I love your rhyming scheme!
This is an awesome poem!
**Adds to favorites
Author's Response: Thanks, OEG. I actually wrote it about 38 years ago when I was in Vietnam. Only recently did I think of adapting it as the work of a fledgling ranger in camp near the shores of the River Anduin.
A response to Ria's review:
Orion is :
It just depends on what language you are using when referencing the constellation.
Also, I think that it would be rather hard to find Elvish equivalents of our major constellations that fit into the rhyming, so I disregarded that part of the poem.
Author's Response: Actually, I thought about using Elvish equivalents to some of the constellations, but then I realized that Pocosin would be writing this in Westron, which would appear as English to us.
That's pretty good!
Usually, I find the obvious rhyming distracting and detracting, but this time, it nicely complements the idea of the poem.
Author's Response: At the time I wrote it, the rhyming seemed a bit self-conscious, but then I don't consider myself a professional poet. Nevertheless, the poem has already been published in a major newspaper and a local magazine, so it can't be that bad.
Great topic for a poem! I love your use of color. Isn't Orion called Menelvagor in Tolkien?
Author's Response: Thanks, Ria. In Middle Earth tradition, Menelvagor was placed in the sky by Elbereth as one of the guardians against the exiled Melkor. In The Silmarillion he is referred to as Menelmacar, which is Quenya for 'Heaven-Swordsman.' Betelgeuse, the bright star on Orion's shoulder, was known to the Elves as 'Borgil' (Ever-Star).