I am SO glad you decided to update this story. I read what was posted quite a few months back and was so impressed, not to mention hooked! I like the way you write your character Wynter, but I really love the way you write Orlando too.
Hope you continue to update regularly!
Thanks for a wonderful story.
Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much! I know, it takes me AGES to update them, but you can't fight real life *rolls eyes* Wynter and Orlando and really special, so I hope to have more chapters in store soon! :)
I am glad to see an update on this story! What a nice way to spend a "winter" evening! LOL!
I guess Starr will stir things up a lot more than Wynter and Orlando plan. But I am glad that she gave Orlando the excuse to get close to Wynter again for innocent reasons. Or at least that's how they started out!
Hope the next chapter is much sooner! I enjoyed this one very much.
Author's Response: You've got it right! Starr is just what they need right now, more than you imagine... :P Thank you for reading! :D
I am glad that Marissa is thru with her family, and that she doesn't have to deal with them any more. I guess it's a blessing in disguise, cos now she has more headaches, literally.
Here's hoping she can get past the rag photos and just lay low for awhile til the worst is past.
Looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks for the comment! Laying low is definitely going to be something they'll have to do for a while but not before getting to the bottom of the story... Should be interesting who's to blame for the photos and story. More to come shortly!
I can't wait for the showdown! I am more curious than Marissa about why Orlando feels the need to meet with Kate. I sense there is more to the meeting than just getting over pettiness and jealousies. I hope that there is a good resolution for all 3 concerned (and kudos to Marissa for sticking to her guns about a neutral meeting place). Looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: I think what it comes down to it, Orlando has a very hard time letting go of the past AND since Kate was his girlfriend for about 2 or 3 years, there's definitely some emotional investment there on his part, even it is only a friendship thing. I think above all, he has a hard time admitting that maybe she hasn't changed for the better and the best way to that is to see her face to face. After all, if she really responsible for the article and pictures, that would the ultimate betrayal in anyone's eyes.
Hmm...now you have me wondering if the nice Karen that Marissa met is the same "assisstant" Kate is rambling on about! The meeting with Karen and Marissa just seemed to...smooth...too bad Kate had her say, playing sweet at first then going for the jugular...right where it hurt...I can tell Marissa isn't going to let it go...I liked this very much!
Author's Response: I know, it just seems TOO convenient that Karen not only went to school with Kate, but REALLY doesn't like her either. Now whether she is the same "assistant", I'm not sure yet but I do think it would be interesting if Marissa saw what happens when you bond with someone over a common enemy.
Hope that this ominous phone call is not what I think it is! Please don't let it be Kate doing something rash like "attempting" suicide!
Other than that I enjoyed this chapter, as it kind of is laying the groundwork for the eventual formal commitment between Orlando and Marissa (dare I say marriage!?)...more soon please!
Author's Response: Oh you may dare, I mean that's usually why couples get engaged, right? And as far as the phone call, I'm not ENTIRELY sure what's going on with Kate or why she needs to get therapist involved but somehow that seems a bit extreme, but then she hasn't exactly been poster child for normalcy to date has she? Hmm, what IS that call about? Guess we'll just have to wait and see.
I don't know why but break-up/make-up chapters make me smile...not the break-up part, the make-up part...Orlando was well on the way to breaking up with Missy, yet I felt the desire for him to want to be talked out of it...Dom to the rescue!
I hope this episode in their relationship only strengthens them. Marissa didn't know Orlando back then, I think he may have overreacted somewhat to her confession. And Marissa learned something too, I believe she sort of grew up in the time between the fight and the reconciliation. I am glad "everything was alright" as you said.
Author's Response: You're quite insightful, I must say; yes, I think they both learned something from this but that's going to be nothing compared to what they'll learn soon.
I am loving the perspective of this story with Achilles as a woman...I just saw "Troy" again last nite on TV, so I was elated there were a couple more chapters to read today. I think you are very skillful in your storytelling, that you use the dialogue from the movie and tweak it for this tale. I, for one, can't think of a thing to tell you to improve. This is good as is! Thanks for a great read!
Happy to have you back AND 2 chapters to read! I really really really! like Achilles as a woman, it's just rich how your perspective changes when the character you watched on the screen is now a female. But you capture the essence of the film version very well, and I am anxiously awaiting the next couple of chapters, I am assuming the reunion of Achilles and Paris in her tent on the beach! (YAY!) More please!
I don't know what advice I'd give you, cos you seem to be doing fine on your own. All of this is of course leading up to the Achilles/Paris encounter, so I hope you don't leave us hanging now! :-O You have lots of room to do your own thing at this point, cos it's the part of the story that you will create. I am looking for maybe a big conflict between Achilles and Agamemnon regarding the treatment of Paris, leading up to the part where she rescues him from the soldier's having sport with him, and takes him to her tent. Other than that, I think you are doing super on your story, I for one am enjoying it immensely. Pam
ahh...I had no doubt your Paris was going to be as skilled in his "department" as Achilles is in hers! Now we all have to wait breathlessly for chapter 19! Hurry! :-)
This was so very descriptive and made me feel the tension, anger and desire acutely! (cold shower time!)
I like that each of these characters fight for domination of the situation, Paris wants to forget certain aspects of what happened (or almost did) to him and Achilles for trying to right the wrong done to him. They both are used to getting their way, and being in complete control of their destiny. (Paris is more of a let-the-chips-fall kind of guy) But being royalty Paris had been indulged, and I imagine he's in shock at this point to the extremes he's seeing in Achilles. Also how she stirs him!
I liked this chapter a lot!
Author's Response: OMG! Thanks so much. I love it when reviews like this are actually detailed. Although I like it too when people just tell me whether they do or don't like what I'm doing, it's great to actually know what it is that people are getting from what I do. Thanks a whole lot!
I am glad that Achilles continues to take an interest in Paris, I just wonder if all her intentions are noble (lol!)...thanks for continuing a great story!
Excellent imagery! I look forward to the tent at last!
This was very vivid in the movie and it was no less so in this chapter. When Achilles seems content with the status quo, choosing not to deal for the moment with what goes on outside the confines of the tent, it's as if she feels for the first time what it's like to have a normal life. Eudoras' interruption was just a jogging reminder to what lay beyond the tent flaps, and as tempting as Paris was, she still had the sense of duty to her country and men. But I liked this particular distraction very much! Glad you are going to update more often!
I like this story a lot...but I have one question...the dragon hasn't been around in a LONG time! Is he shadowing this group? *wink*
Keep up the good work, I am enjoying the journey!
Author's Response: I'm glad you like the story. No shadowing, but don't worry, Treco will return in a most unexpected fashion.
I was happy to see an update, as I am really enjoying this story.
I am glad for now that Legolas' journey is ended so maybe he can heal...and that
Aragorn and he can formulate a plan.
BTW, where is that pesky dragon? LOL
Author's Response: I'm happy you are enjoying the story. Yes, Legolas can rest now, and he and Aragorn will definitely need a plan. Treco will be showing up soon but perhaps not the way you think.
Another good part of the story. I love a mystery, and a mystery woman is even better! I have all the questions in my mind that Aragorn does, and hope to find out next chapter!
Thanks for the excellent addition.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I like to keep my readers guessing. It will take several more chapters to answer all the questions, but they will come---eventually.
My first thought about the last paragraph was that Allaura isn't what she appears on the surface to be! Am I close? Does the jewelry change her?
All in all, it was a good chapter, I am glad Leggy is healing and getting better, I think that to get out of their jam, it will take both Aragorn and Legolas to accomplish their escape.
Please give us more soon!
Author's Response: You are correct. Allaura isn't what she seems. The jewelry doesn't change her exactly, but it is a factor in the story. Thank you. Escaping will be very hard for our boys. More will be coming.
I don't know, but I am guessing that Allaura has a large creature making big noises in her castle! LOL!
I hope that the reason that Aragorn has been brought out is to help her deal with the dragon...unless I am way off base! And I hope he bargains his and Legolas' freedom from the dungeon in exchange for his help..
Your descriptions are quite vivid, it's easy to imagine each setting as the story shifts from outside to inside, daylight to dark.
Keep up the good work and please update soon!
Author's Response: The first part is correct. Sorry, but your next guesses are 'way off base', as you put it.. Keep trying, though. I love to hear what my readers are thinking. Thank you very much. I try hard to give everyone a vivd pictue of what's going on. I will update soon.