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Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: GreenGreatDragon Signed
aw such a sweet and sad story! a couple things i would say as concrit would be to keep working on "in-between" things; the story seemed to jump around alot. it needed some transition sentences. also, the word "okay" wouldn't have existed in lotr, so i would put "fine" or "alright" instead. other than those few things, though, it was very enjoyable!

Author's Response: Thanks. This was my first fan fic and why I did not edit it after I dunno :-/ I appreciate your critique.

Author's Response: Thanks. This was my first fan fic and why I did not edit it after I dunno :-/ I appreciate your critique.
Date: Mar 10 2010 01:05 pm [Report This]
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