The armies of Mordor, driven ceaselessly by their masters, march ever onward towards the West. The Dark Lord Sauron sits upon his black throne, eagerly anticipating the final victory as he watches history unfold through the palantir.
With Gondor fallen, will Rohan be conquered at last... and then the rest of Middle-earth?
Characters: Aragorn, Eomer, Gandalf / Olorin, Glorfindel, Mouth of Sauron, Nazgûl, Orcs/Uruk-Hai, Original Character, Sauron, Thuringwethil, Witch King
Genres: Action/Adventure, Drama, Erotica, Fantasy, Horror, Tragedy
Warnings: AU (alternate universe), Character Death, Graphic Sex, Rape, Violence
Series: The Circles of Power
Chapters: 44 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes Word count: 165913 Read Count: 79684
I have to say it again, you two are superb. The way you bring this to life, your vocabulary, use of the English language, the way your characters, whoever they might be, are drawn, is magnificent!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for your very kind words. Elfhild and I put a lot of research into the background of our stories and it is very gratifying when we get compliments. We hope to do a series of books on the \"What if Sauron had regained the One Ring?\" plotline. Pure AU, but it is fun to speculate.
This is absolutely the best story dealing with the War of the Ring era and after that I have ever read. The only other one which is similar is A Dawn Of Many Colors, which also begins about the same time frame. Both are AU and both are outstanding.
The writing is elegant and descriptive and dramatically beautiful, it *feels * completely authentic, even if it is AU .
The dialogue is wonderful and it is * epic * and you do not get many epics on fanfiction. I look forward to the next in the series! Well done!
Considering I will 99.9% of the time read only Elf-centered fanfic the quality of your writing and story is immense to hook me and keep me hooked, most of the time I will start something and loose interest but this was all gripping and superb!
Author's Response: Fanari, thank you for your kind comments about our story and for sticking with us until the end of Book One. When I wrote the first seven chapters, I wanted the story to merge seamlessly into the canon and then blossom out from that solid root in Tolkien\'s \"official histories.\" I\'ve seen alternative universe stories which are set in the months and years after Sauron (or Saruman) won the war, but I wanted readers to have a little glimpse of life as it was before the war. Hence this idyllic scene of farm life - peasant maids milking the cow and feeding the chickens, father and son digging a well, mother planting a garden. It\'s just an average day in a village of the Eastfold. But then everything changes in an instant - a rider approaches, bearing news of Saruman\'s defeat and the Muster of Rohan; war with the Lord of Mordor is imminent, and all able bodied men are commanded to follow their king and come to the aid of Gondor. Father and son go off to war and the women are left behind to spend their days in darkness and fear.\r\n
\r\nIn my portrayal of the women, I was inspired a lot by Aragorn and Eowyn\'s dialog in \"The Passing of the Grey Company.\" \r\n
\r\n\"\'A time may come soon,\' said [Aragorn], \'when none will return. Then there will be need of valour without renown, for none shall remember the deeds that are done in the last defense of your homes. Yet the deeds will not be less valiant because they are unpraised.\'\r\n\"And [Eowyn] answered: \'All your words are but to say: you are a woman, and your part is in the house. But when the men have died in battle and honour, you have leave to be burned in the house, for the men will need it no more.\'\"\r\n
\r\nEowyn wanted to fight with the men, not sit at home and wait for the men to return - or the forces of Mordor to invade. I wanted to do a story about the women who waited at home, and became just statistics in the histories - either captured or killed, their names and lives forgotten. They do not do anything that would be considered brave and heroic by the historians, but yet they possess a quiet sense of bravery. It takes strength and courage to keep from going mad when your home is destroyed, your relatives murdered, and the fate you face is one of dire uncertainty - slavery in an enemy land.\r\n
\r\nAngmar and I wanted to write a story about the characters, races and nationalities which neither Tolkien nor his fans wrote much about, such as orcs, Nazgul, Haradrim, Khandians, and Rhunians... even lowly peasants of Rohan and Gondor. With the exception of Sam, Tolkien mostly wrote about nobility and the upper classes. We like to give the poor folk a say. :)\r\n
\r\nWe\'re glad you liked what we have written. And, yes, The Circles IS epic, and will take many years to complete. In the next book, we leave the great Powers behind for a time and explore the miserable plight of the Rohirric captives.\r\n
I suffer sleep paralysis, is I nap in the afternoon, which is often, and if I stop fighting it and drop back into a doze [ never a deep sleep ] the characters I write of come and talk to me. I can * see * the bedroom, even the clock and the time, and hear external noises, but the character's are right there.
They discuss the stories and some of them, Vanimórë especially, always sound quite amused by me. It's as if I am not up to par, but they're making the best of it. They are the most vivid dreams imaginable, and the characters, from canon to O/C are just as real as if my partner had walked in to talk to me.
It's when Vanimórë says to me words to the effect that: '' But YOU are the dream which we dream, did you not know? '' I think '' Arg. '' >.<
This is , of course, a combination of complete Tolkien obsession and the Sleep Paralysis which I have had since being on a course of anti depressants yeas ago. However, it's a fairly good side effect , [lol] and I quite like it, until I get told that I'M the dream, and I think '' Ok-ay '' time to wake up, missus! :-). Too much of that and I'll be back for more mad pills!
It would be rather good if they were '' hot '' dreams, but no, I get discussions or my leg pulled, typical!
I love Pratchett and those particular books, and I really enjoy how these two crossed over. That's real talent. I am not keen on Crossovers in general, but that was terrific.
Author's Response: It\'s especially flattering that you liked it, then. I\'m a big Pratchett fan too. Two of my favorite Pratchett crossovers (I think they\'re both on this site) are \"Evidence\", starring Vimes and \"Dark Riders\", starring Boromir.
Beautifully written; deep and very sad, as is the whole story of Beren and Luthien, even with the hope it carries. Thankyou
Author's Response: You\'re welcome. And thank *you*! I love reviews! :) The Lay of Leithian is sad, but I think it\'s happy, too. In the end, anyway. The rest of it is very sad. This was my first attempt at writing something sad (or Silmarillion, for that matter), so I\'m glad you think it fits. Thank you for reviewing!\r\n\r\nStill Anonymous
I was just saying the other day I've never read a Mary Sue in fanfic. However, I like your writing and I find this interesting. It also occured to me that in virtually every published novel there is probably going to be a Mary Sue, obviously some better written than others. I have decided never to say anything unless it is encouraging, I am not a literary critic I just know what I like.
You come across as mature and passionate and heck yes, why not some Haldir smut? [ insert waggly eyebrows emoticon here] . Don't be nervous about posting your work; I was/am, but everything that any-one writes is a unique piece of creativity , it's something that a person has done, and comes from their imagination, mind and soul, whether they are 13 or 60. I like your style, I like the fact that you said [honestly] that you write to satisfy your need for Haldir-smut, lol, that means you feel passionately about the subject. In any book, or story, I always look for the author's passion to burn from the page or screen. That and description always pulls me in. I do not want to read a technical manual after all , or I would be.
So do go on. :)
Author's Response: Thank you for your comments, and your encouragement. I know there are a number of readers who do not like Mary Sue\'s, or AU, but I\'m in for anything that\'s written well! I agree that in every novel, there are traces of the auhor in the narrative, so that there are a lot of stories that can be considered \"Mary Sue\'s\". Not just fan fic, but all literature. Or... maybe not. Just my opinion. This fan fic is Mary Sue, 100%. Wish it was me!!
Okay, as some-one whose '' Muse '' [ one of them, lol ] is Sauron's son, I allowed Vanimórë to read this. Rather, he insisted. I try always to stick as close to canon as a story will go, and dislike other races being used - although there's a bit of an '' unknown '' with Goldberry, the Daughter of the River '' whom, broadly could be some sort of water nymph [ Maia ]. But I like your writing style very much, it is nicely constructed and is not stilted or compacted. As a general rule of thumb, I never '' buy '' the female/warrior assasin, not in Tolkien's universe, save for the very rare exception,s Haleth and Eowyn. But reading it as a story, if I was not so steeped in 20 years of Tolkien, I find it a good read, which is what it's all about on an FF site. From Vanimórë's point of view, Sauron would be a lot more evil and probably have her himself, if she was pretty. Sauron is capable of every evil, after all, his Master, Morgoth was the ultimate evil. Nothing was beyond him or Sauron. But if this is your first FF? You show a lot of promise in your writing style. if there really had been sprites, and really a son of Sauron, I would have Vanimórë go and talk to her ;) and say words to the effect of; '' tell him to stick it. '' ;)
Author's Response: I promise, this is my first one. The way I thought of it, actually, was because of a song, and I wasn\'t too keen on sticking another race in there, either, but I tried hard not to make her a mary sue, as you\'ll see as we move more into the story. I just couldn\'t see Sauron thinking of her in that way, for any reason. I kind of don\'t see Sauron as a man, but as the embodiment of evil, so I couldn\'t justify that to myself. And I thank you so much for your review. :) It\'s always nice to get critique.
Had to make sure I was not reviewing one of my chapters >.<
I just wanted to say I have watched Anwyn's character grow over about 3 years now and that she is one of only about 3 OFC's who do not annoy me or come across as Sueish.
It has been like watching some-one grow from I suppose late teens as a girl in Rohan to a married woman and it's been a great experience.
I am glad you decided to post your stories; while I like interactive stories too, I always thought Anwyn could make one on her own. I love Elphir as you write him!
Considering your work and the other stories you are working on, well done for getting so much of this up.
I have seen Anwyn's * epilogue * ( which is still to come of course ) and it still makes me tear up, but I think it's beautiful!
Author's Response: LOL, No worries if you had commented on your own chapter, I almost did that a few times on Dark Empire! “Yeah! That was great…Oh, that’s mine, ooops” lol. Thank you very, very much as it is honestly such a relief and honor to know that Anwyn is one of those prestigious few but she has grown a lot since I first started writing, though at first she was abit of a sue >_< Though one day something just snapped and she fell into more what she is now, still feisty but far from perfect ;) I think I sometimes have too much fun about writing about the imperfections of most things than writing a story where everything is fine and dandy and would just bore me to death. I really love to see beauty in imperfections so I will never go off on how Anwyn is the most beautiful woman in Middle Earth, because she’s not, but she is flawed and interesting enough that even after all this time I am still very interested in writing these stories and with my attention span that is really saying something, lol. It has been an interesting experience because you are right, she has grown a lot even in just this story she has gone from being very young and naïve, and well still quite young but less naïve and more worldly. While I might go back, later, and write some shorter things of her life in Rohan because I enjoy that culture and this story has kind of veered away from it, no purposely but that’s just how its run, she has come to grow up a lot though sometimes its been sink or swim it feels and fortunately she has learned how to swim! Mostly...Interactive stories I really enjoy because it adds the element of something unexpected and new, adding something deeper that I might have missed so I do enjoy them but yes, I think Anwyn is able to carry a story because its never a story just about her really in that she is surrounded by so many different other character it usually becomes more complex on its very quickly and I must say that I do love it. I am so glad that you like the way I write Elphir because I have worried at times that I am not really doing him justice, and I freely confess that I do not understand males and he is far from the average male in that he is more refined and cut from a finer cloth which makes him even more far removed from guys that I know, lol! I think he adds a great counterbalance to Anwyn, In that many respects they are similar while in others they are not in that Anwyn is the one who is going to be doing something rash and acting without thinking while Elphir is the one to wait and then act but that ultimately they bring out the best of each other and to me that it very important in a relationship, Its not one being better than the other but being better *together* Thank you again regarding the epilogue, It is honestly probably the only piece of my writing I will not go back and re-work in that I am quite contented with the way it is now and while that kind of “last chapter” is a ways off I am proud of it, not in the sense that “Yeah, I am an awesome writer, go me” Really, no, but that when I read it I feel like I have really caught it the way it was meant to be. Though I have not understood parts of the epilogue but today I was in the change room at the Hospital (Completely random, I know) and another “piece” of it struck me regarding her choice, another thread that I will work into the story when I get to that point of the story though I can tell now its going to be a rough ride. Thanks very much for the review, It means a lot! *Hugs*
I do so much like this, your people are mature and you have the '' essence '' of Rohan :). I hope more goes up very soon.
I am glad you have more of this up, Anwyn. d:-)
Author's Response: Thank you!\r\nYes, I am glad to get more and more of the story up, even if it just a few chapters at at time :)
Gosh, Anwyn, seems like a hundred years ago we were writing this, eh? I'm glad you are still putting it up, I know some things have to be changed, but it's good to see it, you did such a lot of work!
Author's Response: Ha, yes, It does feel like a hundred years and a *day* actually, lol. It was quite ago that we wrote this and actually I have \r\nnot had to make any huge changes to the story really, other than changing Van\'s name in places and correct spelling\r\nmistakes but I always paranoid there are proably more. It feels good to be putting it together, I am going to try to get\r\nsome chapters tonight as I am still rather flu-ish and tired but I still hate sitting around doing *nothing* so if I can do this at least I will be happy.\r\nYes, alot of work did go into the writing of this but not all mine, I have always apprechiated what you brought to the story tool! :)\r\nBut its one of those things that when you enjoy doing it so much, it doesn\'t really feel like work! :) ;)
Lol, I do not think it is smutty, and I have seen some links on ff.net to some incredibly smutty stuff, yuck!
I always love Elphir's character and what comes across here is love as well as desire and a union of two people who are discovering one another and the deeper facets of their love intimately and freely. yes it is " adult ", but there are ways and ways of writing adult situations and this is definitely a good one, it is romantic, but not fluffy, and passionate but not all mechanics and no feelings which is when writing tends to drop into smut. The emotion makes all the difference in such scenes, I think.
I think they make a good couple in that they balance one another and it is not just a relationship which ends up with them coo-ing at one another in bed, they retain their individuality and discover more about one another's characters as the time goes on.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review, as always, I really, really appreciate it :) I am so relieved it did not come off as smutty because I went back so many times and re-reading things to make sure they did not come off as disgusting. Now I have no problem reading stuff that is “adult” and its all how it is written, the body only does what is natural its only how someone can write of it that will make it seem unnatural and strange. Personally there are just even certain words that can be used in a fanfic that will honestly turn me right off, I just feel if someone can write about sex they can use the proper names for things as well!\r\n\r\nIf it had been pretty much anyone except Elphir showing up in her bed I think Anwyn would have sent them packing pretty quickly, lol, because its just not in her character but with Elphir I have always had the very strong impression that even from the beginning it was always stronger than mere attraction and wasn’t “Your hot, I’m hot, lets hook up” Yeah, no >_< I am very glad that it doesn’t come off as fluffy either, I don’t like fluffy and Anwyn just isn’t a “fluffy” kind of person in any sense, I believe there are moments which can be tender but not “Fluffy” filled with “I wuv you’s” and so on, lol.\r\n\r\nYes, I would definitely say they give a balance to each other and ultimately neither will change in any huge but they will change in ways as they grow older together but that’s natural but I see it more as just a deepening of the relationship rather than a change in personality and whatnot. Again, thank you for the wonderful review, I found it very helpful :)\r\n
What I have been meaning to say for a while is, thanks for letting me get involved in this story. I know you don't write slash and don't read an awful lot of it, although I actually don't think there was any in this particular story, lol, although there was in Dark Empire. But I know some people feel uneasy around it or downright nauseated.
Like I said, this was set a time before Van and Elgalad were lovers and a very long time before Van and Eldarion and was mainly a story about Anwyn, but it was fun to join in and also to watch the story develop around Anwyn and Elphir from the beginning.
Author's Response: You are most welcome, I have always very much appreciated what you bought to this story as well, as this was the first story that I really completed start to finish as I look at the parts I still need to add to this I see there is still a ways to go until I get to check the “completed” box ;) Though thank you for all your hard work in the parts that you added, having Elgalad and Van around for the greater part of the story I felt was a great addition in that they too, however indirectly helped Anwyn’s character grow and deepen as well in that I look it is that in life you will occasion meet people and it doesn’t matter how long you meet them they leave a last impression even if you don’t realize it at the time and you never forget them. I have always known about Anwyn as a character but I felt this was the first time I got under her skin (Revenge! As she is always getting under mine! lol ;) ) and saw more than just who she is and learned more about her loves, fears, doubts and what not.\r\n\r\nActually I am not bothered by slash, It does not offend or disgust me but it is the same in that I feel about any physical relationship whether it be female/male, male/male, female/female, Well, like you I do not read femmeslash really but again not because it offends just that I have never seen it written with as much strength behind it as male/male pairings, but what I am really trying to say is that no matter the genders of the pairing its all in the way it is written. I do get disgusted yes, but only because the writer feels that they must give such in depth description of all body fluids and what parts of the body are involved that you feel like you are reading a pathology report, lol. But I am not prejudice again, this applies right across the board in that even if it’s a heterosexual couple I really do not graphic detail of how they are getting freaky with each other. There is a fine line between what I would consider “Erotica” and then just “Pornographic” and it’s the latter I really have the issue with. I actually began reading slash many years ago, probably before I was even old enough to really be doing so truthfully but it was not Lord of the Rings based, I have to admit, shamefully, that it was Star Wars slash though even at that age I was more interested in the relationship between the characters and not bothered what they were doing with each other at times. \r\n\r\nIt is true that I do not write slash but its not because I take offense, but I have never felt the draw to write it like I do other things and if I was to write I am sure it would be terrible and so I will leave it to others who know how to write it well, such as yourself, to write it ;) :) I would not have been troubled if you had decided to make Van and Elgalad lovers during the story, but it was interesting as Van was fighting so hard during that time against what he wanted to do though he knew he must not. I also found Van and Eldarion very intriguing as well, and found Eldarion’s passing with Van there very touching as well. It is true it was a story about Anwyn, kind of exploring who she is and where she came but I never wanted to write a story centered entirely around her if that makes any sense, she is not a “must be the centre of attention all the time” kind of character and so having other characters such as Van, Eldarion, Elgalad, Elphir in the story I thought really helped in the story in that it became more complex and deepened with all these other strong characters about as well was important.\r\n
I am glad you have come back to this Anwyn, I know you have been working hard on it, and I had almost forgotten myself that it is a long story. I think I'll re-read it again. :)
Author's Response: While it has taken me seemingly forever and then a day just to get this far I never intended of not finishing Child of Storms though as I go back I am making changes and re-writing things so that I am happier with them but I do fully intend on getting this done even if it does take me abit longer. I am usually up to writing something, it just may not be linear as I could be writing something that comes to me that happens twenty years from now and then I tuck it away for later. It is definately a long story, lol, but it is the foundation that set's up everything else in Anwyn's life and what goes from here sets up alot and while I might write the occassional short story of stuff that happens before this story begins which is 25 year's after the war of the Ring becuase Tolkien really did leave thing's quite open in that you can assume thing's were mostly quiet but that is only in comparison to all that happened before. Right now I am working back and fourh between my posts in Dark Blood and this, when I need a break from this I go and work in Dark Blood for abit and then come back but I will be happy to finish this becuase its important to have a good foundation and while I think the length of this story will scare off alot of people, as I think I am chapter 73 already, lol, It needs to be completed, too much work has been started to just leave it.
I love the way this story that you wrote showed the intrigue that was happening in Dol Amroth and among it's court ( which explained what happened to Anwyn and Elphir in Dark Lands ). Elphir is such a wonderful character, ( I always liked Imrahil in the ROTK book ) That I'm glad you've made him your own in your writing. There's such a lot to tell about Elphir and Anwyn and their own life, yet I was very glad you wrote in Dark Lands, as it was giving a different viewpoint to what was going on with Van and Elgalad.
Author's Response: Thank you! I go on the assumption that any place there is a gathering of power, wether it be in Gondor, or the Court of Dol Amroth, which is part of Gondor of course! That there is always bound to be some intrigue as well as those with power will always be keen to somehow gain more power, though I am not saying all does this for selfish reasons but there are usually a few bad apples amongst the bushel. I really enjoy writing Elphir, becuase apart from a name, a birth of day and a place on a family tree there is nothing much about him so I have, as you have said, make him my own but I am with you in that I think Imrahil is a wonderful and much under apprechiated character in the book's and so I do throughly enjoy writing with both of them. There is alot to tell about Elphir and Anwyn, I am still working to sort it all out as idea's never come to me in any kind of a linear sense so sometimes I am abseloutely stumped on how to get from one point to another with them but I think that ultimately they were made for each other, at the risk of sounding cliched, eeek! But I mean in the sense that they play off each other's strength's and can have arguments and disagree but it never becomes personal or childish with them screaming "I hate you!" or anything like that. I have alway's seen Elphir as a very strong character, but he carries it in a far more quieter, more dignified way than Anwyn and in that they are well suited. I am really, really happy I had a chance to write in your Dark Land story becuase it was really different than anything I had written before and I adored having that kind of creative challenge and it also gave me a chance to be part of a story that mixed a very human element with something that was also supernatural which I really enjoyed and it was also striking the difference in not only the viewpoint that was female but mortal perspective as well.
Wow, Anwyn, I cannot believe you finished! I bet you need to entally ' stretch ' now. :)
So many female characters tend to be written of shallowly, that it has always been a great pleasure for me to read about Anwyn, and to contribute as and when, and as for your contribution to Dark Lands ( formerly Dark Empire until I decided Tanith was not really an Empire, XD ) I am delighted that you wrote within it, as I felt that Tanith see from a woman's perspective was needed. There were ' supernatural ' events taking place, but I felt the story needed grounding with Anwyn and Elphir's separation and imprisonment and helplessness. So all my thanks to you.
I am also glad that you plan to continue Anywn's story in further books. Not many female characters are drawn in such a way that I want to follow their stories, ( too many are Sue's unfortunately and have very * young * voices ) but the ones that do are always fascinating and full-blooded and mature, and Anwyn is one of them. I also love Elphir as a character. To write rather outside the box and use a canon character who is almost off the map and weave them into a story is always great to see when so many OFC's end up with well-known canon males. Elphir has become a wonderful and very real man to me, and therefore I'm very happy that their story is continuing.
Hugs and thanks!
Author's Response: Thank you Sian! Really, I am quite surprised as well! I was playing around with squeezing in another few chapter’s but they started to feel like too much filler which is really not needed so I left those to really concentrate on the last chapter. Yes, I definitely did abit of a mental stretch…before continuing. With writing Anwyn I always feel like she was a woman who really did once live which is why I never write things the way I feel they should be because that would just feel wrong, and that sense of wrongness will drag on me until I go back and change it to whatever feel’s right. Which is often nowhere near what I initially started with! Unfortunately often with the writing an OFC it seems most people are met with “Your character is a sue unless otherwise proven” and often just saying “My character has faults and therefore is not a sue, so there!” Is often simply not enough. Middle Earth was a fascinating but ultimately imperfect place filled with imperfect people which lead’s all sorts of interesting direction’s a story can go. In a way it is not different from our own modern time in that there were prejudice’s and hatred and ignorance which could taint a character but when I read a story with a main character, male or female, who is supposedly an adult but still comes off as shiny and bright as a new penny that does not strike me as realistic and why they come off as a “young voice” I believe that a character is very much formed by the place where they were raised. I was so pleased to write within Dark Empire as apart from the slight hitch we hit I think it turned out really quite well and I really liked the supernatural element of the story while that did not affect Anwyn really it gave me a chance to delve into her greatest fears of being trapped, controlled and utterly separated from those who she loves. Though while it was difficult to write at times it also deepened her as a character and I feel like I understand her a great deal better now. I am really quite excited to continue on with writing Anwyn as I still have so much that need’s to be done with her and I had it mapped out for the most part in my head I really need to get it written down though and I am so very pleased that you want to continue to follow :) I have really come to enjoy Elphir as a character as the more I write of him the more real he is becoming in my mind as having also lived long ago and I understand why him and Anwyn just seem to absolutely click with each other even though they were raised so differently. Elphir is a character that certainly does not deserve being downshifted to being simply known as “Anwyn’s Husband” as he lead an interesting life of his own and he play’s his own unique part in the story as Anwyn’s story is not only about her but there were other’s who played their own vital parts as did Vanimórë and Elgalad and Eldarion and so many others, albeit in different ways it takes all sorts of threads to create something beautiful and unique. I think for the most part why he is not really written of because he does not have a ‘face’ like say Legolas, Aragorn, Boromir, etc where they have seen them in action so to speak and feel more drawn towards them and want to be their wives/sister’s/friend’s and so on while I find Elphir interesting as there is so little written on him but I can come along and still give him a voice as I do not think Tolkien would have bothered giving Imrahil son’s if he just wanted them to eternally be a name, and I find Imrahil a fascinating character as well but I have seen so little written about him as well. I am so absolutely thrilled to hear that Elphir comes off as a real man to you, as that is exactly what I am striving for :D Not simply just a dashing, charming Prince….Well, he is, lol but underneath still a man and there far more to him than just that. Thank you so much again, your review mean’s so much to me! Hugs! Bayley
I liked the way it was written. I also am so glad to see Haldir survive the war, for only in the film did he die, and yet people seem to think that is also in the books, when , of course it is not. Hope you write something again, soon!
The one thing I would say, which I would say to any-one who writes of Elves [ it is just a pointer, not against your writing at all] Tolkien never uses contrations when writing of Elves, or as them , eg: didn't, hasn't, wouldn't , etc. It it a more '' Mortal '' way of writing than Elven. And it seems to always detract from the wonder and ancientness of the Elves. That is not aimed at you in any way, as I very much like your writing style, but I find contractions do not enhance the Elves; although they are fine for Hobbits. ;)
Apart from that; I do like it a lot!
Author's Response: Thank you for the advice. I see what you mean about my writing and the elves, and will remember it in future stories.\r\nI\'m glad you liked it.\r\nThank you again for the advice.
Aww, young Elladan is a darling . I don't spend time round small children either but he sounds like an authentic, fightened small elf. I hope you find time to update with all your other work!
Author's Response: Yeah, he is really sweet. I was worried that the speech was a bit too grown up, but then again, Elflings are supposed to be a bit more developed than human children. \r\nI\'m not sure when I\'ll get round to updating my other fics, at the moment I\'m writing this, Shadow Ranger\'s birthday present and Chains...This will be updated in a day or two though!
This is - wow! Extremely gutsy, excellent! I could be there, hearing it seeing it. Not that I would want to be! >.< I actually was wondering if it was real , when I read it first, as Imladris did suffer a siege during the Angmar wars, but I don't know how close the forces got. And of course there was not a Balrog there, but I definitely would not want a dream that realistic! Terrific!
Author's Response: XD I wanted to practise Dark Fic writing, for my Angel fics. They\'re gonna be VERY dark in places *Turns on flashlight*\r\nlol. Thanks hunni ^.^
You know; your talent lies in Darkfic's d;-). I really like this; keep writing.
Author's Response: Ooh, it does?! Excellente! That\'s good, I love being evil!