Out of all of these I'd say number nine would definitely get you shot on sight. Without questions! ~ Iri
I'm with Melda - definitely more descriptions and a more easy-to-read layout would benefit this tale. I like the concept definitely but it's just a little hard to read. ~ Iri
Author's Response: Sorry I'm still new at this
Oh no, don't be sorry! Like I said your concept is great, just needs a few structure and grammer pick ups to make it easier to read! Otherwise it's great. We are all new at this at some point and I found that advice from fellow authors and readers helped me along the way! My tales used to be a right mess don't worry! With practice it'll become easier! Keep going! ~ Iri
Author's Response: Aww so sweet. But chapter nine is gonna be great
There are so many brilliant phrases and word-turns in this chapter it's hard to identify them all. I love Gimli's brief slide into immaturity with the beard tails in his mouth. I also do especially like 'They had things to do, places to go, Pippin to see'. And possibly my fav quote of this chapter is again Gimli's : 'Yes, yes, everyone is very well pleased with everyone else...'. Hmmm maybe it's just Gimli who made the first half of this shine? As for the little tidbit at the end of the chapter, this is gorgeous, a moment of realization for Elladan which is very well handled. Amazing work! ~ Iri
Author's Response: Thank you, Irial. Gimli always 'speaks' to me- and I just find him such an intruiging and warm character - that habit he has of sucking the ends of his beard shows in times of extreme anxiety. I'm pleased you like the Elladan bit- as you get trhough Sons you'll see why this I wrote this.
Oh how very clever of Legolas. And how sweet too. A beautiful intervention! ~ Iri
Author's Response: Is that the bit where he distracts Gimli and reminds him Aragorn is who they follow? Again, all of this was just there waiting to be put down- I find the best bits are when the action is 'uncovered' - it sort of writes itself. These first chapters all wrote themselves and took little time- it's later that I slowed down - not that this will affect you! I did keep folks waiting sometimes. Again, thank you for letting em know you are enjoying this Iri
I absolutely adore how you've described meeting the woodsmen from Legolas' tiny point of view - actually the sentence 'seemed to touch the sky with his red head' made me laugh so loudly I scared my cat half to death! These woodsmen sound like a great people - I'd certainly feel safe around them!!
Glad to see our two travellers safe for the moment! ~ Iri
Author's Response: I have to admit, it was fun writing these woodsmen. I guess there's really not much known about them, so I got to do a little bit of oc stuff here. The brothers were the most fun, the kind of guys I'd like to hang out with.
Ugh poor Legolas trapped like a caged animal! The description of the cell makes my skin crawl. I hope Grima gets what's coming to him sooner rather than later! ~ Iri
Author's Response: Yea, it was tough torturing Legolas, but someone has to do it. Grima will get his eventually.
All I could think about during this chapter was screaming RUN LEGOLAS RUN at the top of my lungs! A daring rescue coordinated by Eowyn! And the beginnings of Dernhelm, what a clever inclusion of her alter - well done once again :) ~ Iri
Author's Response: Like I mentioned before, I just love Eowyn's character. I knew it had to be her who helped Legolas escape. She'd never let him rot in a dungeon. Eomer won't be too happy to learn that his sister put her life in danger, but he'll get over it. She's one damn tough chick!
Oh my gosh what an intense getaway! Legolas copped just about everything that could possibly have been thrown at him! And hooray for Arod coming to fight for his master like that.
A wonderfully intense action packed chapter L8. Poor Legolas seems to be constantly being chased from his homes :( and now for the first time he's truly out in the cold by himself. I hope his journey gives him some reprieve at some point! ~ Iri
Author's Response: It's always darkest before the dawn, and Legolas is on some very dark times. But there is a change coming, as well as more challenges.
Oooh intriguing! I can't wait to find out why a Galadhrim was so far from home and how on earth she fell into the hands of the Southrons!
I love Beechbone, he reminds me of Quickbeam :D
Another twist in the tale and the excitement continues! ~ Iri
Author's Response: This is the part where I get to branch off from canon and do my own thing for a while. It's difficult trying to stick to the original story line while putting my own twist to it. And now, as Legolas journeys away from Rohan, he'll begin to understand his heritage better. He's getting into his element now, Ents and forests and all.
Wow. Not at all what I was expecting when I suspected Rota was up to something. What a way for her treachery to be revealed!
I'd write more L8 but I have the next chapter to devour! ~ Iri
Author's Response: Legolas' loose ways are getting him in trouble, and Rota is just the one to put the nail in the coffin. He's met his sexual match, I think.
Hello there!! I had already started reading this previously but got side-tracked (life- you know how it is) so I decided to start all over again. And so the barrage of reviews begin anew :D
To begin - what an intensely emotional and action-packed opening chapter! And I do love the little background you give us to set the scene and the tone for the story. I love Thranduil and Legolas as you know so my heart absolutely broke with Elhadron's when he realised it was all over. And I love the history here between Lorien and Mirkwood - this will play very nicely in later chapters I'm sure.
Thankyou for introducing yet another amazing tale for the rest of us to devour :D ~ Iri
Author's Response: Hi Irial. Hope it's as enjoyable the second time.
Well Legolas is certainly becoming flavour of the month isn't he? :P
Oh the plan sounds good and should work but I'm so anxious for this trio. And it think it's a great decision to keep Legolas in Rohan for now.
Your depiction of how Theoden deteriorates and Eowyn's reason for abandoning her training is fantastic and again not one we've seen often. I love your talent for finding the blank spots and loopholes in the tale we all know back to front and giving it a entirely different and fresh perspective! ~ Iri
Author's Response: Lol, 'flavor of the month'. He's the ice cream man, and the girls all stop him as he's passing by, hahaha!!!! Oops, David Lee Roth/Van Halen, I'm showing my age. Anyways, Legolas is having some fun, for now anyways. Thanks for your comments about Theoden. I've always imagined the transformation would have been slow enough that people would think he was just getting on in years, but quick enough to work with Saruman's plans to destroy Rohan.
Who wouldn't want Legolas for their first kiss? How sweet that Eowyn gets to experience it, like she said, with a friend not a stranger.
Glad to see Legolas is on the mend! Hope he's not as moody in the future or an injured hand is going to be the least of his worries if he tries to take on a Rohirrim again! ~ Iri
Author's Response: I think Eowyn has been crushing on Legolas for a while. And what better teacher than an elf. She's one lucky girl.
Oh my gosh what an intense battle! And I would not have had the patience Legolas had - that orc would've been beaten to a bloody pulp the minute he confessed. I'm very glad Eomer understood Legolas' wrath in that moment.
I really loved Eomer's uniting of the men and it gives a really great moment to the young Captain, the start of the time his men became loyal to him above the King.
A wonderful chapter, L8, this story is just evolving into an absolute masterpiece! ~ Iri
Author's Response: Thanks Irial. I'm glad you're liking the story. Knowing what we know will happen in canon, I wanted to touch on that moment that Eomer transforms from a soldier, to a captain, to a real leader of men. It was said that the people of Rohan loved Eomer, especially after he became king. That wouldn't have happened overnight. He had his men's respect long before that. He's my favorite male human character from LotR, a very honorable man.
I was totally cheering for Legolas, hoping he'd squish that snake forever! But then I knew you had more angst in store for us and more devilry for Grima to dabble in and so it wasn't to be. But by god I was definitely rooting for Legolas! I just hope between them Eomer, Theodred, Eowyn and Legolas can sort this out before it's too late!
Also I felt crushed when Luta said all those things to Legolas. My heart felt heavy and I was very sad for both of them. Very well written and well played with all the lead up and doubt. Poor Legolas, I can completely understand why he thinks people just keep leaving him all the time. I hope that he and Luta can make amends one day! ~ Iri
Author's Response: Well, all these things that keep happening to Legolas are just forming him and strengthening him, molding him into the elf we all know and love. He never falls into despair, but remembers and learns from these lessons. Luta, though she was under Grima's influence when she said these things to Legolas, knew deep down that it could not be. Legolas has not been around his own kind, therefore he's not thinking about his future. And don't girls seem to mature faster than boys? Losing Luta will make Legolas realize that he has to be more careful with his heart.
Oh geez L8 you're making me teary ALREADY?? Poor poor Legolas!!
By the way your Orcs creep me out. Seriously. They're creepy. I think I'M going to have nightmares about them! Very well and vividly described!
...Gosh.. still teary. Poor Elhadron! :( ~ Iri
Author's Response: I know. I hated doing it, but I had to. I liked Elhadron too, but this will help shape Legolas into the person he will become. Thanks for your comments about the Orcs. Anytime I can get a reaction like yours, I feel like I'm doing my job.
Grima makes my skin crawl! He's so malicious and conniving and...and...well evil! I really want to just punch him and watch him cry like a little girl!
A marvellously composed chapter. These ones are getting a bit darker, leading into what I'm guessing will be some challenging times ahead for Legolas and his friends! ~ Iri
Author's Response: Oh yes, many challenging things coming from here on out. Your review made me laugh, imagining Grima sobbing away, lol.
I LOVE the grand declarations of Legolas and Eomer and Theodred sitting there shaking his head at them - very sweet. And Eomer I'm sure is in for an ear bashing if not a physical bashing from his sister when he finally confronts her!! (My money is on Eowyn!)
I wonder how this conversation will go with Luta's father?? ~ Iri
Author's Response: You know, I imagine Theodred being the leader, Legolas going along, but putting his own twist on things, and Eomer running to catch up to the other two. If it's good enough for the elf, it's good enough for him, whether he's thought it through or not. But like you said, my money is ALWAYS on Eowyn.
Good on Miss Level-Headed! I'm glad Legolas had the sense to speak with Eowyn as well, rather than just taking the advice of the two boys haha. Another beautiful chapter about growth and maturity. I just hope it all turns out okay for Legolas and Luta... this father seems like a huge obstacle to get through! ~ Iri
Author's Response: Legolas is very lucky to have Eowyn to go to. She's always the voice of reason, and these two have become very close friends. As far as Luta, she's his first true love, but the obstacle even bigger than her father is their heritage. Poor Legi isn't considering that just yet, but he's still young.