Penname: Camilla Sandman [Contact] Real name: Camilla Sandman
Member Since: 09/08/04
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Summary:
Categories: Orphan
Characters: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Series: Into the West
Chapters: 0 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 0 Read Count: 0
[Report This] Published: 01/01/70 Updated: 01/01/70
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 19/10/04 Title: None

Your friendly neighbourhood moderator here. I've edited your first chapter because it was riddled with mistakes and bad formatting. Please edit your other chapters yourself, particulary in the area of quotes. All new speakers need a new paragraph. Like this: "Hello Legolas." "Hello Laura." Your story as it is extremely hard to make sense of. The rules of this site dictate good spelling and grammar. Please follow this. If you have problems, the forums have threads for beta requests.

Summary: Elrond’s 101 gorgeous daughters happens to Middle Earth. At once. Anything man-like, be it elf, dwarf or... well, man, would do anything to obey them. The whole world gets OOC. In despair, or in some cases, out of boredom, the characters you know travel towards Rivendell. Will they manage to save the world before it is too late? Or are they all doomed?
Categories: Movie-verse
Characters: Elrond, Original Character
Genres: Humor, Parody
Warnings: AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 12025 Read Count: 3693
[Report This] Published: 05/10/04 Updated: 08/10/04
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 23/01/05 Title: Chapter 5: The scouring of Rivendell

She better not be after Faramir! *gives murderous glare* Ah, a chilling morality tale of the danger of having too many children. Or having Sues in general. The dream was particular evil. Don't do that again or I might hunt you.

Author's Response: *bows* I thanketh thou humbly for considering the dream so disturbing... I think. ^_^! But you know Sues, if it's male, they wants it... Oh, well. Thanks!

Mellyn by Tathrin Rated: G [Reviews - 15]
Summary: We have heard tell that Legolas took Gimli Gloin's son with him because of their great friendship, greater than any that has been between Elf and Dwarf. If this is true, then it is strange indeed: that a Dwarf should be willing to leave Middle-earth for any love. And yet, where bonds this strong exist, all things are possible. Now at last, more can be said of this matter... Winner of 2005 Flame of Arnor Awards for Best Friendship!
Categories: Book-verse
Characters: Arwen, Eldarion, Gimli, Legolas
Genres: Drama
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4883 Read Count: 1521
[Report This] Published: 08/10/04 Updated: 08/10/04
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 19/10/04 Title: Chapter 1: Mellyn

Nicely written and interesting exploration of how Gimli might come to join Legolas in his voice. Their banter was particulary lovely. My only real problem is with "Middle Earth". I know a lot of people spell it this way, but Tolkien did write it "Middle-earth". Bit of a mini-peeve. But aside from that, I very much enjoyed.

Author's Response: "Middle Earth"? What was I on? I so know better--I did it rught in my other fics...sigh...Anyway, thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it, and thanks as well for pointing that out so I can fix it! *whaps herself on the forehead*

Fear no more by Cuthalion Rated: G [Reviews - 1]
Summary: Faramir has seen many strange things in his dreams. In autumn 1421, he has the strangest dream of all, and he seeks help from the King and Queen of Gondor to understand it.
Categories: Movie-verse
Characters: Faramir
Genres: General
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1693 Read Count: 1147
[Report This] Published: 10/10/04 Updated: 10/10/04
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 23/01/05 Title: Chapter 1: Fear no more

It felt right to have Faramir have this dream, and it was described lovely. The characters are themselves, though the language is slightly less archaic than Tolkien, this doesn't really bother. It works. My only real niggle is that the use of ellipses feels a bit too much and the quotes jump a bit between European styles ("" instead of having one down and one up). But those are minor things. Overall, I liked.

Summary: Haldir discovers the he is *gasp* pregnant! *AU* *MPreg*
Categories: Lord of the Rings Slash
Characters: Celeborn, Elladan, Elrohir, Glorfindel, Haldir, Orophin
Genres: Angst
Warnings: Slash (same sex pairing), MPREG (male pregnancy), Character Death
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 3623 Read Count: 6977
[Report This] Published: 16/10/04 Updated: 19/10/04
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 20/10/04 Title: Chapter 1: Haldir's Nightmare

This is your friendly neighbour moderator calling. I have edited your story slightly to weed out some mistakes, particulary with quotes ("Hi," he said, not "Hi." he said). Please look the changes over and implement them for your other chapters. The site rules do dictate good grammar and spelling is a must. If you want some help with this, the forums have threads to request betas. Thanks!

Summary: Young WIlliam Turner struggles with his place in the world, and finds another one full of seduction, abuse and blood. //First part of a more than 200 pages long novel about Vampire Will Turner//
Categories: Other Movies
Characters: Will Turner, Captain Jack Sparrow, Elizabeth Swann
Genres: Romance, Action/Adventure, Drama, Horror, Mystery
Warnings: Character Death, AU (alternate universe)
Series: None
Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 11096 Read Count: 9325
[Report This] Published: 05/11/04 Updated: 06/11/04
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 05/11/04 Title: Chapter 1: A Vampire's soul //Chapter one//

Hey, your friendly neighbourhood moderator here. Your first chapter title has a little typo "Vapire" instead of Vampire. Might want to fix that. Also, quotes are like this: "Hi," he said. You use comma when a quote is followed by "he said/she said/she murmured" etc. You also overdo a bit on the commas. Either way, good luck with the rest of the story! (And don't hurt poor Will too much, eh?)

Author's Response: soory about the typo, I was in a hurry at that time... and I know that with the comma, it's something that sneaks in from the german grammer which is my first language... I try my best to correct it... oh, and he won't be hurt much more, Physically at least...

Ashes by eowynangel Rated: PG [Reviews - 4]
Summary: Merry’s thoughts on the battlefield, after the Witch-King encounter.
Categories: Book-verse
Characters: Merry
Genres: Poetry
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 73 Read Count: 1335
[Report This] Published: 12/11/04 Updated: 12/11/04
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 22/12/04 Title: Chapter 1: Ashes

Bit short, but nicely written.

Suedom by Andy and Saphie Rated: PG-13 [Reviews - 22]
Summary: Middle-earth is in pieces; chaos reigns! Two girls, unwillingly trapped as Mary Sues and aided by Gimli and Eowyn, must find the thing that is causing Mary Sues and other badfics to become real in Middle-earth and stop it--all while avoiding the forces of Sauron, lovesick canons, and the Protectors of the Plot Continuum. Can they save Middle-earth or are they target practice?
Categories: Movie-verse
Characters: Gimli, Merry, Original Character, Pippin
Genres: Action/Adventure, Humor
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 26 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 212274 Read Count: 29845
[Report This] Published: 22/11/04 Updated: 06/04/06
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 22/12/04 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue

It's a kind of story that changes direction a few times and it really is a journey that you can't quite predict. But it's well worth it. A very different story and I'm interested to see where it all ends.

Summary: All you ever needed (but perhaps didn't want) to know about GRMA WORMTONGUE! This Guide has been said to be more reliable than a Palantr!

Voted best Humor/Parody at the Flame of Anor Awards 2006.
Categories: Book-verse
Characters: None
Genres: Humor, Parody
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1796 Read Count: 5481
[Report This] Published: 06/12/04 Updated: 06/12/04
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 23/01/05 Title: Chapter 1: The Owner's Guide

Keep him away from blonde Nordic looking women, eh? How about Nordic brunettes? Quite amusing, though I missed a reference to Grima-nicking - in the book he was said to have several things in his chest that others were missing, Theoden's sword included.

Author's Response: Aye. I shall consider this... and that. ^_^!

Biggest Mistake by resa Rated: G [Reviews - 4]
Summary: I'm so tired sometimes It gets hard to breath
Categories: Off Topic
Characters: None
Genres: Poetry
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 77 Read Count: 1369
[Report This] Published: 07/12/04 Updated: 07/12/04
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 24/12/04 Title: Chapter 1: Biggest Mistake

Nice poem. Just a few things - tiny spelling mistake in line two as well as the summary - should be "breathe", not breath. And in the third last line it should be "for you're all I see". Nice tone and feeling to it, though.

Author's Response: Thanks for pointing out my spelling mistakes, i'm a horrible speller! I'm glad you liked it! Thanks again

My Immortal by Artino2 Rated: R [Reviews - 6]
Summary: Elrohir meets the beautiful Eowyn at his sister's wedding. Will she be the deciding factor in whether or not he leaves with his father to Valinor or will he love her enough to die for her?
Categories: Movie-verse
Characters: Elrohir
Genres: Romance, Drama, Angst
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 8581 Read Count: 4287
[Report This] Published: 16/12/04 Updated: 21/06/05
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 16/01/05 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Where the heck did Faramir go in all this? Did he just not meet Eowyn in the Houses of Healing or what?

Passing by Liregon Rated: PG [Reviews - 4]
Summary: The thoughts of Aragorn, Arwen and Eldarion as the former [aka Aragorn] passes away.
Categories: Book-verse
Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Eldarion
Genres: Angst, Tragedy
Warnings: Character Death
Series: None
Chapters: 2 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 2087 Read Count: 2264
[Report This] Published: 21/12/04 Updated: 28/12/04
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 21/12/04 Title: Chapter 1: Aragorn's PoV

Not a bad start and an interesting choice of scene. Spelling is good, but you might be overdoing the commas a bit. I'll be looking forward to the rest.

Family Bonds by Nethien Rated: G [Reviews - 6]
Summary: Estel (young Aragorn) learns the true meaning of family. Family Fluff. AU
Categories: Movie-verse
Characters: Aragorn, Elrond, Elrohir, Elladan, Glorfindel, Original Character
Genres: General
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 2169 Read Count: 1793
[Report This] Published: 31/12/04 Updated: 31/12/04
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 11/01/05 Title: Chapter 1: family bonds

Oh dear. To put it bluntly, you have a lot of grammar hiccups in this one. For instance, "*YOUR A NO GOOD HUMAN!*" should be "you're". Your is possessive, as in your house or your story. You're is short for you are, as in you're writing this story. Furthermore, you're missing a lot of punctuation, especially in quotes. œI spoke with Glorfindel today he said œHe told me about the bullies should be "I spoke with Glorfindel today," he said. "He told me about the bullies." There's a quite a few like that. And "Sir" is not really a term that would be used in Middle-earth, "my Lord" would be more appropriate. This website requires you to follow certain standards in spelling and grammar. I suggest you get yourself a beta. There's plenty who offer to beta over at the forums here, or you can look elsewhere. It will help your writing a lot, trust me.

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Summary:
Categories: Orphan
Characters: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Series: Into the West
Chapters: 0 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 0 Read Count: 0
[Report This] Published: 01/01/70 Updated: 01/01/70
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 06/01/05 Title: None

Some lovely sentiments in there, but there is a bit of jarring with the world of Tolkien. Elves did not as such date as we would call it, though I'm sure they used their time before finding the one, as that one was forever. Also, you might want to take "she-elf" out, that's actually a bit of an insult, as it was the Nazgul hissing it at Arwen.

Author's Response: Thank you for the honest review. I appreciate it. I am going to look through the piece and make a few adjustments to it.

Summary: What does happen when you go to school with the fellowship of the ring? Four friends will find out! Join Keri, Grace, Audie, and Taylor as they journey through Middle Earth. What they don't know, is that one of their lives is in grave danger! Will they be able to destroy the armies of Isengard in time?
Categories: Movie-verse
Characters: Aragorn, Arwen, Legolas, Gimli, Frodo, Sam, Merry, Pippin, Gandalf / Olorin, Elrond, Rosie, Boromir, Faramir, Thranduil, Original Character
Genres: Romance, Action/Adventure, Drama, Fantasy
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 25 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 27852 Read Count: 18754
[Report This] Published: 09/01/05 Updated: 08/05/05
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 10/01/05 Title: Chapter 1: Four Friends and the Beginnings of an Adventure

You have a few little mistakes that are probably just from not having looked over the story properly and mind your quotation rules (œNamarie, should be "Namarie." when there is no he said or similar behind it.) Fixing these things would improve your story. Good luck either way!

Author's Response: Ok, I'm not trying to be snotty or mean or anything, but dude, I'm twelve! I'm just now learning all of this quotation rules and junk, so, it's not going to be perfect. Thanks for pointing out that I should go back over it though. One question, did you understand it and did you like it? Thanks for the support. God Bless, Lindariel Rimdur

Summary: There are two kinds of legacy...
Categories: Book-verse
Characters: Aragorn, Arwen
Genres: Angst
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 3274 Read Count: 1322
[Report This] Published: 13/01/05 Updated: 13/01/05
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 16/01/05 Title: Chapter 1: Ashes and the Flame

A very interesting story and I love how you have it from Aragorn's POV, thus leaving the reader to speculate how Frodo felt. I couldn't quite imagine Aragorn writing a diary, but it does work within the story. A nice read.

Author's Response: Ah! What a pleasure to have a review from someone whose stories I have enjoyed so much! Thank you! Yes, I rather had to come up with some way of allowing Aragorn to address this thing - and the journal seemed the most feasible, seeing Isildur seems to have kept one (at least, to write down the writing on the ring). I am glad the device 'worked' for you - and that you enjoyed the story. You have given me quite a few hours of enjoyment too! Ariel

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Categories: Orphan
Characters: None
Genres: None
Warnings: None
Series: Into the West
Chapters: 0 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 0 Read Count: 0
[Report This] Published: 01/01/70 Updated: 01/01/70
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 30/01/05 Title: None

Hello, your friendly moderator here. You have a few spelling and grammar issues you might want to weed out (for instance, chapter two should be titled "Massacre" and quotes are done like this - "Hello," Merry said - with commas, not full stops. Also, Legolas dwelt in Ithilien after the war, though he probably did go home to his father's kingdom now and then. But you might want to mention that to not confuse readers. And Thranduil did not really have a palace, but dwelt in caves. I would actually reccomend you get a beta - many writers have them, me included - and they're a great help. You can ask in the forums if you don't know of any or where to ask. I'll be curious to see who this dark threat is - one of the other wizards or another Maia spirit, perhaps?

Winter by Ciela Night Rated: PG [Reviews - 1]
Summary: Gondor's Great Plague of 1636, which rendered Osgilath uninhabitable and wiped out the king's line down to a single nephew, had already swept through the north in last 1635. The combination of disease and a fierce winter almost marked the end of the northern people. This is a story of the kingdom of Rhovanion in the Third Age.
Categories: Book-verse
Characters: Original Character, Other
Genres: Tragedy
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 1301 Read Count: 1416
[Report This] Published: 23/01/05 Updated: 23/01/05
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 24/01/05 Title: Chapter 1: (One shot)

I don't think your story uploaded properly - no text there.

Author's Response: Hmm, right. I've tried again and I think it worked this time.

Summary: What was life like before the ring. Was he liked? Did he have friends? I just would like to see what kind of response I'll get on this site. I have six chapters of this story posted on fanfiction.net under the same pen name
Categories: Book-verse
Characters: None
Genres: General
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Completed: No Word count: 4523 Read Count: 3965
[Report This] Published: 24/01/05 Updated: 28/01/05
Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 24/01/05 Title: Chapter 2: Orcs and Hunger

Interesting premise. You've obviiusly read the book and dug up what you could find there, which of course doesn't tell the whole story. There's a lot about Smeagol that one has to guess and it's a good idea for a story. I'll be interested to see where you take it - I liked the orc-skull finding and the innocence of it all, knowing where Smeagol will end up. There's a punctuaction hiccups, but nothing major, so it didn't bug me. Good start.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. Please continue reading. I would love to know what you think of the rest of it. The chapters to come need a lot of work and are not as well written as they could be so I need all the advice that I can get.

Reviewer: Camilla Sandman Signed
Date: 25/01/05 Title: Chapter 3: Futures

Better riddle than I would written, that's for sure. Interesting that you had the grandmother having me Elves. A few little things that could be fixed - grandmothers home should be grandmother's home, for instance - but it reads and the mistakes are not glaring. Still, if you're feeling a bit worried about your writing, have you considered getting a beta? They really do help a lot. You can ask at the forums here, for instance. And all teh food descriptions made me hungry. Dratted.

Author's Response: Did I say that she met elves? I can't remember. She spent time with the Fallohides (a type of hobbit) who lived near the elves, but I don't think meant for her to have met elves directly. I'm going to have to look that over. I did have a beta, but she's always busy. Maybe I'll check out this forum. Thanks again for reviewing and for reading the story.