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Reviewer: Shadow Maiden Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/10/08 - 02:50 pm Title: Chapter 1

This poem really describes how a lot of people have treated me because I love Lord of the Rings or anything else, really. The last stanza reminds me of a part of an Evanescence song:
I won't lie to keep you near me and in this short life, there's no time to waste on giving up.
(Lacrymosa) I don't know if you've heard their music or not, but you should. It helps me through so much and I think it might help you.

Reviewer: Ria Signed [Report This]
Date: 25/06/07 - 02:16 am Title: Chapter 1

While I agree with NiRi that rhyming poems are better with meter, I like the rhymes you chose. Also, I'm a big fan of structured poetry, so I think you should rock the poetic devices.

I'm sorry to hear about your experience. It's a sad fact that pretty much everybody is miserable during those years. Life gets much better after highschool, and the selection of people to hang out with does too.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I'm starting to realise that it gets better with time. When i wrote this poem, I felt I that i was alone. But now I've simply stopped caring about anything anyone says about me.

Reviewer: Sharpe_and_Harper Signed [Report This]
Date: 27/05/07 - 09:39 pm Title: Chapter 1

I actually think that this was very well written. And, when it comes to your friends, it's their loss; they lost a good friend. Hang in there! ~God bless

Author's Response: Thank you, your review made me very happy and joyful!!!!!

Reviewer: iggybaby Signed [Report This]
Date: 27/05/07 - 08:30 pm Title: Chapter 1

Writing peotry is a way of describing feelings and such. So it's natural that you'd vent your anger while writing poetry. I let my own feelings of guilt, loneliness, depression and yes anger in my poetry. so don't worry about us reviewers. poetry is free expression. it was a great poem! keep on expressing yourself!
iggybaby

Author's Response: hannon-le. thank you for the review. it was really haertening because this is the first time i have written poems.

Reviewer: Nieriel Raina Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 27/05/07 - 08:25 pm Title: Chapter 1

Being a teen is hard, isn't it? You chose right in that if these peole are treating you this way, they are not really your friends. My only crit as far as style goes, is that it would be better to keep this free form, and not try to make it rhyme. Rhyming poems need to have meter as well, and this just doesn't. Poems do not have to rhyme to be beautiful. Glad you got this off your chest. There is nothing wrong with the things you like. You just need to find some friends that like it too. ~NiRi

Author's Response: Thank you. I will take your advice. Your review is very encouraging.

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