quite a few times as I were reading this. A very nice idea but you might really want to get a beta. There are a few errors, which are distracting from the story!

Author's Response: Thanks, yes I know. My beta went on holiday during the fic, so it got posted as is, sorry for the typos.
Date: 08/04/05
Summary: From his birth through the final days of his life. This is the magnificent story of one called Estel. Or in human form Aragorn son of Arathorn the heir of Elendil.
Categories: Book-verse Characters: Legolas, Original Character, Aragorn, Arwen, Elladan, Elrohir, Elrond, Erestor, Galadriel, Gandalf / Olorin, Gilraen, Glorfindel, Halbarad, Haldir
Genres: Romance, Action/Adventure, Drama, Angst, Tragedy, Humor, Other, Mystery
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 3426 Read Count: 7445
Published: 06/14/05 Updated: 06/22/05 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2: Telling the People Reviewer: Anais Signed
Interesting premise!
Your sentences are a bit short and somewhat disjointed; it's almost as if you break them down in the middle. Have you got a beta?
Also the chapters are quite short as well. You do get right to the point but sometimes some background information, details, etc. are a very good idea.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. That's why I am not updating. I am working on the writing. I am gonna change a few things and add new stuff. So yeah. Thanks again.
Date: 08/04/05
Fléoden by Blackticket Rated: G [Reviews - 4]
Summary: Legolas and his wife Talathiel have only one child. A small elfling, Fléoden desires nothing but her father's love. But will the secrets his wife has kept from him so long tear his life apart?
Categories: Movie-verse Characters: Legolas, Original Character
Genres: Angst, General
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 3 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2904 Read Count: 3791
Published: 06/18/05 Updated: 06/21/05 [Report This]
Title: Chapter 1: Daughter of the Prince Reviewer: Anais Signed
I doubt that modern words like "OK" would be used by Middle earth characters. Try to stay in character.
Have someone read your work and correct your mistakes. You have a bunch of completely unnecessary commas such as "are you, angry?"
Date: 08/04/05
Title: Chapter 2: The Truth Reviewer: Anais Signed
Elves don't cheat on each other. Ever! They are bonded for life and it's only very rare that they leave each other. I can only think of two as a matter of fact.
Tolkien stressed over and over again that Elves have only one mate for their whole lives. Cheating is somewhat far-fetched and you might really want to explain why Talathiel would do something like that.
Make sure to proof read your work. There are some errors.
Date: 08/04/05