Characters: Rosie, Sam
Genres: Romance, Erotica
Warnings: Graphic Sex
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 4519 Read Count: 4835
Date: 11/05/06 Title: Chapter 1: A Little Night Music
Well I enjoyed this very much. I think the quote that best expresses my feelings on this fic came from someone Steve Martin quoted in L.A. Story--"a kiss may not be the truth, but it is what we wish were true."
Your handling of Sam and Rosie's relationship was delightful. I do love the extended metaphor of him as the gardener and she the garden.
I found your imagery and your diction to be quite beautiful, but at times complex to the point of being confusing. Parts of this could stand some streamlining. That's my only real criticism.
Otherwise, it is a little unrealistic, but its unreality was so sweet and charming that I didn't mind it a bit. It made me really wish my fella was here...
Author's Response: I have found that erotic writing is very subjective. What is unrealistic for one is very realistic for another. Of course, not every encounter is \'the perfect one\' as described here, but who wants to read about the one where your bodies started making \'fart noises\' between them, or the one where the dog goosed you with his cold wet nose right at \'that climatic moment\'? ;) When I read erotic fiction, I always keep in mind that this is a highly personal experience and when I write it, understand that the more detail I put into it, the fewer people are going to be able to relate to my particular experience of it. Sadly, it seems the only erotic writing that doesn\'t get criticized is that which no female could EVER experience, that of the slash writers, because no female could ever possibly have a frame of reference from which to criticize it from. Personally, I prefer taking the critique on real observations than \'playing it safe\' by writing something so utterly unrealistic that the majority of those reading it could never confirm or deny what the experience was like. That is just my preference and I respect that it isn\'t shared by many. It is just my nature to take the path less traveled. :p