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Reviewer: Kingsdaughter Signed [Report This]
Date: 28/03/12 - 07:20 am Title: Prologue

It has potential, but I seriously doubt a teacher would do nothing for five minutes when one of her students has collapsed. It would be her job to help the student.

Reviewer: Shiny Dragon Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/07/10 - 02:43 am Title: Prologue

I really like how close everyone is. This story looks like it will be an interesting read. Keep it up.

Author's Response: Thanks.

Reviewer: NessaMahtar Signed [Report This]
Date: 05/07/10 - 02:34 pm Title: Prologue

This story has a lot of potential! I like the different characters, and how close they are, and how you seem to know each one.
The only issue that I can see possibly coming is that sice you know the characters so well, you just use them easily without proper introductions and such. The reader could easily get confused, since you just introduced them all at once. Could you maybe give a little background and give more depth about the characters for the reader to remember?
But I like it so far, and I will hopefully continue reading this! =)
Well done =)

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I will try to remember that.

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