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Reviewer: Charli800 Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/12/08 - 05:02 pm Title: Twins

It's in the story notes. If you don't think that's important, let me tell you that I'm not the only person who will ditch a story because of awful story notes. That typo was particularly unlucky and dangerous!

Charli

Author's Response: I'm looking into it right now!

Reviewer: Sil Greenleaf Signed [Report This]
Date: 05/12/08 - 08:24 pm Title: Twins

Definitely an odd set of twins, not something I would have thought of, but definitely worth thinking about! Thank you for writing such an original and thought provoking poem. Keep it up!

Author's Response: Thank you for writing such good reviews! I will keep it up. Thanks! I was feeling kind of down about my writing before I read this and now I feel great!

Reviewer: meerkatalex Signed [Report This]
Date: 05/12/08 - 12:58 pm Title: Twins

Unusual twins, but quite right in your description and explanation. Well done for another beautiful story/poem!

Author's Response: Thank you! I can't believe how well I write poems. I never thought I was a poet so this is a pleasant surprise. Thank you for reading:))

Reviewer: Kitt Otter Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/12/08 - 06:44 pm Title: Twins

Oh, very nice. I like the moon being called the stars' caretaker. I never would have thought the moon and fire had so much in common.
-Kitt

Author's Response: Yeah, it was kind of an accidental dicovery.

Reviewer: Charli800 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/12/08 - 03:44 pm Title: Twins

"catched" - caught or perhaps you mean catches

I like the palindromic rhyme scheme. That is very cool and, of course, twin-like.
The idea f fire being your essence, but that you - for want of a better word - strive for the moon, is also very nice. I thought you could have brought it out a little more in the last line, but it's not a big issue.

The thing with a spellchecker is that it's not in a rush, so it notices when you mistype 'catches' as 'catched' and make it look like you can't even use past participles properly ;)

I see the site lumps favourite stories and authors into one, so I hope it emails me when you update. It's not letting me favourite things at the moment, for some reason.

Happy writing,
Charli

Author's Response: I understand about caught but I don't know what you're talking about. I'm looking at my copy of Twins right now and I never wrote catched. Excuse me if I'm wrong. Could you tell me where you see it? Hope you figure things out alright:))

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